National Poetry Month
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Taking a Break"Thirty poems in Thirty Days
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Comment from akulkumol
Beautiful writing full of meaning thoughts of life. I really loved the part......
Things will happen, disappointing perhaps, but the sky doesn't fall and in the morning a new sunrise will light us all. Hoping for a new beginning is the inspiration thats keeps us going...thanks for sharing your thoughts.
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Beautiful writing full of meaning thoughts of life. I really loved the part......
Things will happen, disappointing perhaps, but the sky doesn't fall and in the morning a new sunrise will light us all. Hoping for a new beginning is the inspiration thats keeps us going...thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Lovely shot of tulips, Debbie. I have to wonder why you wrote this in centered prose. It's hard to read. Prose is easier to read if left justified. But this has so many rhymes in it, might have broken it up into a poem, but all that aside...
I like the reference to "little things" that have to do... I know that feeling, and they mean a lot these days. I can appreciate the little things more now. :)
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Lovely shot of tulips, Debbie. I have to wonder why you wrote this in centered prose. It's hard to read. Prose is easier to read if left justified. But this has so many rhymes in it, might have broken it up into a poem, but all that aside...
I like the reference to "little things" that have to do... I know that feeling, and they mean a lot these days. I can appreciate the little things more now. :)
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yes, it is nice to take a break once in a while. It's also good to acknowledge that we are not perfect --no one is. Anyone who actually believes they're perfect has serious denial issues. Sure, we can seek perfection, be perfectionists, but striving to be the best we can be is about as close to perfection as we're ever going to get.
The need to please others, and to not let anyone down, is indeed a driving force that can often cause us to overwork ourselves. But, we must realize that while we can please all of the people some of the time, we can only hope to please some of the people all the time. The main thing is that we please ourselves. If we're satisfied with our efforts, then that's all that truly matters in the end.
Balance must be maintained in our lives. Balance between our work, play and home life is essential to a harmonious existence. For us, and everyone else we might come in contact with.
Well done, Debbie. I really enjoyed the internal rhyming, the format, composition, and presentation as a whole.
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Yes, it is nice to take a break once in a while. It's also good to acknowledge that we are not perfect --no one is. Anyone who actually believes they're perfect has serious denial issues. Sure, we can seek perfection, be perfectionists, but striving to be the best we can be is about as close to perfection as we're ever going to get.
The need to please others, and to not let anyone down, is indeed a driving force that can often cause us to overwork ourselves. But, we must realize that while we can please all of the people some of the time, we can only hope to please some of the people all the time. The main thing is that we please ourselves. If we're satisfied with our efforts, then that's all that truly matters in the end.
Balance must be maintained in our lives. Balance between our work, play and home life is essential to a harmonious existence. For us, and everyone else we might come in contact with.
Well done, Debbie. I really enjoyed the internal rhyming, the format, composition, and presentation as a whole.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from emrpoems
Well penned prose poetry
seems to be influenced by a personal experience
Loved the artwork
Things will happen, disappointing perhaps, but the sky doesn't fall and in the morning a new sunrise will light us all. loved these lines that are a fact
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Well penned prose poetry
seems to be influenced by a personal experience
Loved the artwork
Things will happen, disappointing perhaps, but the sky doesn't fall and in the morning a new sunrise will light us all. loved these lines that are a fact
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from l.raven
Hi Debbie, you are so right...some times we have to step back and take a breath...things can over welm us...your poem is very well written..and your flowers could cheer any one up...luff :inda xxoo
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Hi Debbie, you are so right...some times we have to step back and take a breath...things can over welm us...your poem is very well written..and your flowers could cheer any one up...luff :inda xxoo
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from fluffnstuff
oh what a beautiful write this is...and i related to it something awful! You have to have been there to write a piece like this. loved the last sentence especially. fluff
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oh what a beautiful write this is...and i related to it something awful! You have to have been there to write a piece like this. loved the last sentence especially. fluff
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from krys123
Debbie, I found you were to be very stimulating and inspirational and your work is very informative and inventive.
All your truisms are to be listened to with heart and one can go a long way by reading your piece. I detected in a way you wrote your piece that there were rhyming used which I thought was very resourceful of you. Thank you for hearing and posting this for others and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
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Debbie, I found you were to be very stimulating and inspirational and your work is very informative and inventive.
All your truisms are to be listened to with heart and one can go a long way by reading your piece. I detected in a way you wrote your piece that there were rhyming used which I thought was very resourceful of you. Thank you for hearing and posting this for others and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
Comment from royowen
Great piece of prose Debbie, just talking things through can pour ointment on a wound and it brings healing, the bible says weep with those that weep and rejoice with those that rejoice! If one hurts we all hurt! And that's as it should be! Nice sensitive poem! Blessings Debbie, Roy.
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Great piece of prose Debbie, just talking things through can pour ointment on a wound and it brings healing, the bible says weep with those that weep and rejoice with those that rejoice! If one hurts we all hurt! And that's as it should be! Nice sensitive poem! Blessings Debbie, Roy.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi
~ Beautifully said, though have you thought of making shorter sentences? IMO it would make for a smoother read. But, please, use or lose - just a suggestion on my part.
~ Love the way you have formatted with your tulips and the orange. Really nice.
Enjoyed this a lot.
Cheers
Keep Smilin'... Jax
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Hi
~ Beautifully said, though have you thought of making shorter sentences? IMO it would make for a smoother read. But, please, use or lose - just a suggestion on my part.
~ Love the way you have formatted with your tulips and the orange. Really nice.
Enjoyed this a lot.
Cheers
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
Comment from Charlene0513
Taking time for oneself can sometimes be impossible for struggling mothers with children but I feel at times we expect too much of oneself---likee trying to be a super mom.
You had some very good enjambments.
Charlene
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Taking time for oneself can sometimes be impossible for struggling mothers with children but I feel at times we expect too much of oneself---likee trying to be a super mom.
You had some very good enjambments.
Charlene
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014