Friendship
Friends come and go.37 total reviews
Comment from CALLAHANMR
This story meets all the contest rules. You worked all the required words into the story, but it lacked a good explanation Brady's actions when he found Bootsy dead.
Good luck in the contest,
Roger
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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This story meets all the contest rules. You worked all the required words into the story, but it lacked a good explanation Brady's actions when he found Bootsy dead.
Good luck in the contest,
Roger
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much Roger. You have a good point, but only so much can be accomplished in 150 words...I felt that the ending spoke for itself. Thanks again. Bob
Comment from BeasPeas
Hmmm! Author's note says "A real friend comes in when everyone else walks out." Seems Bootsy was a real friend to Brady, but not vice versa as indicated in last line--"sorry, I gotta go." In any case, I thought the piece was well written and interesting.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hmmm! Author's note says "A real friend comes in when everyone else walks out." Seems Bootsy was a real friend to Brady, but not vice versa as indicated in last line--"sorry, I gotta go." In any case, I thought the piece was well written and interesting.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hi, Marilyn. I have been a member since 2004, but took a few months off. I will be watching for your work from now on also. Thanks so much for the very encouraging review and welcome aboard Fanstory (belated) Bob (Mastery)
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Hi Mastery--Yes, Fanstory is so much fun and most importantly we get the feedback we need from other writers an the site keeps us writing. Beaspeas/Marilyn
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Author,
This is a gut wrenching story an I am sure scenes like this happen everywhere. You have captured the life of a drug addict well and in the process made me feel so sorry for these two people. I can tell you are a master at telling tales. You used the necessary words seamlessly and I'm glad I had one six left! Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hi Author,
This is a gut wrenching story an I am sure scenes like this happen everywhere. You have captured the life of a drug addict well and in the process made me feel so sorry for these two people. I can tell you are a master at telling tales. You used the necessary words seamlessly and I'm glad I had one six left! Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much,Chey. You are so encouraging....always. I am truly grateful and look forward to reading your fine work as well. Bob
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Thanks so much,Chey. You are so encouraging....always. I am truly grateful and look forward to reading your fine work as well. Bob
Comment from Tristian
This is a subdued story which tells much more than it shows. Well done. Also, I like the picture you incorporated. It brings the grit and shadows to your story .
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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This is a subdued story which tells much more than it shows. Well done. Also, I like the picture you incorporated. It brings the grit and shadows to your story .
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much, Trisian. Your review is so very encouraging. Bob
Comment from Judy Couch
Very well written. The ending was excellent. It leaves the reader wondering what will happen next and where Brady will go.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Very well written. The ending was excellent. It leaves the reader wondering what will happen next and where Brady will go.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hi, Judy.Welcome aboard Fanstory! I sincerely appreciate the six-stares and your interest in my work. I will keep an eye out for your work also. Thanks again! Bob
Comment from Dan Diego
All of the required words are accounted for in this short little tale about friendship and just how fleeting life can be on the streets. I think you chose the right setting to add contrast to the theme of friendship and sealed it with the harsh reality. Of course, squeezing all those words into less than 150 words is a challenge. This is my first review in this contest.
Great effort. I don't mind little trips to the darker side of life. This felt authentic. Good luck in the booth.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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All of the required words are accounted for in this short little tale about friendship and just how fleeting life can be on the streets. I think you chose the right setting to add contrast to the theme of friendship and sealed it with the harsh reality. Of course, squeezing all those words into less than 150 words is a challenge. This is my first review in this contest.
Great effort. I don't mind little trips to the darker side of life. This felt authentic. Good luck in the booth.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Hi, Dan. Thank you so much for your in depth review. I am very encouraged by it. I will keep aneye out for your work also. Bob (Mastery)
Comment from BethShelby
Excellent flash fiction. I guess when you're that badly hooked on drugs nothing matters but the next fix. Some way to treat a friend. This doesn't have anything about a contest listing at the top.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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Excellent flash fiction. I guess when you're that badly hooked on drugs nothing matters but the next fix. Some way to treat a friend. This doesn't have anything about a contest listing at the top.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2013
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Hi, Beth. Thanks so much for the six stars and your help as usual. I value your opinions always. Yes, it does say it's a 100 word contest on top of the page...Thanks again. Bob
Comment from Jacq77
This clever piece told a whole story in only a few words. Your descriptions had me feeling a lot of emotions, and I cringed when he just up and left, obviously not wanting the bother of what was to come. It is so sad to think that so many lives are lived this way. Well done. I hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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This clever piece told a whole story in only a few words. Your descriptions had me feeling a lot of emotions, and I cringed when he just up and left, obviously not wanting the bother of what was to come. It is so sad to think that so many lives are lived this way. Well done. I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much, Jacq. I am so encouraged by your fine review. I will do my best to read your work also. Bob
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this story about the two drug addicts that were there for each other, but he walked out on her in the end, not calling somebody for her. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this story about the two drug addicts that were there for each other, but he walked out on her in the end, not calling somebody for her. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Hi, Pam. Long time between notes, eh? Thanks so much for taking the time to review this. Sorry, I have been away and must catch up. Bob
Comment from Diny
Not an easy thing to softness and because of your fine writing skills we do softness it so vividly as always write on dear one hugs from your Missouri frirnd- Diny
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Not an easy thing to softness and because of your fine writing skills we do softness it so vividly as always write on dear one hugs from your Missouri frirnd- Diny
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Hi Stranger! How have you been? I have missed you and your writing. Thanks for the boost. Bob