Tree Tag
A psychological trip.41 total reviews
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with great imagery, and characters were interesting. I enjoyed reading your story. It needs no changes made to it. Good luck with the next chapter. Mary
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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A good write with great imagery, and characters were interesting. I enjoyed reading your story. It needs no changes made to it. Good luck with the next chapter. Mary
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Mary. I'm delighted enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Cumbrianlass
A brilliant study, Lee. And another moment when I regret not being able to hand you that wee gold cross.
I was riveted. Loved the story of the spooky orchard, how you tied it into Jack's guilt. Fantastic work. I got goose bumps reading it. You captured the tragedy of Beansy so well. For some reason, I was reminded of Lord of the Flies.
A pleasure to read.
Av
The only very minor thing I'd look at is 'pants suit'. I think it's pant suit.
And we used to call it Cuckoo-spit. Guess we have more cuckoos in the UK than snakes. LOL!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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A brilliant study, Lee. And another moment when I regret not being able to hand you that wee gold cross.
I was riveted. Loved the story of the spooky orchard, how you tied it into Jack's guilt. Fantastic work. I got goose bumps reading it. You captured the tragedy of Beansy so well. For some reason, I was reminded of Lord of the Flies.
A pleasure to read.
Av
The only very minor thing I'd look at is 'pants suit'. I think it's pant suit.
And we used to call it Cuckoo-spit. Guess we have more cuckoos in the UK than snakes. LOL!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Ah, Av. This was a bit of a stretch for me, so your comments are most welcome (when are the not?). Cuckoo-spit! I like that. I was afraid no one would understand what I was talking about. You're the only one to mention it.
Actually, I did mean 'pants suit'--she was wearing two pair.
Thanks again, Av. Peace, Lee
Comment from Anthony Crosbie
This was a very interesting and clever tale. The dialog was realistic and witty. The last part blew my socks off. I was just enjoying the Beansy twist when the president part came up. Class writing! Archie
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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This was a very interesting and clever tale. The dialog was realistic and witty. The last part blew my socks off. I was just enjoying the Beansy twist when the president part came up. Class writing! Archie
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Archie. Your comments are most encouraging. I really appreciate. Peace, Lee
Comment from adewpearl
I love that the patient is shrinking the shrink by reading his body language
Jack's inner commentary has me in stitches
What a dramatic reveal when we find out Jack isn't just any old patient - and I really like the way you explain the meaning of his repressed memory and how all of this plays out
As always, you are the master of dialogue and character development :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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I love that the patient is shrinking the shrink by reading his body language
Jack's inner commentary has me in stitches
What a dramatic reveal when we find out Jack isn't just any old patient - and I really like the way you explain the meaning of his repressed memory and how all of this plays out
As always, you are the master of dialogue and character development :-) Brooke
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you again, Brooke. This one was a bit of a stretch for me.
A bit more complex. But I'm glad you were able to connect with Jack. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
Comment from writer c
Lee, this one is a mix of your incredible character dialogue and character development. I love the shenanigans of young boys that you write about so well..I've told you before when I read these ones to my husband he just shakes his head up and down, remembering those antics. But this one also has a chill, a sadness, an ache between the words that just breaks my heart. You write it without sentiment but tragedy just sits front and center in this one. Alas, Evil Eddie is stingy again.
Carol
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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Lee, this one is a mix of your incredible character dialogue and character development. I love the shenanigans of young boys that you write about so well..I've told you before when I read these ones to my husband he just shakes his head up and down, remembering those antics. But this one also has a chill, a sadness, an ache between the words that just breaks my heart. You write it without sentiment but tragedy just sits front and center in this one. Alas, Evil Eddie is stingy again.
Carol
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Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Carol. This one is a bit different, but then I like trying new things. Writing about kids is fun. Mostly, I write about the guys I grew up with. I'm really glad you liked this one,Sis. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
Comment from MumEsGirl
This was a good fun read. It has a nice flavour of out shrinking the shrink.
The mind is indeed a powerfull tool. I have memories from when I was under two, and still cant remember what I did last week lol
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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This was a good fun read. It has a nice flavour of out shrinking the shrink.
The mind is indeed a powerfull tool. I have memories from when I was under two, and still cant remember what I did last week lol
hugs
kate
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thanks so much, Kate. Yes, this one's a bit out of my bailiwick, but I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Sasha
I enjoyed this story very much. I am on a disability for PTSD and have sympathy for any one suffering from it. I completely missed the Mr. Presi..... and was surprised by the ending. Very, very well written and a marvelous case study of repressed memories.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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I enjoyed this story very much. I am on a disability for PTSD and have sympathy for any one suffering from it. I completely missed the Mr. Presi..... and was surprised by the ending. Very, very well written and a marvelous case study of repressed memories.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Sasha. PTSD can really cross up one's wiring. I thought I'd try to send a message. I'm glad you received.
Thanks again. Peace, Lee
Comment from sibhus
There's some interesting thoughts, or I should say a good story ha , ha. Nice job of the childhood flashback, you really have anexcellent ability to recreate the days of innicence with all the nostagic glow of Norman Rockwell. It had a good pace and really kept me interest. The little supsense you created by dropping President in the beginning. Now have me curious as to how Johnson really felt about escalateing the troops in Nam. Good stuff there, Lee.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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There's some interesting thoughts, or I should say a good story ha , ha. Nice job of the childhood flashback, you really have anexcellent ability to recreate the days of innicence with all the nostagic glow of Norman Rockwell. It had a good pace and really kept me interest. The little supsense you created by dropping President in the beginning. Now have me curious as to how Johnson really felt about escalateing the troops in Nam. Good stuff there, Lee.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thank you, sibhus. Exactly! I wanted to write a story about how it must feel to be responsible for so many deaths, but I wanted to come at it from some odd angle. I'm glad you enjoyed.
Peace, Lee
Comment from Realist101
Hi Lee...This is different. Very interesting too. I think the prez was committed then? From the ending that's what I got from this. About 99 % if all politicians need to be in some form of containment as far as I'm concerned. But PTS is real. I have a mild form of it after all the things that happened in southern Indiana. Scary stuff. But I enjoyed this, and was glad you made it longer too. Each character was real, and of course, your dialogue is flawless. IMHO. A six if I had it. x Susan
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Hi Lee...This is different. Very interesting too. I think the prez was committed then? From the ending that's what I got from this. About 99 % if all politicians need to be in some form of containment as far as I'm concerned. But PTS is real. I have a mild form of it after all the things that happened in southern Indiana. Scary stuff. But I enjoyed this, and was glad you made it longer too. Each character was real, and of course, your dialogue is flawless. IMHO. A six if I had it. x Susan
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Susan. Yes, this is different. I wanted to be a bit more serious, and try a more difficult structure, just to see if I could pull it off. Gotta keep trying to stretch my abilities.
Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from N.K. Wagner
This sounds like a fever-dream come to life, except that it's life turned into a fever-dream. What a terrible load of survivor's guilt this poor man is carrying around for no good reason. I feel so sorry for him.... I wonder if that's what's spurred him to be so successful. He's had to justify his survival.
Troubling...moving...an outstanding story, Lee. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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This sounds like a fever-dream come to life, except that it's life turned into a fever-dream. What a terrible load of survivor's guilt this poor man is carrying around for no good reason. I feel so sorry for him.... I wonder if that's what's spurred him to be so successful. He's had to justify his survival.
Troubling...moving...an outstanding story, Lee. :) Nancy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thanks so much, Nancy. Yes, it is a bit of a fever-dream. I was looking to try to stretch myself a little with this one.
I'm glad you enjoyed. And thank you again for the pumps.
Peace, Lee