SOCKer
Will I KICK the Goal?31 total reviews
Comment from Spiritual Echo
You and I seem to have an ongoing argument with laundry.
As for the odd sock....teach your kid how to make puppets....will keep a child occupied for hours glueing or sewing buttons sequins and yarn for hair...as usual, your poem is highly entertaining.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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You and I seem to have an ongoing argument with laundry.
As for the odd sock....teach your kid how to make puppets....will keep a child occupied for hours glueing or sewing buttons sequins and yarn for hair...as usual, your poem is highly entertaining.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Awww Ingrid, thanks for your support.
Now get over here and help me pair the damn socks.
LOL
Hugs P
xxx
Comment from Frankeddy
Your neat little verse makes me feel the anger caused by those unmatched stockings.
A fast flowing ditty with your gift of rhyming and the humor is the topic.
Keep the good words flowing.
Ed
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Your neat little verse makes me feel the anger caused by those unmatched stockings.
A fast flowing ditty with your gift of rhyming and the humor is the topic.
Keep the good words flowing.
Ed
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Thanks Ed. Hope you are well.
Hi to Marg.
Hugs P
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Comment from Jaq Cee
LMAO Pippilicious! I'm sure there is a sock monster that steals just one of the pair each time. Great fun poem me deary. As ever a joy to read. :) Hugs n stuff, Jaq xx
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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LMAO Pippilicious! I'm sure there is a sock monster that steals just one of the pair each time. Great fun poem me deary. As ever a joy to read. :) Hugs n stuff, Jaq xx
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Ahh...my little Jaqquaprecious...LOL
Thanks for your gorgeous socker punch review...there fucking IS a sock monster and the prick is invisible. Haha
Hugs Pippafrickinlicious
xx
Comment from ravenblack
3rd sock poem- foot fetish on aisle 3 or did you have sockeye salmon for dinner? Like the ----- pause between action/resolution. God knows I'd need ten more ------'s to complete the task. I just gave up. All my socks are black, all my sons are plain white and my daughter- she likes wearing mis-matched socks, claims it's a trend or something. Just let it go or you'll wind up talking to sock puppets.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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3rd sock poem- foot fetish on aisle 3 or did you have sockeye salmon for dinner? Like the ----- pause between action/resolution. God knows I'd need ten more ------'s to complete the task. I just gave up. All my socks are black, all my sons are plain white and my daughter- she likes wearing mis-matched socks, claims it's a trend or something. Just let it go or you'll wind up talking to sock puppets.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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LOL
Loved your review RB. Thanks for the advice. I think if we all had our own colour it would help. Yes the mismatched ones are a UK initiated trend apparently.
My daughter even had on odd shoes the other day...LOL
She is ONLY 4. LOL
Cheers P
x
Comment from CR Delport
Like creating order from chaos, but it is like working on something mechanical, you're always left with spares. Their must be a thieving sock fairy somewhere. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Like creating order from chaos, but it is like working on something mechanical, you're always left with spares. Their must be a thieving sock fairy somewhere. Nice poem.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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LOL Thanks for your super review. Yes that theiving cow has taken up residence here permanently. haha
Cheers P
Comment from JeffreyVPerry
Oh, I would loved to say that I have no idea what you are talking about. I dread to wash clothes, then to put then away, and those socks. You poem reads well and kept my attention. And I was thrilled that you did not end with all the socks that do not match as a novelist sock writer might have done. I am happy with your seemingly sock fetish.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Oh, I would loved to say that I have no idea what you are talking about. I dread to wash clothes, then to put then away, and those socks. You poem reads well and kept my attention. And I was thrilled that you did not end with all the socks that do not match as a novelist sock writer might have done. I am happy with your seemingly sock fetish.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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LOL Thanks so much.
Glad you enjoyed.
Cheers P
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! Very entertaining! Love your phrasing, such as "But they just mount in furry flocks" etc.
Some mother/wife pre-requisite
That I pair up these bloody socks << They say it's our job, but I never did it and refuse to. Let the sock owners do that if they wish. In fact, hubby had to do his own laundry after we had a kid, and as soon as my kid was old enough, she did her laundry. Seems only right. :)
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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LOL! Very entertaining! Love your phrasing, such as "But they just mount in furry flocks" etc.
