All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Let Me Blaze, in Blue"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of getting the message across. The structure of this piece is consistent. The writer stays consistent with the rhyme scheme. This piece flows well and the harmony is good. I can't ask for more.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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The writer does a good job of getting the message across. The structure of this piece is consistent. The writer stays consistent with the rhyme scheme. This piece flows well and the harmony is good. I can't ask for more.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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thx so much RR! :)S
Comment from Sasha
This is a beautifully written and deeply moving kyrielle. I love the repeating line and thank you for your helpful notes. Excellent work with this one. I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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This is a beautifully written and deeply moving kyrielle. I love the repeating line and thank you for your helpful notes. Excellent work with this one. I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Bless you dear! :)S
Comment from ravenblack
excellent kyrielle and interesting turn on Dylan Thomas' " Rage Against the dying of the light" as here, the frail speaker is raging to die into the light. also timely due to current comet awareness ( couldn't see it as it was cloudy)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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excellent kyrielle and interesting turn on Dylan Thomas' " Rage Against the dying of the light" as here, the frail speaker is raging to die into the light. also timely due to current comet awareness ( couldn't see it as it was cloudy)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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thx so much my dear! I always loved Dylan Thomas' poem! :)S
Comment from Galactia
What a lovely written kyrielle poem. very sad acceptence of the after life, but love the creative write.
favourite stanza...
So iron-willed, my whole life force
So sparkling, brilliant, ever strong
But now it's time to find the Source -
To seek the light, and sing stars' song
great job
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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What a lovely written kyrielle poem. very sad acceptence of the after life, but love the creative write.
favourite stanza...
So iron-willed, my whole life force
So sparkling, brilliant, ever strong
But now it's time to find the Source -
To seek the light, and sing stars' song
great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Bless you Tia! :)S
Comment from Taffspride
Such a moving poem. It flows so beautifully, expressing, I think, the sentiments of many.
If I had to choose just one line that stood out. Although it would be difficult, I think the one that stands out most for me is:
To seek the light, and sing stars' song
Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Such a moving poem. It flows so beautifully, expressing, I think, the sentiments of many.
If I had to choose just one line that stood out. Although it would be difficult, I think the one that stands out most for me is:
To seek the light, and sing stars' song
Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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I like that line too, Ann - thank you so much my dear.
Blessings, as always,
Sharyn
Comment from uptowngirlchef1961
Good morning sharyn,
This is magical
Your well-chosen words are gems in the treasure box of this truly beautiful poem
These lines settle like a warm blanket, one that has been washed 1000 times, over your narrator making the start of this journey comfortable and effortless.
This feels like a gift to your readers. everyone is going to make this journey, some sooner than later...
I can't say it enough, you spin stories of magic and inspiration
Thank you for this wonderful lyrical poem
Jill
-:)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Good morning sharyn,
This is magical
Your well-chosen words are gems in the treasure box of this truly beautiful poem
These lines settle like a warm blanket, one that has been washed 1000 times, over your narrator making the start of this journey comfortable and effortless.
This feels like a gift to your readers. everyone is going to make this journey, some sooner than later...
I can't say it enough, you spin stories of magic and inspiration
Thank you for this wonderful lyrical poem
Jill
-:)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Jill, I thank you so much for your lovely six on this one. My husband's mother is 95 and now starting to fade - I want it to be easy for her. My mother is 82 and I can hear her having difficulty finding the words she needs. I want it to be easy for her too. And, of course ... we're the next ones in the cycle, aren't we?
Blessings, as always
:)Sharyn
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Sharyn, This is a really nice piece once again from you my friend. As with allof your work it touched my heart. Well done. Cheers Fez.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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G'day Sharyn, This is a really nice piece once again from you my friend. As with allof your work it touched my heart. Well done. Cheers Fez.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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thx so much Fez! :)S
Comment from GarthL
Great abab rhyme scheme, I really liked the repeating line and the desire to seek the truth. Well presented Sharyn in syllable perfect quatrains. I enjoyed the read and the education, thank you. WriteOn, Garth
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Great abab rhyme scheme, I really liked the repeating line and the desire to seek the truth. Well presented Sharyn in syllable perfect quatrains. I enjoyed the read and the education, thank you. WriteOn, Garth
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Bless you Garth - I rather like these kyrielles - have you done one? I think you'd have fun! :))S
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No but I'll definitely keep it in mind. I just reviewed another one also from kiwisteveh and do enjoy that refrain at the end of each quatrain. Well done!!!
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
And that's how we'll go! Blazing across the sky on a blue streak! I have no desire to go endless days on life support or be placed in a home when I don't even know my own name. Leave me to my pets, my nature, and let me just drop dead on my porch watching them, left alone by all man's science and interference. Fantastic poem!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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And that's how we'll go! Blazing across the sky on a blue streak! I have no desire to go endless days on life support or be placed in a home when I don't even know my own name. Leave me to my pets, my nature, and let me just drop dead on my porch watching them, left alone by all man's science and interference. Fantastic poem!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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yep - I'm with you dear - you remember that old Kenny Rogers song? "Let's go out ... in a blaze of glory ..." :)
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"All good things must end......."
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What's that movie where Louise guns the car off the cliff? YIPPEE!!!!!!!!!!!
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yep - Thelma & Louise - let's go for it!
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I love that movie with a passion! I've felt like that a million times. If there was no God, which there is, I probably would have driven off a cliff the day I got my driver's license. Go Thelma and Louise!! MN :)
Comment from 9999pool
A beautiful serenade to a life that will end soon. Like the hues of blue and golden red light in the pic, life had been wonderful irrespective of what it had been. There was not a complaint in the story - a life well lived, endured and endeared.
The death will unfold eventually but the end is near. There will be no regrets except to wait for fate to take us to a knowing place where all answers we seek will be answered.
Great write and penned with a message that death can be beautiful and peaceful too.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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A beautiful serenade to a life that will end soon. Like the hues of blue and golden red light in the pic, life had been wonderful irrespective of what it had been. There was not a complaint in the story - a life well lived, endured and endeared.
The death will unfold eventually but the end is near. There will be no regrets except to wait for fate to take us to a knowing place where all answers we seek will be answered.
Great write and penned with a message that death can be beautiful and peaceful too.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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and again dear! :)S
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:-) again. R.