Comment from JBCaine

Excellent

Author X-
Reminds me of "Married With Children."
Peg Bundy: "Did you miss me, Al?"
Al Bundy: "With every shot so far, Honey."

Anyway, well done. I would add to your Author's Notes: "Good aim--even better than that." But that's just me.
Good story.
Best to you in the contest.
JBCaine-

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks, JBCaine, I appreciate it.

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

OMG you are sorry you missed her...Run Jill run...LOL...divorce is a bit safer...very well written...with a great finish line...

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks, I.raven. I'm glad ya' liked it!

reply by l.raven on 15-Apr-2014

you are so welcome...xxoo

Comment from Andrewajgblue

Excellent

I thought this was really clever, an ingenious play on words, I didn't see it coming at all, let's face it he must of been tempted, I'm wondering is the photo the author of this piece, really great writing,
Andrew

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks, Andrew, I appreciate the review. And nope, the photo isn't me, lol...

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

LOL. . .you covered all the bases
and threw in both humor and wry commentary

100 words, and a full bodied story is delivered!
Nicely done :-)

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks so much, Leineco. I wish more voters felt about the story as you do, lol!

Thanks so much again, my friend...

Comment from suep

Excellent

So much story in so few words! You have intrigue, suspense, surprise when she returns, and then full understanding of the intent and meaning behind the title of the story. An enjoyable read and also happy to read (and agree with)your author notes. Great work ... Best wishes in the contest! :)

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks a million, suep, I'm really glad you liked it. By the look of things, I'm going to need all of the luck that I can get!

Thanks again!

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your few chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the
conflict between Harold and his cheating wife
and his surprise as she comes home as he thought he had shot her

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks, Smoothiecool, I'm glad that you think you at least. Based on the way things are going now, I'm going to need a miracle to pull this one off, lol!

reply by Smoothiecool on 15-Apr-2014

laughing with you

welcome to the review
cheers <<

Comment from vigabo

Excellent

Really enjoyed that. Took me a few seconds to realize he'd missed his target but what a cool twist. Didn't expect that at all. Very clever indeed. Thanks for showing me how to write flash fiction!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks for such an excellent review, vigabo. I wish more voters felt as you did about the story, lol...

reply by vigabo on 25-May-2014

You're most welcome. Remember, different strokes for different folks! We can't win 'em all.

Comment from Karen B.

Excellent

Great story! Neither of these losers are any good at what they do. :) Good use of dialogue and a great entry in the contest. Good luck!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks for the kind review and good luck wishes, Karen. By the looks of things, I'm going to ned all of the luck that I can get, ha ha!

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

yes, I like the double meaning in Harold's statement. He might have thought to try again after allowing for windage. Nice story of a cheating wife... my favorite.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thanks, Bill, I'm very happy you liked it. I only wish more voters felt as you do, lol.

Comment from Millibrad

Excellent

You've done a wonderful job of meeting the requirements of the contest and making every word count. Great last line. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014

Thank you very much, Millibrad. I appreciate the kind comments and well wishes, my friend.