I Don't Know Why
A Non-Fiction in about 800 words.Why it happens.............88 total reviews
Comment from Curt Winslow
It is true, life seldom works out as we plan. We see ourselves in one place only to wind up in another. It was not destiny. Maybe God has spared us from something that we could not bare. Many people think riches will solve it all, but look at how many have taken their lives. Great job!
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It is true, life seldom works out as we plan. We see ourselves in one place only to wind up in another. It was not destiny. Maybe God has spared us from something that we could not bare. Many people think riches will solve it all, but look at how many have taken their lives. Great job!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
Comment from lindalcreel
Not necessarily a fiction. It depends on what you believe. there is always hope. While some of your dreams may seem unrealistic, there are others that are quite obtainable. This was well written, with a taste of desperation in there. Some may believe that this is all there is, but there are others, myself included, who believe this is merely a stop on a longer journey. Absolutely beautiful!! Keep writing!
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Not necessarily a fiction. It depends on what you believe. there is always hope. While some of your dreams may seem unrealistic, there are others that are quite obtainable. This was well written, with a taste of desperation in there. Some may believe that this is all there is, but there are others, myself included, who believe this is merely a stop on a longer journey. Absolutely beautiful!! Keep writing!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
Comment from angelmagnet
Thanks for letting us in on your secret life and wishes and desires. Part of me was laughing at the similarity between your desires and the feminine version that I carry inside. Funny about that
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Thanks for letting us in on your secret life and wishes and desires. Part of me was laughing at the similarity between your desires and the feminine version that I carry inside. Funny about that
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
Comment from NicciFaye
Oh the wishes that goes through one's mind as a day progress of things that we desired to accomplish.....only to just be tired from the thought of thinking what we could do.
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Oh the wishes that goes through one's mind as a day progress of things that we desired to accomplish.....only to just be tired from the thought of thinking what we could do.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
Comment from writerwish
I totally enjoyed this. The beginning sucked me right in. Setting unrealistic goals grown-ups do too. Sometimes, as you pointed out. I assume grammar was intentional. I would like to see this in more order of times, like morning etc, but more personal for instance when I see my feet on the floor at night I think this will be the day when... Later, In mid-afternoon when my stomach growls, I awaken my self to the idea of becoming a famous international chef...Great muse...
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I totally enjoyed this. The beginning sucked me right in. Setting unrealistic goals grown-ups do too. Sometimes, as you pointed out. I assume grammar was intentional. I would like to see this in more order of times, like morning etc, but more personal for instance when I see my feet on the floor at night I think this will be the day when... Later, In mid-afternoon when my stomach growls, I awaken my self to the idea of becoming a famous international chef...Great muse...
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
Comment from Jade Lawson
This is quite introspective and challenges the reader to think and analyse your words.
Indeed there are so many things we wished to happen, I believe we can achieve everything as long as there is perseverance and always stand up after falling.
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This is quite introspective and challenges the reader to think and analyse your words.
Indeed there are so many things we wished to happen, I believe we can achieve everything as long as there is perseverance and always stand up after falling.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
Comment from Curtis Hatch
I read the work and felt a little like a racket ball that had been bounced off all the walls and ceiling. I had difficulty getting a handle on what you want out of life. We must all dream and have challenges in our lives; however, there are limits to what one can accomplish. To be successful in life, one must be happy in their own skin, and set goals that are attainable. Bouncing from one thing to another without completing what we started can easily lead to depression and low self-esteem. I don't know if this is helpful or not, but it reflects what life has taught me in seventy years.
Curtis
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I read the work and felt a little like a racket ball that had been bounced off all the walls and ceiling. I had difficulty getting a handle on what you want out of life. We must all dream and have challenges in our lives; however, there are limits to what one can accomplish. To be successful in life, one must be happy in their own skin, and set goals that are attainable. Bouncing from one thing to another without completing what we started can easily lead to depression and low self-esteem. I don't know if this is helpful or not, but it reflects what life has taught me in seventy years.
Curtis
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
Comment from Ben Colder
Not sure if this review meets the challenge you ask for but I read your work and understand it is fiction. Did you know it is never wrong to dream or build personal desires of achieving the unthinkable? When one stops dreaming, the nightmare begins. I appreciate the write but not sure what you are really looking for. Restful
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Not sure if this review meets the challenge you ask for but I read your work and understand it is fiction. Did you know it is never wrong to dream or build personal desires of achieving the unthinkable? When one stops dreaming, the nightmare begins. I appreciate the write but not sure what you are really looking for. Restful
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
Comment from kiwijenny
I found a typo...sorry..... A 6-storie ...............should be .....story..........
I like this... Every day I say at least 10 times that I want to be a picture book writer...an author ...get royalties.. Work smart not hard...I have had 3 part time jobs at once.....I feel great that I have whittled it down to 2 part time jobs...yay.. But our mind can go everywhere but our limited physicality denies it
Ecclesiastes 3:11
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I found a typo...sorry..... A 6-storie ...............should be .....story..........
I like this... Every day I say at least 10 times that I want to be a picture book writer...an author ...get royalties.. Work smart not hard...I have had 3 part time jobs at once.....I feel great that I have whittled it down to 2 part time jobs...yay.. But our mind can go everywhere but our limited physicality denies it
Ecclesiastes 3:11
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
Comment from Bill Schott
This is incredible! I think your rambling here on the myriad of accomplishments you want to make is astounding and probably shared, by and large, by the rest of humanity. We want to be somebody important, have lots of friends, be carefree and mobile, enjoy success and be universally loved. "But (we) cannot. (We) never know why and who dismantles everything. Why always something else happens to (us)? " This ending makes this all a gem.
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This is incredible! I think your rambling here on the myriad of accomplishments you want to make is astounding and probably shared, by and large, by the rest of humanity. We want to be somebody important, have lots of friends, be carefree and mobile, enjoy success and be universally loved. "But (we) cannot. (We) never know why and who dismantles everything. Why always something else happens to (us)? " This ending makes this all a gem.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013