The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "We all need to step aside some times"Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
33 total reviews
Comment from Millibrad
This sounds like quite an experience being invited to go on a radio show as a guest of honor. After reading this and a few of your earlier chapters, I am amazed at the details you remember. I look forward to reading more.
A few things I noticed:
"Especially as I decided to go to air with then play," This wording seems awkward to me.
The entire programme was (recirded)[recorded]
"I was picked up by taxi, at around 11pm on the special night from home," Change to I was picked up from home by taxi, at around 11pm on the special night,
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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This sounds like quite an experience being invited to go on a radio show as a guest of honor. After reading this and a few of your earlier chapters, I am amazed at the details you remember. I look forward to reading more.
A few things I noticed:
"Especially as I decided to go to air with then play," This wording seems awkward to me.
The entire programme was (recirded)[recorded]
"I was picked up by taxi, at around 11pm on the special night from home," Change to I was picked up from home by taxi, at around 11pm on the special night,
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Hi there new friend. Thanks for the review. I thought I fixed some of this or maybe someone else caught them and I haven't got there yet. I do agree with one of the writers a while ago who said "Eedit, Eddit, Edit!" So always appreciate any help I can get. Glad to have you on board. Wish I could had more photos on FS but :( WIll look at some of your stuff as get time. Like how we all help each other in here. Cheers from Australia.
Comment from michaelcahill
This is all new to me. You could add some more here about what stories you may have read (examples maybe).
The entire programme was recirded and ++ recorded. A little SPAG. Ha! Earning my keep! Great stuff. mikey
This is really tight and ship shape now. I think it has been a long while since I've read this. Love the sound bite. I used to do that accent back in the Beatles days. :)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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This is all new to me. You could add some more here about what stories you may have read (examples maybe).
The entire programme was recirded and ++ recorded. A little SPAG. Ha! Earning my keep! Great stuff. mikey
This is really tight and ship shape now. I think it has been a long while since I've read this. Love the sound bite. I used to do that accent back in the Beatles days. :)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2014
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yeah chapters were reorganized to insert this new one. More to come mate. A bit of a monster like some of your stuff hey! Thanks again. Will work on the spags.
Comment from Fridayauthor
The story line is interesting and well told. The writing, although conversational, could use some tightening.
I think you could skip terms like "and so on" which detract from your story.
I wouldn't say, "Without dragging this on too much," because it drag it out too much.
Thank you for posting the piece.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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The story line is interesting and well told. The writing, although conversational, could use some tightening.
I think you could skip terms like "and so on" which detract from your story.
I wouldn't say, "Without dragging this on too much," because it drag it out too much.
Thank you for posting the piece.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Hi friend. Another new contact on FS appreciate your review. Early days for this one. Thought I was nearly finished and my wife and I were talking other day and she said "Did you write about etc" and I realised I had not done it. Thanks again g=hope to see some of your stuff around.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is another interesting chapter to add to the collection that the author has created with this piece of writing. It is so true that it is not what you know, but who you know that counts.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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This is another interesting chapter to add to the collection that the author has created with this piece of writing. It is so true that it is not what you know, but who you know that counts.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Yep are you a cut and paste reviewer by any chance tsk tsk! Hope you can hear the tunes. I wrote em too
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Yes indeed.
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New chapter 17 hope you will take the time for a look thanks. You will see chapters have been re-aligned more in order of when things happened. This is a brand new chapter ok.
Comment from country ranch writer
it is like that every where you go there is always some one who knows some one and etc. so it just keeps on putting you on the back burner with no options.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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it is like that every where you go there is always some one who knows some one and etc. so it just keeps on putting you on the back burner with no options.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Hi Thanks for the review. I have another song I wrote about my time in Tax as well along the same lines. It goes to a famous tune too. Watch out for it, have to pick a suitable place for it.
Can't remember if we have met. Been reading some Westerns on here so maybe I had read some of yours?? Sorry for the fog if I am having a Senior Moment hehe.
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go back through favorites and you cam read my western stuff also every girls dream is good too
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OK get to it later thanks.
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thank you
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New chapter 17 hope you will take the time for a look thanks. You will see chapters have been re-aligned more in order of when things happened. This is a brand new chapter ok.
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WILL TRY TO KEEP UP
Comment from 22allgood
That was interesting about your public service days, I can relate to some of that. A good story and the detail in this book is amazing. A good read, thank you.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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That was interesting about your public service days, I can relate to some of that. A good story and the detail in this book is amazing. A good read, thank you.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Planning on releasing it under my FS Name what do you think about that? A lot of people probably knew Ira D Sankey anyway. I think quite a few churches used the Sacred Songs and Solos Hymnal. Appreciate you sticking with me Sis.
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I'll have to get you to explain the name one day.
