Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from Joan E.
I am finally catching my breath after the jet-lag from 22 hours of the return trip from Africa. I need to find your work from February as soon as I can. I enjoyed your dramatic photograph accompanying these lines filled with vivid imagery. I also particularly liked your use of alliteration and metaphor in "a pool of liquid languid pain" and "fire's flame." -Joan
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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I am finally catching my breath after the jet-lag from 22 hours of the return trip from Africa. I need to find your work from February as soon as I can. I enjoyed your dramatic photograph accompanying these lines filled with vivid imagery. I also particularly liked your use of alliteration and metaphor in "a pool of liquid languid pain" and "fire's flame." -Joan
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thanks for stopping in, Joan! Welcome home! Get rested. February 's poem, Illuminated, is still accessible from my profile page. :-). I haven't been writing much!
Comment from Judian James
I don't know Calvin but I do know Diny well. I hope they're all right, Jewell. This is an excellent, smart piece with one line out of kilter but an easy fix:
"I know peace beyond understanding" Just flip "beyond" and "peace" and add a comma to read: "I know beyond peace, understanding" will flow a bit better,although the meter is still off, just not as noticeably. BRAVO
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I don't know Calvin but I do know Diny well. I hope they're all right, Jewell. This is an excellent, smart piece with one line out of kilter but an easy fix:
"I know peace beyond understanding" Just flip "beyond" and "peace" and add a comma to read: "I know beyond peace, understanding" will flow a bit better,although the meter is still off, just not as noticeably. BRAVO
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thanks, Jude. That line bugs me a little too.
Calvin is " Darkheart"
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What is wrong with Diny? Is she all right?
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Yes, just struggling a bit. Life's junk. She's a dear friend.
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Oh, sorry to hear. Diny and I have had some good laughs over the years. She calls me "Shirley"!!
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Haha...why Shirley?
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Oh, when Diny was here a lot a few years back, we always reviewed each other. Somewhere along the line in one of her reviews, or mine for that matter, one of us said "surely ... (whatever) and after that, I became "Shirley" to Diny. I dedicated a poem to her
years ago on and called "Honor"
Comment from Bobbi22
You describe so many emotions and reasons for them. This thought provoking poem is filled with great imagery. Where choice of past is wisdom gained - so much truth here. Great poem here. Thanks for sharing.
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You describe so many emotions and reasons for them. This thought provoking poem is filled with great imagery. Where choice of past is wisdom gained - so much truth here. Great poem here. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This was perfection, not only did it talk to spirit and soul, but to the part of me that believes in all I see.
I loved everything about this poem. Fabulous pic of yours by the way, the gold was your words....touching all....within me.
My favourite:
"Why do I hear an unknown song
Familiar only to my soul
Could there be healing in one voice
For making wounded spirits whole" // fabulous to ponder its depths within my own song.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
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This was perfection, not only did it talk to spirit and soul, but to the part of me that believes in all I see.
I loved everything about this poem. Fabulous pic of yours by the way, the gold was your words....touching all....within me.
My favourite:
"Why do I hear an unknown song
Familiar only to my soul
Could there be healing in one voice
For making wounded spirits whole" // fabulous to ponder its depths within my own song.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Aaah Maureen! You are a blessing! So very glad you enjoyed this!
Comment from TammyGail
I really liked this thought provoking verse VisionaryPoet, it was very well written and expressed, flowed well with some great rhyme throughout even leaves for a bit of healing, your imagery used was loveliness.. Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
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I really liked this thought provoking verse VisionaryPoet, it was very well written and expressed, flowed well with some great rhyme throughout even leaves for a bit of healing, your imagery used was loveliness.. Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thank you TG!
Comment from Carrie Carson
Thought provoking in that it acknowledges pain but allows for the notion of healing Grace still. Hope things work out for everyone.
No spag issues in this caught my eye.
Thank you for some soul searching minutes. Good read.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thought provoking in that it acknowledges pain but allows for the notion of healing Grace still. Hope things work out for everyone.
No spag issues in this caught my eye.
Thank you for some soul searching minutes. Good read.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thank u Carrie. :-)
Comment from rama devi
Inspired--exalted, even. Beautiful theme and delivery, dear Jewel. Well rhymed with abundant slant rhyming, too. Finely timed. Striking and beautiful presentation.
Especially loved the content and phrasing of the last three stanzas-
Sometimes it draws from deeper wells
A pool of liquid languid pain
A blending of all sorrows cast
Where choice of past is wisdom gained
I feel refining fire's flame
Creating gilded treasures fine
Where broken vessels become whole
Reflections of a truth sublime
Intrigued by those who know the fire
I've come to revel in delight
The joy of pain becomes refining
When combined with love and light
Exquisite--in theme and tone. Enjoyed the alliteration and internal near rhyme, too.
Blessings and Loving light, rd
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Inspired--exalted, even. Beautiful theme and delivery, dear Jewel. Well rhymed with abundant slant rhyming, too. Finely timed. Striking and beautiful presentation.
Especially loved the content and phrasing of the last three stanzas-
Sometimes it draws from deeper wells
A pool of liquid languid pain
A blending of all sorrows cast
Where choice of past is wisdom gained
I feel refining fire's flame
Creating gilded treasures fine
Where broken vessels become whole
Reflections of a truth sublime
Intrigued by those who know the fire
I've come to revel in delight
The joy of pain becomes refining
When combined with love and light
Exquisite--in theme and tone. Enjoyed the alliteration and internal near rhyme, too.
Blessings and Loving light, rd
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thank you! Really nice hearing from you!
Please take note, my portfolio is reactivated at fanart!
VisionaryPerspective
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oh, that's super news! I love your artwork.
Hugs, rd
PS Thanks for commenting on facebook, dear friend--Your support is much appreciated!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I see a pen glide through the night
Within the dreams of darkened hearts
It dips in golden honeyed truth
For eloquence beseeching art
That is the best tribute to writing I've seen in a long time... stanza can stand alone as a poem to me.
Intrigued by those who know the fire
I've come to revel in delight << Yes, good writing "puts us there" and we see thru their eyes something we are relieved we didn't have to see with our own
Very insightful and perceptive work. A keeper, for sure!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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I see a pen glide through the night
Within the dreams of darkened hearts
It dips in golden honeyed truth
For eloquence beseeching art
That is the best tribute to writing I've seen in a long time... stanza can stand alone as a poem to me.
Intrigued by those who know the fire
I've come to revel in delight << Yes, good writing "puts us there" and we see thru their eyes something we are relieved we didn't have to see with our own
Very insightful and perceptive work. A keeper, for sure!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thank you Phylis.
I've been there too. Had I not, I'm
not sure I could see beyond the natural realm.
Hugs!
THANKS so much for reviewing!
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
That is so absolutely beautiful and touching. It just reaches into the inner being and brings that light right in. I love your word usage in the poem
I feel refining fire's flame
Creating gilded treasures fine
Beautiful, my friend.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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That is so absolutely beautiful and touching. It just reaches into the inner being and brings that light right in. I love your word usage in the poem
I feel refining fire's flame
Creating gilded treasures fine
Beautiful, my friend.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much, JL!
my what pretty stars you have! ;)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary poet, you did a great job writing this poem that's full of imagery and emotion, great picture as well, i loved reading this poem that tells us to share the healing spirit that we're given.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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this is very well written, visionary poet, you did a great job writing this poem that's full of imagery and emotion, great picture as well, i loved reading this poem that tells us to share the healing spirit that we're given.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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I really appreciate your warm review.
So glad you enjoyed it!
