All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Wildest Rainbows"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Wildwoodflower
Good job. I've said before, but will say again, I applaud any one who can follow formal poetry guidelines. True the 'world is all rosy etc' when we first fall in love but then the 'glasses come off. Nice rhyme and flow.
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Good job. I've said before, but will say again, I applaud any one who can follow formal poetry guidelines. True the 'world is all rosy etc' when we first fall in love but then the 'glasses come off. Nice rhyme and flow.
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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thx so much WW! :)S
Comment from robina1978
Excellent artwork you chose to complement this poem. Great how you explained it clearly for the newbie's on the site. I loved the twist and also the ending couplets very much. You do have to find a new aim in life when the children have flown the nest.
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Excellent artwork you chose to complement this poem. Great how you explained it clearly for the newbie's on the site. I loved the twist and also the ending couplets very much. You do have to find a new aim in life when the children have flown the nest.
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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thx so much Ine! :)S
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most welcome Sharyn, Ine
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very well done, Sharyn, and you make a good point. Too often when a couple grows old and are less busy with kids and entertaining them on vacations, etc., they settle into a sort of limbo and don't know what to do next. You have the solution. Be young again! Rekindle the love that have time to share now! Ride the rainbows together! "Grow old along with me. THe best is yet to be!" :)
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Very well done, Sharyn, and you make a good point. Too often when a couple grows old and are less busy with kids and entertaining them on vacations, etc., they settle into a sort of limbo and don't know what to do next. You have the solution. Be young again! Rekindle the love that have time to share now! Ride the rainbows together! "Grow old along with me. THe best is yet to be!" :)
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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yeah! got it Phyllis! :) Sharyn
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Oh my this is so complicated. I'm lost, but I still like it very much. Glad that love doesn't give up. Though things around us change, we are willing to hang on and find new love. Well done.
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Oh my this is so complicated. I'm lost, but I still like it very much. Glad that love doesn't give up. Though things around us change, we are willing to hang on and find new love. Well done.
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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not so complicated Roxanne ... just let one line run into the next and read it aloud - you'll get it dear - but glad you like it nevertheless! :)Sharyn
Comment from tedanytime
Your sonnet is colorful and is a good entry for the contest. The notes are longer than the verse, a good reminder.
The theme seems to affirm the varied dimensions of love. Time and place that love begins provide a fresh palette. Passing time often diminishes the hues and perspective dims the view, but the rainbows are brightened when special memories are shared.
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Your sonnet is colorful and is a good entry for the contest. The notes are longer than the verse, a good reminder.
The theme seems to affirm the varied dimensions of love. Time and place that love begins provide a fresh palette. Passing time often diminishes the hues and perspective dims the view, but the rainbows are brightened when special memories are shared.
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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thx so much ted! :))S
Comment from Charlene0513
To visionary1234,
very good characterization of how change has affected our daily lives. It is uncanny to think that anything would ever be the same again.
Very good use of alliteration.
Charlene
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To visionary1234,
very good characterization of how change has affected our daily lives. It is uncanny to think that anything would ever be the same again.
Very good use of alliteration.
Charlene
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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bless you Charlene! :)Sharyn
Comment from marijmd
A very thought provoking poem. What happens to love when it ages and the children are gone. Have two people grown together or apart. Is there a chance for a new spark? Nicely done.
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A very thought provoking poem. What happens to love when it ages and the children are gone. Have two people grown together or apart. Is there a chance for a new spark? Nicely done.
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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we do hope so, don't we? thx so much marijmd! :)Sharyn
Comment from ~Dovey
Your author's notes give a fine tutorial for the beginning sonnet writer. I enjoyed your story of love and renewal. Your form is spot on for the Shakepearean sonnet. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Your author's notes give a fine tutorial for the beginning sonnet writer. I enjoyed your story of love and renewal. Your form is spot on for the Shakepearean sonnet. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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thx so much Dovey! :)Sharyn
Comment from nancyjam
Great Sonnet.
Strong rhyme and rhythm
Definite turn in third stanza and
a lovely closing couplet that is hopeful.
Great imagery
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Great Sonnet.
Strong rhyme and rhythm
Definite turn in third stanza and
a lovely closing couplet that is hopeful.
Great imagery
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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thx so much nancy! :)Sharyn
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a good entry for the sonnet contest. It speaks to me. I think life is like that a lot - in the beginning it is all colorful and rainbows then the flame wanes and the colors arn't so bright anymore and you have to work to get the colorful rainbows back into your life.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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This is a good entry for the sonnet contest. It speaks to me. I think life is like that a lot - in the beginning it is all colorful and rainbows then the flame wanes and the colors arn't so bright anymore and you have to work to get the colorful rainbows back into your life.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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yes indeed TAB - thank you so much my dear! :)Sharyn