Some mother/wife pre-requisite
That I pair up these bloody socks << They say it's our job, but I never did it and refuse to. Let the sock owners do that if they wish. In fact, hubby had to do his own laundry after we had a kid, and as soon as my kid was old enough, she did her laundry. Seems only right. :)
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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LOL That sounds like a better way to go. Cheers and thanks for the great advice.
P x
Comment from Rondeno
It's extremely well-constructed and has a comic gusto all of its own. Your third on the same subject, you say. Maybe you need to see a socks therapist.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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It's extremely well-constructed and has a comic gusto all of its own. Your third on the same subject, you say. Maybe you need to see a socks therapist.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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I am.
Thank you for the sixer.
Comment from rama devi
This is hilarious and very well crafted too. I enjoyed the clever rhymes and internal rhymes and assonance giving delightful phonetics (replete in all stanzas)! Excellent bouncy beat, too.
Enjoyed your witty personification of the basket full and the furry flocks of socks here:
That basket full ain't so discreet
I must pair up some bloody socks
Be good if they were obselete
But they just mount in furry flocks
LOL!
Note Obsolete is misspelled. (O not E)
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They're not in singles(,) just like jocks
ROTFL...
I'm slack, they're not and won't retreat
Hee heee....reminds me of the Star Trek show TROUBLE WITH TRIBBLES.
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These furry foot gloves must browbeat
foot-gloves
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Unmatched and odd, like ticking clocks
This simile seems forced to me...as I cannot grok how clocks would be unmatched and odd...??? (a reason I almost gave this a four--but figured I'm tired and might have missed a reference...?)
The reverse syntax suits this poem well---and It's a rare thing for me to say, as usually reverse syntax sound forced to my ear. In this case, it enhances the playful tone of the piece.
This is cute:
Like cotton-pickin' building blocks
Fun that it's a true story too.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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This is hilarious and very well crafted too. I enjoyed the clever rhymes and internal rhymes and assonance giving delightful phonetics (replete in all stanzas)! Excellent bouncy beat, too.
Enjoyed your witty personification of the basket full and the furry flocks of socks here:
That basket full ain't so discreet
I must pair up some bloody socks
Be good if they were obselete
But they just mount in furry flocks
LOL!
Note Obsolete is misspelled. (O not E)
*
They're not in singles(,) just like jocks
ROTFL...
I'm slack, they're not and won't retreat
Hee heee....reminds me of the Star Trek show TROUBLE WITH TRIBBLES.
*
These furry foot gloves must browbeat
foot-gloves
*
Unmatched and odd, like ticking clocks
This simile seems forced to me...as I cannot grok how clocks would be unmatched and odd...??? (a reason I almost gave this a four--but figured I'm tired and might have missed a reference...?)
The reverse syntax suits this poem well---and It's a rare thing for me to say, as usually reverse syntax sound forced to my ear. In this case, it enhances the playful tone of the piece.
This is cute:
Like cotton-pickin' building blocks
Fun that it's a true story too.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Thanks for picking up all those spags Rama and for a great review.
Yes the "clocks" line I couldn't quite articulate what I wanted to say, thanks for the butt kick on that one...changed stanza to:
"These furry foot gloves must browbeat
Unmatched and odd. As ticks are tocks
there's just no chance that they'll deplete
Guess I'll pair up the bloody socks..."
Many thanks. Have a nice day.
Cheers P
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Much better!~ Glad I kicked but!~LOL Hugs, rd
Comment from persevere
Having read your socker, I am still grinning. I have been there but sock life has become easier since the household population has dropped to two.Your rhythm is very good in verses 1,2,3 and 5. In verse 4 there is a wobble with both rhyme and rhythm. I suggest that in both verse 4 and verse 6 you replace 'pair up' with'link', just a suggestion.I like the last stanza and your repetition of "bloody socks" emphasises your frustration.
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Having read your socker, I am still grinning. I have been there but sock life has become easier since the household population has dropped to two.Your rhythm is very good in verses 1,2,3 and 5. In verse 4 there is a wobble with both rhyme and rhythm. I suggest that in both verse 4 and verse 6 you replace 'pair up' with'link', just a suggestion.I like the last stanza and your repetition of "bloody socks" emphasises your frustration.
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Thanks very much. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. Your review is welcomed and appreciated.
Cheers P