All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Back and Forth"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Deserves a 6 but alas none was proffered. Wonderful intro, middle and conclusion are all well crafted, set out in precise order, bolstered by vertical wording, ever prescient and lyrically alluding to past youth vicariously reborn only for a fleeting moment by another who could be but sadly isn't her son...but maybe one day...who knows. Excellent, a good read.
Regards:
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Deserves a 6 but alas none was proffered. Wonderful intro, middle and conclusion are all well crafted, set out in precise order, bolstered by vertical wording, ever prescient and lyrically alluding to past youth vicariously reborn only for a fleeting moment by another who could be but sadly isn't her son...but maybe one day...who knows. Excellent, a good read.
Regards:
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you SO much Stephen! You're only allowed to give two sixes to one author per month, and I think you've already spent those lovely two sixes on me this month. But thank you so much for the thought! :)Sharyn
Comment from J. Dark
Sharyn, this is just gorgeous and so refreshingly different. I adore "connected by our fluid thread of time". You paint the picture perfectly in the reader's mind as you took a moment back in time. I lost the wish of the final line. Superb. I NEED MY SIX STARS BACK DESPARATELY!!!
I sincerely hope this one gets considered for Poem of the Month, next month, Sharyn. You have captured a moment artfully and beautifully.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Sharyn, this is just gorgeous and so refreshingly different. I adore "connected by our fluid thread of time". You paint the picture perfectly in the reader's mind as you took a moment back in time. I lost the wish of the final line. Superb. I NEED MY SIX STARS BACK DESPARATELY!!!
I sincerely hope this one gets considered for Poem of the Month, next month, Sharyn. You have captured a moment artfully and beautifully.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Bless you Julie - I liked this one too! :)))S
Comment from Lulube
This poem rowed me right down the river with you and your father. Down memory waters. The style of the lines makes the reading much more intense for the words that follow each other. The paper almost ripples for the reader by the carefully, chosen, words, in their right places. I felt the love for your father spilling over for your son.
Wonderful poem.
Lulube
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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This poem rowed me right down the river with you and your father. Down memory waters. The style of the lines makes the reading much more intense for the words that follow each other. The paper almost ripples for the reader by the carefully, chosen, words, in their right places. I felt the love for your father spilling over for your son.
Wonderful poem.
Lulube
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely review Lulube! :)Sharyn
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welcome
Lulube
Comment from strandregs
Aw what a wonderfuly visually descriptive pleasure croose through your memories, most enjoyable experience.
how wonderfully frozen are fathers in time.xx.Z.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Aw what a wonderfuly visually descriptive pleasure croose through your memories, most enjoyable experience.
how wonderfully frozen are fathers in time.xx.Z.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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what a lovely way of putting it! :)S
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Sharyn, I betcha there were firefighters there:D
An excellent work. I felt the rhythm you have a way of opening the door to the reader and allowing them to be one with you in this work. Great job as always.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Hi Sharyn, I betcha there were firefighters there:D
An excellent work. I felt the rhythm you have a way of opening the door to the reader and allowing them to be one with you in this work. Great job as always.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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I think my father was one of them dear - he was a Tom Cruise lookalike as a young man. :)S
Comment from angelface2
WHat a marvelous memorie of someone special. This kept me going wanting to find out who you were rowing with and what happened. Very nicely written. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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WHat a marvelous memorie of someone special. This kept me going wanting to find out who you were rowing with and what happened. Very nicely written. Miss Sally
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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bless you Miss Sally! :)Sharyn
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. It inspires strong mental images. It invokes emotional responses. It carries the theme well. The picture is great.
Barbara
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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This is a wonderful poem. It inspires strong mental images. It invokes emotional responses. It carries the theme well. The picture is great.
Barbara
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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thank you so much Barbara! :)Sharyn
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Sharyn,
Your poem is exquisitely penned and so easy to read and visualize. Your ode to your father is excellent, and the imagery made it there for my mind's eye to see. The color scheme, format, and graphics add finishing touches to an outstanding piece.
Curtis
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Sharyn,
Your poem is exquisitely penned and so easy to read and visualize. Your ode to your father is excellent, and the imagery made it there for my mind's eye to see. The color scheme, format, and graphics add finishing touches to an outstanding piece.
Curtis
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thx so much Curtis! :)S
Comment from uptowngirlchef1961
Sharyn you don't need me to tell you how amazing " back and forth" is. But I would like to.
It was a gentle turn from the present to the loveliest images from your childhood memories.
The stanza that speaks of being on the river rowing with your father is so masterfully crafted that i, as a spellbound reader was treated to a crush of soul-stirring images as a " witness" to this breath-taking scene.
It all works from the humor of the opening stanza with your son and the hulky young bodies of other teenagers to the final plaintive closing line with a wish that your son might see his grandfather
I love this poem and I write this review with falling tears for my own son ( 23 ) who will never know my own father who died too early at 41 years.
Another sumptuous feast for the senses. I am so glad that you wrote this one.
Jill
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Sharyn you don't need me to tell you how amazing " back and forth" is. But I would like to.
It was a gentle turn from the present to the loveliest images from your childhood memories.
The stanza that speaks of being on the river rowing with your father is so masterfully crafted that i, as a spellbound reader was treated to a crush of soul-stirring images as a " witness" to this breath-taking scene.
It all works from the humor of the opening stanza with your son and the hulky young bodies of other teenagers to the final plaintive closing line with a wish that your son might see his grandfather
I love this poem and I write this review with falling tears for my own son ( 23 ) who will never know my own father who died too early at 41 years.
Another sumptuous feast for the senses. I am so glad that you wrote this one.
Jill
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Jill, thank you so much! This one just came pouring out, pretty well without a change, when I got home from the gym the other night. It's been almost 25 years, but my father was someone really special in my life - also that of my sisters. We all feel the same way. He died at 59. I'm 60 now. I can totally understand the feelings this must have brought up for you personally, with your own son and husband's tragic early death. Life is not fair - quite often - is it?
Blessings to you & hugest of hugs
Sharyn
Comment from Selina Stambi
Love how the thread of thought progresses in this poem.
The intro. lines were great - I smiled as I thought of the pouting and posing I've noted at the gym too .. then the mood grows thoughtful, yearning ..... distant memories.
Very nicely done, Sharyn. Great work with the word-rowing!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Love how the thread of thought progresses in this poem.
The intro. lines were great - I smiled as I thought of the pouting and posing I've noted at the gym too .. then the mood grows thoughtful, yearning ..... distant memories.
Very nicely done, Sharyn. Great work with the word-rowing!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Bless you for reviewing and enjoying my dear! :)S