My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 172 "Narcissistic You!"All of my poems of release.
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Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent syllable count and structure for the nonet
You use rhyme to good effect
nice alliteration in twisted tongue
good internal rhyme in used and abused
good alliteration and internal rhyme in soul/stole
strong expression of emotion in good nonet form :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Your poem is in excellent syllable count and structure for the nonet
You use rhyme to good effect
nice alliteration in twisted tongue
good internal rhyme in used and abused
good alliteration and internal rhyme in soul/stole
strong expression of emotion in good nonet form :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Thank you for a very helpful and great review.
Comment from RikkaLyn
This poem flowed very well and fit together nicely yet every line had a powerful punch. I like how you had an AABB rhyming scheme to start with and then changed it in the second half, that made it very dynamic. 'Mind so twisted, tongue of lies' is a fantastic line. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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This poem flowed very well and fit together nicely yet every line had a powerful punch. I like how you had an AABB rhyming scheme to start with and then changed it in the second half, that made it very dynamic. 'Mind so twisted, tongue of lies' is a fantastic line. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2012
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Much appreciated review, thank you so much.
Comment from MelReyn
This hit me like a ton of bricks. WOW. It also makes me think of my friend, who went through an abusive marriage (So glad she is out). You did a great job! It is so simple, but so eloquent and full of meaning. I loved it!
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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This hit me like a ton of bricks. WOW. It also makes me think of my friend, who went through an abusive marriage (So glad she is out). You did a great job! It is so simple, but so eloquent and full of meaning. I loved it!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for your great review. Much respect to your friend for getting out.
Comment from Dodey
A wonderful Nonet, with great choice words that bring clear imagery of one of self love and cruelty. Great picture that sits well with the content. Beautiful layout..Bravo ..and the Very Best of Luck in the contest my friend..Kind Regards..Dee.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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A wonderful Nonet, with great choice words that bring clear imagery of one of self love and cruelty. Great picture that sits well with the content. Beautiful layout..Bravo ..and the Very Best of Luck in the contest my friend..Kind Regards..Dee.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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Many thanks for your very kind appraisal.
Comment from Dollie Mason
I liked this and the way it's written. It tells a big story and one many people put up with for years before they decide to make changes...
dm
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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I liked this and the way it's written. It tells a big story and one many people put up with for years before they decide to make changes...
dm
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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Too many people are afraid to leave Dollie, it's so sad. Thank you for reviewing my poem.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is very well written it reads very smoothly with a strong feeling through the form well done good luck in the contest regards Jill
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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Yes this is very well written it reads very smoothly with a strong feeling through the form well done good luck in the contest regards Jill
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
The poem tells a vivid story of a bad relationship. The narcissistic man stole her life and took all she was. It is a sad but interesting read. Curtis
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The poem tells a vivid story of a bad relationship. The narcissistic man stole her life and took all she was. It is a sad but interesting read. Curtis
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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Thanks again Curtis much appreciated.