Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Woogle, Giki and the Mistbow"A collection of my poems
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Comment from juliedickson55
Ahhh, She Who Must Be Obeyed - I recall this from a PBS show called Rumpold?
Quite entertaining and amusing, your poem of rhymes and phrases flowing well over the tongue.
"So next time there's a mystery that no one comprehends
Once more I'll seek the answer from my knowledgeable friends" I like this line.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Ahhh, She Who Must Be Obeyed - I recall this from a PBS show called Rumpold?
Quite entertaining and amusing, your poem of rhymes and phrases flowing well over the tongue.
"So next time there's a mystery that no one comprehends
Once more I'll seek the answer from my knowledgeable friends" I like this line.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Yep, the show you are thinking of is 'Rumpole of the Bailey' based on the books by John Mortimer. Rumpole was superbly played by Leo McKern and SWMBO was the rather irreverent title he gave to Hilda, his long-suffering wife.
Thanks again for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from bossladyone
I like it and am glad for the author notes. This is well written and flows nicely. I like the rhymes also they are strong. The picture gives greater impact to the poem adding depth. I also learned something, because you included the author notes. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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I like it and am glad for the author notes. This is well written and flows nicely. I like the rhymes also they are strong. The picture gives greater impact to the poem adding depth. I also learned something, because you included the author notes. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Yup, educating and entertaining - that's me.
Thanks for the review.
Steve
Comment from Debbie7
Hi. I really enjoyed this and all the information supplied. This hit close to home for me and close to my heart. You can go for years w/o seeing a rainbow and then this year I saw 3 in 2 weeks. One was a double one, and one landed across the street from my house! Everyday for weeks we had a chance of a pop up thunderstorm and I too went running outside in my pajamas, not striped but you get it. I know Roy G Biv but SWMBO is too funny! Your friends sound great and I hope I get to see a fogbow someday. Sounds outstanding! So very good!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Hi. I really enjoyed this and all the information supplied. This hit close to home for me and close to my heart. You can go for years w/o seeing a rainbow and then this year I saw 3 in 2 weeks. One was a double one, and one landed across the street from my house! Everyday for weeks we had a chance of a pop up thunderstorm and I too went running outside in my pajamas, not striped but you get it. I know Roy G Biv but SWMBO is too funny! Your friends sound great and I hope I get to see a fogbow someday. Sounds outstanding! So very good!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thanks, Debbie - glad you enjoyed.
Took me 60 years to see one - maybe I don't get up early enough on misty mornings!
Comment from ronnie k
THANK YOU FOR THIS POEM. IN MY FADING GOOD JOY, THIS MORNING I CHOOSE TO READ YOUR POEM. I GAL. I DID, YOU PICKED ME UP FROM THAT MOMENT AND WITH YOUR HAND IN MINE YOU TOOK ME WITH INTO THE MEMORY THAT WAS FOR SURE WONDERFUL.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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THANK YOU FOR THIS POEM. IN MY FADING GOOD JOY, THIS MORNING I CHOOSE TO READ YOUR POEM. I GAL. I DID, YOU PICKED ME UP FROM THAT MOMENT AND WITH YOUR HAND IN MINE YOU TOOK ME WITH INTO THE MEMORY THAT WAS FOR SURE WONDERFUL.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Ronnie - only too pleased to write some joy into your morning.
Steve
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Good Morning from the other side of the earth. Love your clever poem. As to jandalled, it also has a drinking definition, and I just hoped you meant Jandalled because you were in an inebriated state, and then I get to visualize wobbly footprints, Jandals is perfectly descriptive, but hardly as much fun. Your wit and perfect rhymes are a joy to read.
I know we're getting into a gray area here, but the common spelling is gray, not grey, though both are technically correct.
You also might throw in a comma (or even parens around the next part) after:
"And SWMBO came and witnessed" as it really is a separate thought, even with the and in there .
Very clever and well done!--Wendy
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Good Morning from the other side of the earth. Love your clever poem. As to jandalled, it also has a drinking definition, and I just hoped you meant Jandalled because you were in an inebriated state, and then I get to visualize wobbly footprints, Jandals is perfectly descriptive, but hardly as much fun. Your wit and perfect rhymes are a joy to read.
I know we're getting into a gray area here, but the common spelling is gray, not grey, though both are technically correct.
You also might throw in a comma (or even parens around the next part) after:
"And SWMBO came and witnessed" as it really is a separate thought, even with the and in there .
Very clever and well done!--Wendy
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thanks, Wendy.
My knowledgeable friends tell me that 'gray' is only more common in your part of the world, but ,yes, both are fine.
You are probably right about the punctuation elsewhere - I tend to be a little careless of such matters - I guess when it's going before the committee I should be more fussy.
I had started another poem for this contest but ran out of inspiration halfay through - might try to finish it off for the next 'story in a poem' contest.
Have a good day.
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
This is not only delightful, Steve, it's damned informative.
I have never witnessed such a thing. Excellent rhymes,
rhthy, and fun. Well done. And good luck with the committee.
Peace, Lee
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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This is not only delightful, Steve, it's damned informative.
I have never witnessed such a thing. Excellent rhymes,
rhthy, and fun. Well done. And good luck with the committee.
Peace, Lee
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thanks, Lee - I guess most of us try not to venture outside at dawn on foggy mornings!
Steve