I Cried
The emotional expression of my storm53 total reviews
Comment from Bobbi22
This is not a 5-7-5 poem. However, it is an excellent poem. You will probably get rated down a lot because it is entered into the 5-7-5 contest. I decided to rate this on the quality of the poem alone - not as a 5-7-5. Great use of metaphors in the emotional poem.
This is not a 5-7-5 poem. However, it is an excellent poem. You will probably get rated down a lot because it is entered into the 5-7-5 contest. I decided to rate this on the quality of the poem alone - not as a 5-7-5. Great use of metaphors in the emotional poem.
Comment Written 29-May-2012
Comment from CHAPTER2
You wrote a very powerful poem which many people can
relate to. I liked your choice of words--river, dam,
waterfall and emotional rain to describe your tears.
The fact that you left the reason for this crying a
mystery further makes the reader relate to her own
experiences. Very well done.
You wrote a very powerful poem which many people can
relate to. I liked your choice of words--river, dam,
waterfall and emotional rain to describe your tears.
The fact that you left the reason for this crying a
mystery further makes the reader relate to her own
experiences. Very well done.
Comment Written 28-May-2012
Comment from Jane Johnson
Second stanza a little too wordy, maybe too many ing words in one spot. Crying is hard for many people; me being one of them. Brought up to be strong and crying is not easy for my pride to give into. Lot of thought went into this poem. Keep writing. Also, I think artwork helps to lure reviewers to your piece. Thanks for sharing.
Second stanza a little too wordy, maybe too many ing words in one spot. Crying is hard for many people; me being one of them. Brought up to be strong and crying is not easy for my pride to give into. Lot of thought went into this poem. Keep writing. Also, I think artwork helps to lure reviewers to your piece. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-May-2012
Comment from catch22
This is a powerful and expressive poem, but unfortunately, you entered it into a 5-7-5 poetry contest. This requires a 3 line poem with a 5-7-5 syllable count. You can still edit this piece for the contest if you hurry.
This is a powerful and expressive poem, but unfortunately, you entered it into a 5-7-5 poetry contest. This requires a 3 line poem with a 5-7-5 syllable count. You can still edit this piece for the contest if you hurry.
Comment Written 28-May-2012
Comment from Chris Tee
Sorry your poem is not to the requirements of 5-7-5 poetry.
Your poem has too many lines and stanzas.
Sorry I had to abandon the read
You will not shape in the contest.
This is a three line poem required.
It must have 5 syllables not words in the first line.
7 syllables not words in the second.
It must have 5 syllables in the last line
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Sorry your poem is not to the requirements of 5-7-5 poetry.
Your poem has too many lines and stanzas.
Sorry I had to abandon the read
You will not shape in the contest.
This is a three line poem required.
It must have 5 syllables not words in the first line.
7 syllables not words in the second.
It must have 5 syllables in the last line
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-May-2012
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi original,
I like the theme of this poem and the expressive words. However, it doesn't qualify as a 5/7/5 poem. You should have three lines in each verse with 5 syllable, then seven syllable and then 5 syllables. You should check out the rules again and edit it. However, I am giving you 5 stars for your effort....chey
Hi original,
I like the theme of this poem and the expressive words. However, it doesn't qualify as a 5/7/5 poem. You should have three lines in each verse with 5 syllable, then seven syllable and then 5 syllables. You should check out the rules again and edit it. However, I am giving you 5 stars for your effort....chey
Comment Written 28-May-2012
Comment from micci
Great poem beautifully worded it was lovely to read only a fool would think a man less of a man for showing his emotions, great job
Great poem beautifully worded it was lovely to read only a fool would think a man less of a man for showing his emotions, great job
Comment Written 27-May-2012
Comment from uniqueauthor
This is not a 5-7-5 poetry form. 5-7-5 is a Japanese poetery for with a strict syllable count in the format of three, and only three lines, and now caps unless the noun is proper.
5 syllables in the first line
7 syllables in the second line
5 syllable in the third line
____________________________
17 total syllable count.
This is not a 5-7-5 poetry form. 5-7-5 is a Japanese poetery for with a strict syllable count in the format of three, and only three lines, and now caps unless the noun is proper.
5 syllables in the first line
7 syllables in the second line
5 syllable in the third line
____________________________
17 total syllable count.
Comment Written 27-May-2012
Comment from Gungalo
Yes, a man can be strong even if he cries. It's okay and today no one will think the lesser of you for it. So go ahead and cry if you want to.
But now I sat(sit) with
my river all dried,
understanding after the storm
just why I cried.
Yes, a man can be strong even if he cries. It's okay and today no one will think the lesser of you for it. So go ahead and cry if you want to.
But now I sat(sit) with
my river all dried,
understanding after the storm
just why I cried.
Comment Written 26-May-2012
Comment from rwilliam
Bravo!! I LOVED reading this poem!
take a trip down this waterfall - I LOVED this line. SO visual!!
Unable to explain
this emotional rain,
pouring downward to my heart
like an out of control train.--LOVE this too!! Great!
There were many parts that were great. I'd end up putting your whole poem here. :-) Excellent writing! I so enjoyed!!
Bravo!! I LOVED reading this poem!
take a trip down this waterfall - I LOVED this line. SO visual!!
Unable to explain
this emotional rain,
pouring downward to my heart
like an out of control train.--LOVE this too!! Great!
There were many parts that were great. I'd end up putting your whole poem here. :-) Excellent writing! I so enjoyed!!
Comment Written 26-May-2012