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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from Cobalt Blue
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This is a very powerful poem, written with so much emotion that it is almost overwhelming at times. And for a poem, that is a very good thing! You certainly pull no punches with graphic language that tears at one's insides. Very well done! This is a gem! Good work!

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
    Thx again!!
Comment from R.Selvey
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Best in life!Not only have you described your inter feelings of a loved one.But at best-you have described the beast that lives behide our door.Teenage years are tough-you can only love them enough!The world such a mystery-One day God will show them peace! Amen-God Bless

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
    Thank you so much for reading & reviewing - and God bless in return my dear!
Comment from ScarletClearwater
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Well thank you for the author notes. I can apply this poem so much better now. It was a gory read in areas with bright imagery . Great job!

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
    Thx Scarlet! blessings for a Sunday!
Comment from ameen786
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Hello visionary1234, my friend, first, I am so glad that your mother was misdiagonized; you reflect the horrific experience extremely well in superb word choice/phrasings; thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
    Thanks so much for reading & reviewing my dear - and yes, I'm glad too! Believe me!
Comment from Janet Foor
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Since I am the daughter of one of those aging parents, I particularly identified with this poem. Your notes really touched me when you said, "like watching them die by inches in front of your eyes". I'm so pleased your story had a happy ending. My Mom is 92 and while she is in good health for someone who is 92, she is slowing fading right before our eyes. Very nicely written.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
    Thx again JM!
Comment from justchillin
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Thank you so much for sharing your amazing poem. It is so vivid and emotional at the same time. Brilliant use of words, great imagery and alliteration. I am so pleased that all was well for your mother, must have been a scary time. Well done xx

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
    It was indeed JC - one of these things we hope will never happen. So glad you were able to read & review and "get" the emotion behind this piece! Best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from c_lucas
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Dementia is like a stranger manifesting itself in a loved one's body. This is very well written. I am glad in your mother's case it was misdianosed. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
    I'm glad too my dear - that small taste was more than enough for me! Thx for reading & reviewing!
    Best wishes,
    Sharyn
Comment from Bobbi22
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Amazing, but sad, imagery and metaphors. Dementia is a terrible disease to deal with. I wish you and your mother well. The thought of genetics and "will I get this too?" always comes to mind with any serious diagnosis of a family member. Very well written.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
    Thx so much my dear ... I just updated the author notes with some great news - my mother was misdiagnosed! She had a terrible nose bleed/ haemorrhage so consequently lost a huge amount of blood - and as a result plunged into some kind of "shock" reaction where she was violently hallucinating. But after being sedated for 48 hours she woke up - lucid! This experience certainly gave me a terrible understanding of what other people go through ... and the fear is always there of course as those genes are very much in evidence throughout our family. Aging is not easy - and as for "gracious"? Forget it! What a challenge! thank youso much for reading, reviewing, and also for your good wishes.
    Unexpected "cheers",
    Sharyn
Comment from Doc Holiday
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Wow! What a mess! This was a powerful, emotional piece filled with blood, sweat and tears! And you still have the energy to report that your mother has been diagnosed with dementia...

Well-written free verse poem!
Good luck in the contest and with your mom!

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
    Thx so much my dear ... I just updated the author notes with some great news - my mother was misdiagnosed! She had a terrible nose bleed/ haemorrhage so consequently lost a huge amount of blood - and as a result plunged into some kind of "shock" reaction where she was violently hallucinating. But after being sedated for 48 hours she woke up - lucid! This experience certainly gave me a terrible understanding of what other people go through ... and the fear is always there of course as those genes are very much in evidence throughout our family. Aging is not easy - and as for "gracious"? Forget it! What a challenge! thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and also for your good wishes.
    Unexpected "cheers",
    Sharyn
Comment from MumEsGirl
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Thank you for sharing this work. My heart goes out to you. This is a chilling diagnosis.

You have done a great job of depicting the chaos that comes with this illness. I pray it will not be as bad as this
hugs
kate

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
    Thx so much my dear ... I just updated the author notes with some great news - my mother was misdiagnosed! She had a terrible nose bleed/ haemorrhage so consequently lost a huge amount of blood - and as a result plunged into some kind of "shock" reaction where she was violently hallucinating. But after being sedated for 48 hours she woke up - lucid! This experience certainly gave me a terrible understanding of what other people go through ... and the fear is always there of course as those genes are very much in evidence throughout our family. Aging is not easy - and as for "gracious"? Forget it! What a challenge! thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and also for your good wishes.
    Unexpected "cheers",
    Sharyn
reply by MumEsGirl on 01-Jul-2012
    I am so glad to hear this Sharyn. this often happens to older people. Kidney infections can also cause confusion. I am so happy for you.
    hugs
    kate
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
    thx so much Kate! My mother is pretty tough!