Tiny Terrors
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Bug Problem"A collection of short horror fiction
40 total reviews
Comment from denhagan
This was a very interesting short story to read for the Horror contest. It had a surprising ending when the husband finds out that his termite problem is a lot bigger than he had thought.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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This was a very interesting short story to read for the Horror contest. It had a surprising ending when the husband finds out that his termite problem is a lot bigger than he had thought.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Thank you, denhagen. That would be a really "BIG" bug problem, wouldn't you say, LOL? I appreciate the read & review!
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You're welcome Dean. Yes, it would, :)
Dennis
Comment from caromel
Super creepy! I am terrified of basements, so this just made them all the more terrifying for me. I have a can of Spider Killer in every single room in my house! Well written. I will probably not sleep for many days now!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Super creepy! I am terrified of basements, so this just made them all the more terrifying for me. I have a can of Spider Killer in every single room in my house! Well written. I will probably not sleep for many days now!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Hah, thanks, caromel. And, what ever you do, don't go in your basement, if you have one, that is...
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lucky for me... we don't have them in Florida!
Comment from TOMORAL
Whoa, I'd hate to see the size of that termite. Very good flash fiction story, I want to read what happens next! Grabs the reader's attention and POW, what an ending!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Whoa, I'd hate to see the size of that termite. Very good flash fiction story, I want to read what happens next! Grabs the reader's attention and POW, what an ending!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Thank you TOMORAL. I am very glad you liked it!
Comment from Selina Stambi
Very well done, DEAN - of course it's your, sir - your horrific imagination knows no bounds!
My best wishes in the contest. Hope you are feeling better - I'm not!
Sonali
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Very well done, DEAN - of course it's your, sir - your horrific imagination knows no bounds!
My best wishes in the contest. Hope you are feeling better - I'm not!
Sonali
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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I'm still feelin' poorly, Reach. But, I'm still writing, LOL.
Thanks for the great review. How in the world does everyone know that I wrote this? There's no sounds or music this time. I can't figure it out...
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Ha! It's that invisible Deano stamp ... :)
Comment from gazzagodbod
omg he has one big roach problem i hope he managed to get his guts back in and that his work boots cleaned up ok lol loved this xxgazzaxx
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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omg he has one big roach problem i hope he managed to get his guts back in and that his work boots cleaned up ok lol loved this xxgazzaxx
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Thanks, gaz! I really appreciate that.
Comment from faragon
The time honored scary moment when you have to venture into a dardened basement! Very nice entry. story flowed well. Just enough background information and budding new terror in this short story.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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The time honored scary moment when you have to venture into a dardened basement! Very nice entry. story flowed well. Just enough background information and budding new terror in this short story.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much, faragon. I appreciate you reading and reviewing it for me, and I am very happy that you enjoyed it.
Comment from adewpearl
You set the stage well with your vivid detail in the opening paragraph
His intestines spilled out...that is one compelling and icky visual :-)
I love his final understatement - I am a big fan of gallows humor and must say I couldn't help but laugh at those bulbous eyes and the guts spilling and his dying declaration :-) I also like the realism of a husband who refuses to call in professionals. LOL Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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You set the stage well with your vivid detail in the opening paragraph
His intestines spilled out...that is one compelling and icky visual :-)
I love his final understatement - I am a big fan of gallows humor and must say I couldn't help but laugh at those bulbous eyes and the guts spilling and his dying declaration :-) I also like the realism of a husband who refuses to call in professionals. LOL Brooke
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Hah, yep, we always seem to think we can do a better job, and 9 times out of 10, we're wrong, LOL...
Thanks for the fantastic review, Brooke!
Comment from Darkhorse555
there must of been a whole nest of them ha ha giant bugs imagine his face after getting bitten were he felt the crunch excellently drawn piece smiling i enjoyed
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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there must of been a whole nest of them ha ha giant bugs imagine his face after getting bitten were he felt the crunch excellently drawn piece smiling i enjoyed
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Yeah, I think those insects really bugged him. You know, got under his skin? Ha ha ha, I crack myself up sometimes!
Thanks for the great review, my Dark Fiend! I really appreciate that.
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent.
We have thrown so much garage into the oceans that an oil slip of plastic bottle, papers, syringes, medical supplies, and soda bottles have formed which is estimated to be larger than Texas.
Mother Nature has given us her warning that soon our shores will be covered with the crap that Man has discarded.
In addition be prepared to serve the millions of cockroaches, files, rats, bees, buzzards, crows, hawks, rabbits, foxes, and bears, that will be coming to your neighborhood for lunch.
Nature has always promised triple your crap--back at you Jack.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Excellent.
We have thrown so much garage into the oceans that an oil slip of plastic bottle, papers, syringes, medical supplies, and soda bottles have formed which is estimated to be larger than Texas.
Mother Nature has given us her warning that soon our shores will be covered with the crap that Man has discarded.
In addition be prepared to serve the millions of cockroaches, files, rats, bees, buzzards, crows, hawks, rabbits, foxes, and bears, that will be coming to your neighborhood for lunch.
Nature has always promised triple your crap--back at you Jack.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much for such an excellent, introspective review, ElPoetry001. You're right, too. One of these days, Mother Nature and the Earth is going to begin fighting back. I hope it's not too late for us when she does.
Comment from Mai Mai
This is an interesting piece. I'm not sure if I understood the piece correctly, but it is well written. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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This is an interesting piece. I'm not sure if I understood the piece correctly, but it is well written. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013
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Thank you, Mai Mai. I appreciate it.
The guy was eaten by a huge bug in his basement. Not much to ponder, really. Hence, his statement, "We've got a BIG bug problem..."