The Red Dress
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Comment from James McCorkle
You continue to draw out the suspense Alexis, and do it extremely well. I am enjoying this saga very much indeeeed.DRama at its best. You could wind up havibf a novie of this, and that's one movie I would go to see. Congratulations James
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You continue to draw out the suspense Alexis, and do it extremely well. I am enjoying this saga very much indeeeed.DRama at its best. You could wind up havibf a novie of this, and that's one movie I would go to see. Congratulations James
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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That would be my dream come true, but I must remember the saying 'be careful you don't get what you wish for' I never did understand that one! My huge thanks for your wonderful review and fabulous six. Take care. Alexis x
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Praise given where praise is due. James
Comment from LisaSilva
Very intense, edge of your seat kind of action! I've read stories of characters like this in the paper. Real life monsters that are happy to take their own lives if it means they control you and cause you pain. I'm not usually the revenge type, but this might push me over the edge and into my dark place...lol...Love it! Lisa
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Very intense, edge of your seat kind of action! I've read stories of characters like this in the paper. Real life monsters that are happy to take their own lives if it means they control you and cause you pain. I'm not usually the revenge type, but this might push me over the edge and into my dark place...lol...Love it! Lisa
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Lisa! I'm so glad your still enjoying it. Only abour eight chapters to go... Alexis x
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I'm confused... did Nick try
to kill Lisa?
talked Nick around before[,](;) she just prayed
again.This time - space after period
Such an intriguing chapter.
Margaret
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I'm confused... did Nick try
to kill Lisa?
talked Nick around before[,](;) she just prayed
again.This time - space after period
Such an intriguing chapter.
Margaret
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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I think you know the answer to that by now (which is why I held off answering your review!) Thank you, Margaret, your reviews are greatly appreciated. Alexis x
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, alexis, you did a great job writing this chapter where nick kidnapped lisa and wrecked the car trying to kill her. i enjoyed reading this one.
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this is very well written, alexis, you did a great job writing this chapter where nick kidnapped lisa and wrecked the car trying to kill her. i enjoyed reading this one.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for another of your wonderful understanding reviews. Alexis x
Comment from Maureen's Pen
I Knew it!! Wow ok this was a fast chapter and grabs the reader by the teeth....Can't believe Lisa blurted it out about the safe especially after thinking the thoughts of keeping it silent. Death warrant indeed.
I think your really creative a great obsessive character with Nick that only gets more insane as chapters move forward.
Fabulous work a great heart thumping chapter from one of the best writers on this site. Loved it.
Didn't see any spag, just a few UK words that may cause an issue on this side of the pond.
I'm greedy, want more.....:)
Maureen
"until the bonnet turned downwards and the ground came racing up to meet them...." // FYI bonnet = hood
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I Knew it!! Wow ok this was a fast chapter and grabs the reader by the teeth....Can't believe Lisa blurted it out about the safe especially after thinking the thoughts of keeping it silent. Death warrant indeed.
I think your really creative a great obsessive character with Nick that only gets more insane as chapters move forward.
Fabulous work a great heart thumping chapter from one of the best writers on this site. Loved it.
Didn't see any spag, just a few UK words that may cause an issue on this side of the pond.
I'm greedy, want more.....:)
Maureen
"until the bonnet turned downwards and the ground came racing up to meet them...." // FYI bonnet = hood
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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Well, another dollar (or three!) another day. I think I'm going to rename Lisa sc after this chapter. She obviously has as few brains as her creator! So glad you enjoyed it. Can I have a day off tomorrow? Have to make myself tantalising for Valentines day, eh, maybe not! Love ya, BSC xxx
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi alexisleech,
Right, so you had a dramatic event in mind at the end of your last chapter, and this certainly qualifies!
I haven't spotted any spag, the dialogues and the dramatic tension is good. Well done.
Patrick
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Hi alexisleech,
Right, so you had a dramatic event in mind at the end of your last chapter, and this certainly qualifies!
I haven't spotted any spag, the dialogues and the dramatic tension is good. Well done.