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Sankey? or? Ira D Sankey was a great hymn writer and accompanist and soloist for Dwight L Moody for a lot of his Crusades. Years ago a fellow and I who was my pastor for a little while, were gong to do a bunch of meetings he would preach and I would sing and play the organ or PIano. We we were Moody and Sankey. Sadly we only did it once. I left that church and some time later he committed adultery with a woman he went to late at night to help her...unless there was more to that. I wrote about him in one of the chapters not by name though.
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thanks, now I know.
Comment from Naba-man
Your transparency is beautiful, born no doubt out of a correct response to suffering; it is in stark contrast to other forms of transparency which I have seen occasionally which was differently constructed, based on shame rather than glory. The book of Jude talks about uprooted people that are like "wild waves of the sea, casting up their own shame like foam." Unfortunately, most people's stories are nothing more than water foam, whereas your story is a settled and foamless sea of tranquility. Your story sir is more substantial, more alive with subtle tones of tenderness, peace, love, and joy. I thoroughly enjoyed it! Thank you for becoming my fan; I am now a fan of you. God bless sir!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Your transparency is beautiful, born no doubt out of a correct response to suffering; it is in stark contrast to other forms of transparency which I have seen occasionally which was differently constructed, based on shame rather than glory. The book of Jude talks about uprooted people that are like "wild waves of the sea, casting up their own shame like foam." Unfortunately, most people's stories are nothing more than water foam, whereas your story is a settled and foamless sea of tranquility. Your story sir is more substantial, more alive with subtle tones of tenderness, peace, love, and joy. I thoroughly enjoyed it! Thank you for becoming my fan; I am now a fan of you. God bless sir!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Thanks Friend. Good to have your reviews and support.
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I have just done an edit on Chapter 11 of my book hope you will take a look I was encouraged to say more about my wife and I have now done that.
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New chapter 17 hope you will take the time for a look thanks. You will see chapters have been re-aligned more in order of when things happened. This is a brand new chapter ok.
Comment from cinderbella
Once again your story is well-written, and your attention to detail is astonishing. I enjoyed the "song" at the end. I could never remember my own life in such detail. LOL :) Sandra
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2013
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Once again your story is well-written, and your attention to detail is astonishing. I enjoyed the "song" at the end. I could never remember my own life in such detail. LOL :) Sandra
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2013
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Thanks Sandra. I have had the stuff of my story sitting around here for years actually. Now trying to get it going. Thanks for the great review.
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The Midi file (music) for the song is on Chapter 10 now in case you did not see the note I put on my profile page I also added to Chapter 6 as well.
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New chapter 17 hope you will take the time for a look thanks. You will see chapters have been re-aligned more in order of when things happened. This is a brand new chapter ok.
Comment from BethShelby
It sound like you've had as many job problems as I have. Cute lady you married. I like your song and would like to here the music too it when you get around to it. I didn't find any spags. I like that it isn't quite so long.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2013
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It sound like you've had as many job problems as I have. Cute lady you married. I like your song and would like to here the music too it when you get around to it. I didn't find any spags. I like that it isn't quite so long.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2013
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Hi Beth will get the music down and put the Midi file on the Story chapter soon. Glad I got the size right. Still more to come ok. Thanks again for the review.
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The Midi file (music) for the song is on Chapter 10 now in case you did not see the note I put on my profile page I also added to Chapter 6 as well.
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New chapter 17 hope you will take the time for a look thanks. You will see chapters have been re-aligned more in order of when things happened. This is a brand new chapter ok.
Comment from Mark Alan Trimeloni
I felt I needed to give my readers a break from all the Employment history, and take some different roads. So I hope you enjoyed the diversion and here we are back on the work trail, again.
Nothing wrong with sharing your life. In the end, this is the only true legacy-apart from children-that you will leave behind. Best to document the whole thing and let the world know, because once it's posted it will never go away.
I wrote a poem/song about my time in the Veteran's Affairs Department. I will explain it later on.
So versatile. You are truly a writer of some considerable talent.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2013
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I felt I needed to give my readers a break from all the Employment history, and take some different roads. So I hope you enjoyed the diversion and here we are back on the work trail, again.
Nothing wrong with sharing your life. In the end, this is the only true legacy-apart from children-that you will leave behind. Best to document the whole thing and let the world know, because once it's posted it will never go away.
I wrote a poem/song about my time in the Veteran's Affairs Department. I will explain it later on.
So versatile. You are truly a writer of some considerable talent.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2013
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Thanks Mark. Appreciate your review. Will get the music done for th song and put a Midi file on the Chapter. More to come ok! Stick around.
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The Midi file (music) for the song is on Chapter 10 now in case you did not see the note I put on my profile page I also added to Chapter 6 as well.
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New chapter 17 hope you will take the time for a look thanks. You will see chapters have been re-aligned more in order of when things happened. This is a brand new chapter ok.