All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Sugared Stars"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very fun and playful write. I can't wait for summer to come. I wish I could get to the beach, but I will just imagine it through your creative writings. Good luck in the contest~Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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A very fun and playful write. I can't wait for summer to come. I wish I could get to the beach, but I will just imagine it through your creative writings. Good luck in the contest~Debbie
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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thx so much Debbie! :)S
Comment from rjuselius
this is a great piece of love poetry! the encounter, the main characters, the setting all perfect.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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this is a great piece of love poetry! the encounter, the main characters, the setting all perfect.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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thx Rebekka! :)s
Comment from Tomoso
Super stuff!
I loved this poem. The presentation is brilliant and the imagery is awesome. It has such a lovely flow about a tender moment in summer time. "Sugared stars showering" very nicely written.
Great entry for contest
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Super stuff!
I loved this poem. The presentation is brilliant and the imagery is awesome. It has such a lovely flow about a tender moment in summer time. "Sugared stars showering" very nicely written.
Great entry for contest
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Bless you for your lovely magic six on this one Tomoso! So much appreciated! :)Sharyn
Comment from McMurry903
Awesome love poem, Sharyn! Such strong summer time imagery throughout. There is something very romantic about summer time and you should us that here beautifully. Well done, I wish you the best of luck in this contest! :)Brian
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Awesome love poem, Sharyn! Such strong summer time imagery throughout. There is something very romantic about summer time and you should us that here beautifully. Well done, I wish you the best of luck in this contest! :)Brian
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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thx so much Brian! :)s
Comment from Chikara
I wish I had more to say than 'great job'. You perfectly portrayed a setting of romance, with nice colors to accent the setting. It was surprisingly easy to imagine everything you placed. This could easily be made into a song.
Well, look at that... I said more than 'great job'.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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I wish I had more to say than 'great job'. You perfectly portrayed a setting of romance, with nice colors to accent the setting. It was surprisingly easy to imagine everything you placed. This could easily be made into a song.
Well, look at that... I said more than 'great job'.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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well bless you for your review knih - GREAT JOB! :)))
Comment from mshugh
Love the way you deployed your vocabulary in this poem, lambent et al. I am not a oet, but this poem I did enjoy reading.
Well done
Michael
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Love the way you deployed your vocabulary in this poem, lambent et al. I am not a oet, but this poem I did enjoy reading.
Well done
Michael
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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GLAD YOU ENJOYED THIS ONE MICHAEL - THANK YOU! :)Sharyn
Comment from kiwisteveh
Can't give you six or you would have had it, you are just so good at this.
Chock full of sensuous images, your usual wordplay with random rhymes popping up here and there and just a gorgeous picture of this scene between two lovers, oozing towards that lovely closing.
Good luck, though you probably don't need it - you seem to own just about every contest you enter.
Steve
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Can't give you six or you would have had it, you are just so good at this.
Chock full of sensuous images, your usual wordplay with random rhymes popping up here and there and just a gorgeous picture of this scene between two lovers, oozing towards that lovely closing.
Good luck, though you probably don't need it - you seem to own just about every contest you enter.
Steve
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Steve - amazing what chocolate deprivation will produce! :) - and I never win the FS competitions, only the member ones :(
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is a lovely poem, Sharyn, full of romance and a very enticing choice of words. It's easily visualized and flows like a dream. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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This is a lovely poem, Sharyn, full of romance and a very enticing choice of words. It's easily visualized and flows like a dream. Nicely done.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Bless you Dawn :)
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You're welcome.
Comment from justatuna
This is a great write. Flowed very well with the style only you seem to have. Great alliteration. Your word choice made it fun. Made me smile.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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This is a great write. Flowed very well with the style only you seem to have. Great alliteration. Your word choice made it fun. Made me smile.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much Rob - haven't seen you post so much lately? (me neither, busy in the B&B)! :)S
Comment from GWHARGIS
You tease. This was a very flirtatious moment that had everything to stimulate the senses. Sticky fingers, the gulls crying, the sun burnished beaches and the male and female playing coyly while never quite touching until the end. Loved the scene you created. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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You tease. This was a very flirtatious moment that had everything to stimulate the senses. Sticky fingers, the gulls crying, the sun burnished beaches and the male and female playing coyly while never quite touching until the end. Loved the scene you created. Nicely done.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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Bless you GW! :)S