Silence isn't golden
Silence is golden - is it really?33 total reviews
Comment from mauial
The thought behind your poem is good, however in such a short form to me your word choice is quite important and your using the word silence twice takes away from the write.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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The thought behind your poem is good, however in such a short form to me your word choice is quite important and your using the word silence twice takes away from the write.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your viewpoint and feed forward.
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I'd like to inform you that I have edited my poem, please take a moment to read it if you can. Thank you.
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Like it better and raised the rating :)
Comment from Simple Reflection
Wonderful, serene picture. I agree that silence can be deafening. It is only golden when a person needs to be silent to learn life's lessons. Your poem meets the 5-7-5 criteria and is something to ponder. Well done!
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Wonderful, serene picture. I agree that silence can be deafening. It is only golden when a person needs to be silent to learn life's lessons. Your poem meets the 5-7-5 criteria and is something to ponder. Well done!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much!
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I'd like to inform you that I have edited my poem, please take a moment to read it if you can. Thank you.
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I think it's great! Good luck in the contest!
Comment from His Grayness
Beautifully packaged...excellent graphics and text. I find it difficult to critique these very brief forms of poetry as they are usually so blunt and poignent in just brief points with few opportunities to wind up a story to a strong ending. Boom' these are all in your face immediately so they have to be well packaged. This one is and I do share the belief that silence in only golden in PRAYER AND MEDITATION!! Great job, congratulations! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Beautifully packaged...excellent graphics and text. I find it difficult to critique these very brief forms of poetry as they are usually so blunt and poignent in just brief points with few opportunities to wind up a story to a strong ending. Boom' these are all in your face immediately so they have to be well packaged. This one is and I do share the belief that silence in only golden in PRAYER AND MEDITATION!! Great job, congratulations! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my work. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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I'd like to inform you that I have edited my poem, please take a moment to read it if you can. Thank you.
Comment from J. Dark
I loved this gem. It is very clever and well penned. Well done - I thought this was great!
Kindest of regards
Mrs D :-)
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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I loved this gem. It is very clever and well penned. Well done - I thought this was great!
Kindest of regards
Mrs D :-)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your review, I'm glad you like it.
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I'd like to inform you that I have edited my poem, please take a moment to read it if you can. Thank you.
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Yes, I like your changes. It reads very smoothly and you have retained the cleverness of the piece.
I wish you luck with the comp and hope you are enjoying fanstory.
Kindest of regards
Mrs D :-)
Comment from Cleo Belle
This is a very brief but powerful poem, and what i like most is that the whole poem hinges around the last word; until you read it you have no idea that silence is blue, especially when you know it is 'dark' or 'golden'. Lovely topic, powerfully written. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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This is a very brief but powerful poem, and what i like most is that the whole poem hinges around the last word; until you read it you have no idea that silence is blue, especially when you know it is 'dark' or 'golden'. Lovely topic, powerfully written. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you. I'm so glad my first poem was not an entire flop! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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I'd like to inform you that I have edited my poem, please take a moment to read it if you can. Thank you.
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Yes, good.
Comment from Capricorn30
"Silence is not golden, no,";I don't recall where this statement originated from, however, I like your incorpoation of the color blue to replace the golden tone;
For many, silence can be a frightening part of their daily living, and often, all too dark--well-written 5/7/5
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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"Silence is not golden, no,";I don't recall where this statement originated from, however, I like your incorpoation of the color blue to replace the golden tone;
For many, silence can be a frightening part of their daily living, and often, all too dark--well-written 5/7/5
Comment Written 08-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012
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Thank you very much for your review. "Silence is golden" is a saying I hear many people use. But I think Silence is not golden, no. I'm glad you thought blue was a good replacement!
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I'd like to inform you that I have edited my poem, please take a moment to read it if you can. Thank you.
Comment from Norbanus
How is it that we turn thaat sound around
The leaden silence of the dark abounds
like dregs poured upon the rocky ground.
Not Golden, how can that be?
'tis om the rules
like Santa and the Cristmas tree.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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How is it that we turn thaat sound around
The leaden silence of the dark abounds
like dregs poured upon the rocky ground.
Not Golden, how can that be?
'tis om the rules
like Santa and the Cristmas tree.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your poetical review,
for the rating also I thank you.
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I'd like to inform you that I have edited my poem, please take a moment to read it if you can. Thank you.
Comment from Ekim777
A fine, intriguing piece. It echoes with innuendoes. It reminds me of Eliot's immortal lines. "Oh dark, dark, dark,'
They all go into the dark./ THe vacant interstellar spaces,
the vacant into the vacant.../" Take care. =Ekim777
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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A fine, intriguing piece. It echoes with innuendoes. It reminds me of Eliot's immortal lines. "Oh dark, dark, dark,'
They all go into the dark./ THe vacant interstellar spaces,
the vacant into the vacant.../" Take care. =Ekim777
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Thank you for your review and rating.
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I'd like to inform you that I have edited my poem, please take a moment to read it if you can. Thank you.
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Much improved. You have introduced a sense of the uncanny. Nice work.
Comment from Mosquito
I love the way your 5-7-5 creates a picture in my mind. I think you should turn this into a verse-poem someday, it's a great idea that could be expanded.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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I love the way your 5-7-5 creates a picture in my mind. I think you should turn this into a verse-poem someday, it's a great idea that could be expanded.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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I might turn this into a verse poem sometime, but right now, I have to leave it like this for the competition... Thanks!
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I'd like to inform you that I have edited my poem, please take a moment to read it if you can. Thank you.
Comment from Dodey
Great 5/7/5 poetry my friend..I agree totally..Silence is never golden.. to me it is lonesome and sorrowful.I like a lot of sound around me..and its usually me making it lol...Blue, a good description of it....Bravo..Kind Regards.. Dee
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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Great 5/7/5 poetry my friend..I agree totally..Silence is never golden.. to me it is lonesome and sorrowful.I like a lot of sound around me..and its usually me making it lol...Blue, a good description of it....Bravo..Kind Regards.. Dee
Comment Written 04-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much for you review Dee, and everyone else!
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My pleasure my friend...Smiles...Dee
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I'd like to inform you that I have edited my poem, please take a moment to read it if you can. Thank you.