Patrick
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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You have no idea how I appreciate getting a review from a man and getting their take on the story. Thank you so much! Alexis x
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
"He's just a friend[,] Nick - I met him at a party," she answered, --- In dialogue, when the speaker uses the name of the person he's talking to, that name is separated from the rest of the sentence by commas - before, after,or both, depending on where it is in the sentence.
Lisa remembered back to her mother and her generosity in the mornings after she'd been drunk and she'd abused her. --- Who'd've thoughtthere'd be a reason to be thankful for her mother's abuse, but at least it trained Lisa for dealing with Nick.
Okay, I takeitback. She didn't learn anything; especially not how to keep hermouth shut.
By the time the police turned up[,] there had already been reports of Nick's maniacal driving from other drivers who had called in on their mobiles,
When he tried to climb over the twisted metal of the crash barrier[] so he could see more clearly, the police stopped him.
recognised Nick['s] face immediately.
The fact that Lisa was now in the same position that Alan had been in two months before because of Nick's actions[] filled Richard with a bitter hatred.
As a lawyer, his profession dictated that he remain impartial --- Lawyers are very partial toward thier clients. It's for the judge to be impartial.
It's toosoon to give you another six, but this chapter deserves one. Well done.
Roberta
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"He's just a friend[,] Nick - I met him at a party," she answered, --- In dialogue, when the speaker uses the name of the person he's talking to, that name is separated from the rest of the sentence by commas - before, after,or both, depending on where it is in the sentence.
Lisa remembered back to her mother and her generosity in the mornings after she'd been drunk and she'd abused her. --- Who'd've thoughtthere'd be a reason to be thankful for her mother's abuse, but at least it trained Lisa for dealing with Nick.
Okay, I takeitback. She didn't learn anything; especially not how to keep hermouth shut.
By the time the police turned up[,] there had already been reports of Nick's maniacal driving from other drivers who had called in on their mobiles,
When he tried to climb over the twisted metal of the crash barrier[] so he could see more clearly, the police stopped him.
recognised Nick['s] face immediately.
The fact that Lisa was now in the same position that Alan had been in two months before because of Nick's actions[] filled Richard with a bitter hatred.
As a lawyer, his profession dictated that he remain impartial --- Lawyers are very partial toward thier clients. It's for the judge to be impartial.
It's toosoon to give you another six, but this chapter deserves one. Well done.
Roberta
Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
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A virtual six from you is always enough, Roberta! Thank you so much for your help and reviews. Alexis x
Comment from Malerie
Poor, poor Lisa; fate just doesn't seem to deal with her fairly. Nick has certainly once again shown his true colors. I'm sure that Lisa will survive this attempt on her life but I'm nut sure what role Richard will now play in her life. Does he notify Alan of Lisa's accident? I'm sure the press will have the story covered but what will happen to Nick? I was thinking that maybe he would die in the accident and all of his wealth would be left to Lisa. I'm waiting to see where you go with this; keep writing, I'll keep reading.
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Poor, poor Lisa; fate just doesn't seem to deal with her fairly. Nick has certainly once again shown his true colors. I'm sure that Lisa will survive this attempt on her life but I'm nut sure what role Richard will now play in her life. Does he notify Alan of Lisa's accident? I'm sure the press will have the story covered but what will happen to Nick? I was thinking that maybe he would die in the accident and all of his wealth would be left to Lisa. I'm waiting to see where you go with this; keep writing, I'll keep reading.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
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I didn't want to answer your review until I had posted the next chapter, just in case I gave the game away. All is now revealed. Thank you. Alexis x
Comment from magicpotwhat
THIS IS SO GOOD very gripping the story has me on the edge of my seat I can imagine and feel all the different emotions swimming round my head. The danger of the phys'co nick, filling Lisa with dread and fear. Does Lisa survive brilliant read thank you
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THIS IS SO GOOD very gripping the story has me on the edge of my seat I can imagine and feel all the different emotions swimming round my head. The danger of the phys'co nick, filling Lisa with dread and fear. Does Lisa survive brilliant read thank you
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2012
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What a wonderful compliment! As the next chapter is now posted you can now find out. Thank you so much. Alexis x