And then there's Grace
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Mercy's Rain"A collection of Spirtual poems
56 total reviews
Comment from 9999pool
For those who went the wrong way, went to hell and cannot escape its evil clutches, or found greed and temptations to much to resist - can they be saved?
Will the mercy rains falls on them. Without the rain and getting wet, we may not learn much about how we got so wet or how floods due to torrential non-stop rain become the wrath of nature - killing many by the thousands in landslides and floods.
let us pray for salvation and never loses sight of what god and kindness can do for all of us. have mercy on our souls and not condemn.
Good excellent expressions of message for those seeking to repent and redeem themselves.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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For those who went the wrong way, went to hell and cannot escape its evil clutches, or found greed and temptations to much to resist - can they be saved?
Will the mercy rains falls on them. Without the rain and getting wet, we may not learn much about how we got so wet or how floods due to torrential non-stop rain become the wrath of nature - killing many by the thousands in landslides and floods.
let us pray for salvation and never loses sight of what god and kindness can do for all of us. have mercy on our souls and not condemn.
Good excellent expressions of message for those seeking to repent and redeem themselves.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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I appreciate your excellent review and that you took the time to read and comment. Best to you always, Carolyn
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This Mercy's Rain gives so much hope and light to mankind. A time to repent and amend - a worthwhile message to all. Thanks for sharing. Ritchie. :)
Comment from Starlit Ink
We do need the rain to have a rainbow. Greed, jealousy and oppression can take the rainbows away, and in that case, we need the hand of God to keep the rainbow alive. This is a lovely abc that was written in a different and creative way compared to other entries. It also has a profound message, and should do great in the contest.
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We do need the rain to have a rainbow. Greed, jealousy and oppression can take the rainbows away, and in that case, we need the hand of God to keep the rainbow alive. This is a lovely abc that was written in a different and creative way compared to other entries. It also has a profound message, and should do great in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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I really appreciate your wonderful thoughts and comments. Thank you for reading, Carolyn
Comment from Kevin C
This is an excellent poem. It reads so well with great flow and unforced rhyme. I like how you take the reader into thought with your excellent thoughts. This is truly a wonderful write. Thank you for sharing.
Kevin
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This is an excellent poem. It reads so well with great flow and unforced rhyme. I like how you take the reader into thought with your excellent thoughts. This is truly a wonderful write. Thank you for sharing.
Kevin
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you Kevin, for your generous words and rating. I am glad you enjoyed the poem, Regards, Carolyn
Comment from fayesh
Your words ring true. Indeed, mercy comes from having experienced the pain of life. I like the metaphor of rain as a redemptive cleansing of the soul.
The meter of your poem almost sounds like a chant.
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Your words ring true. Indeed, mercy comes from having experienced the pain of life. I like the metaphor of rain as a redemptive cleansing of the soul.
The meter of your poem almost sounds like a chant.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful comments. I am happy you liked the poem. A chant. Hmmmmmmmmm. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Selina Stambi
Fabulous concluding line - so powerful and impactful :
When heart's can stand in Mercy's Rain. What a picture it evokes!
A beautiful poem.
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Fabulous concluding line - so powerful and impactful :
When heart's can stand in Mercy's Rain. What a picture it evokes!
A beautiful poem.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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I am so glad you liked the poem and the message it held. You are appreciated, Best Always, Carolyn
Comment from Shadow Pahn
Very nice piece. I love the story you tell within this poem. Your wordplay is excellent and the flow of the whole verse worked really well, thank yo for sharing
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Very nice piece. I love the story you tell within this poem. Your wordplay is excellent and the flow of the whole verse worked really well, thank yo for sharing
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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I am glad you like the message, and thank you for your kind remarks. Carolyn
Comment from GarthL
I have a song/poem called 'Always' with a repeating refrain 'always remember a rainbow follows the rain' which is the point you make in your Author Notes.
This is a good ABC poem concept you have but I don't believe it follows ABC criteria which is 5 line stanza the first four of which are alphabetic order and the 5th can be anything. I don't understand the gap in the first stanza, the second stanza is only 4 lines and the third stanza again has that strange gap in it. The theme is good but I feel it needs fine-tuning to be a strong contestant in the
ABC contest.
I actually think it would work better as 3 quatrains of rhyming couplets and add one line to make a rhyming couplet to finish?!? Good luck in the contest anyway but strictly speaking it doesn't meet form. LiveLove'n'Light, Garth
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I have a song/poem called 'Always' with a repeating refrain 'always remember a rainbow follows the rain' which is the point you make in your Author Notes.
This is a good ABC poem concept you have but I don't believe it follows ABC criteria which is 5 line stanza the first four of which are alphabetic order and the 5th can be anything. I don't understand the gap in the first stanza, the second stanza is only 4 lines and the third stanza again has that strange gap in it. The theme is good but I feel it needs fine-tuning to be a strong contestant in the
ABC contest.
I actually think it would work better as 3 quatrains of rhyming couplets and add one line to make a rhyming couplet to finish?!? Good luck in the contest anyway but strictly speaking it doesn't meet form. LiveLove'n'Light, Garth
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you Garth for the insightful comments. I may change the form later to the 3 quatrains, etc. (learning as we go, :-) ) Have a great day, Carolyn
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It is a truly great message that we all should hear Carolyn!! Good luck in all your future endeavors and the contest. StaySafe, Garth
Comment from Allison78
This is a fantastic ABC poem you have written. I love the imagery and the rhyme and meter is great too. Good luck in the contest!
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This is a fantastic ABC poem you have written. I love the imagery and the rhyme and meter is great too. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your wonderful review and rating, I am glad you like the poem, Carolyn
Comment from SamuelClemens
Excellent ABC poem that breaks away from the traditional 1 stanza. However, in the second stanza if you want it to fit in with the ABC structure it needs a fifth line. Other than that you've done amazingly. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
SC
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Excellent ABC poem that breaks away from the traditional 1 stanza. However, in the second stanza if you want it to fit in with the ABC structure it needs a fifth line. Other than that you've done amazingly. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
SC
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you Mark Twain :-) I appreciate all of your comments and will work on those suggestions. Best to you, Carolyn
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
This is a beautiful free verse... I do wonder, did you mean for there to be a space between the 4th and 5th lines? I am not sure that it is necessary, but other than that this is a beautiful poem that reads very well. Thank you for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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This is a beautiful free verse... I do wonder, did you mean for there to be a space between the 4th and 5th lines? I am not sure that it is necessary, but other than that this is a beautiful poem that reads very well. Thank you for sharing. :)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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I am glad you enjoyed the message in the poem. Thank you for all of your constructive comments. :-) Carolyn