Sea Musings
a free verse poem about storm watching30 total reviews
Comment from Millibrad
This is such a beautiful poem, poet. The mood the poem sets is one of serenity, despite the "onrushing nor'easter." I love your use of simile; "air thickens like slow-stirred chowder, and the personification of wind and sea. Thanks for posting this and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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This is such a beautiful poem, poet. The mood the poem sets is one of serenity, despite the "onrushing nor'easter." I love your use of simile; "air thickens like slow-stirred chowder, and the personification of wind and sea. Thanks for posting this and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your awesome review and exceptional rating. I am thrilled you like "Sea Musings" so much.
Comment from cottoncandy11
Hello,
Thank you for such a great read and thought provoking feelings. Best of luck to you on the contest.
Regards, Cottoncandy11
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Hello,
Thank you for such a great read and thought provoking feelings. Best of luck to you on the contest.
Regards, Cottoncandy11
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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I am delighted you enjoyed "Sea Musings" so much. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Just Pete
A well worded poem painted with emotion and vivid imagery. The final stanza paints a picture of a lonely soul, lost in a memory of a lost love. This is a beautiful piece of writing and I wish you luck in the contest,
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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A well worded poem painted with emotion and vivid imagery. The final stanza paints a picture of a lonely soul, lost in a memory of a lost love. This is a beautiful piece of writing and I wish you luck in the contest,
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you, JustPete, for your uplifting review and best wishes.
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You're most welcome.
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
you have chosen strong words to take your reader through your journey of thoughts of missing someone special
you relate to the sea I love the line
"I am lost in the sigh of the wind"
this says exactly how we feel in these moments
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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good luck in the contest
you have chosen strong words to take your reader through your journey of thoughts of missing someone special
you relate to the sea I love the line
"I am lost in the sigh of the wind"
this says exactly how we feel in these moments
Comment Written 02-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2013
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Thank you, Smoothiecool, for your most encouraging review and best wishes. You truly understand what I am trying to say and do in "Sea Musings."
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you are most welcome cheers Sc
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good descriptive word use that draw a clear picture in my mind. Good alliteration with waves/wall...thrash/the...hug/horizon...squeezing/sky...slow/stirred...briny/breath...face/floods. The photo is befitting. The message is clear and contains no errors.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Good descriptive word use that draw a clear picture in my mind. Good alliteration with waves/wall...thrash/the...hug/horizon...squeezing/sky...slow/stirred...briny/breath...face/floods. The photo is befitting. The message is clear and contains no errors.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your very incisive review.
Comment from newbie1
Wow, this is really well-written! Your word imagery is excellent, you really take the reader to the place you are writing about.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Wow, this is really well-written! Your word imagery is excellent, you really take the reader to the place you are writing about.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I am thrilled you like "Sea Musings" so much. Thank you for this wonderful review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Excellent poem. Your stanzas are built right on with great wording. I find no fault. The moment the photo shows is awesome. Well done poet. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Excellent poem. Your stanzas are built right on with great wording. I find no fault. The moment the photo shows is awesome. Well done poet. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you, Ben, for your kind praise and best wishes. I could not be more pleased with your reaction to "Sea Musings" and your review.
Comment from Tatarka2
I love the lyrical language of this. The reader can feel the storm, and the wind, and the loneliness of the speaker as s/he watches the storm. My only suggestion would be that I think you could have said even more. You obviously have a gift for evocative language. The poem is quite readable at this length. I wonder whether, if you tried just one re-write, you might be able to use this same lyrical style to say even more on this subject.
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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I love the lyrical language of this. The reader can feel the storm, and the wind, and the loneliness of the speaker as s/he watches the storm. My only suggestion would be that I think you could have said even more. You obviously have a gift for evocative language. The poem is quite readable at this length. I wonder whether, if you tried just one re-write, you might be able to use this same lyrical style to say even more on this subject.
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Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I really appreciate your praise and suggestion. I did think about expanding this, but decided whatever else I could say about both characters would be better said in a short story. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
"I am lost in the sigh of the wind, the briny breath of the sea." - Your beautiful imagery conveys this very feeling in the reader. This is a wonderfully written poem and a worthy contest entry. I wish you all the best in the voting. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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"I am lost in the sigh of the wind, the briny breath of the sea." - Your beautiful imagery conveys this very feeling in the reader. This is a wonderfully written poem and a worthy contest entry. I wish you all the best in the voting. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you, Mystic Angel, for your lavish praise and best wishes.
Comment from mermaids
Excellent free verse form that captures the feel of an oncoming storm. Excellent use of words that paint a clear picture. I am lost in the sigh of the wind is my favorite line,I can feel the wind.
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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Excellent free verse form that captures the feel of an oncoming storm. Excellent use of words that paint a clear picture. I am lost in the sigh of the wind is my favorite line,I can feel the wind.
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Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I am thrilled that you could "get lost" in my poem. Thank you so much for reviewing.