Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Pardon My French"A collection of my poems
34 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
Ooh La La, what a delightful tale. Risqu©, but not vulgar. Titillating, but not prurient. Good job, even though I am easily impressed, this poem knocked my socks off. It was a thoroughly enjoyable read, thank you.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Ooh La La, what a delightful tale. Risqu©, but not vulgar. Titillating, but not prurient. Good job, even though I am easily impressed, this poem knocked my socks off. It was a thoroughly enjoyable read, thank you.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your review - your 'risque' appears on my screen with a little copyright symbol ('c' in a circle) which is why I didn't try to put accents on all my French words!
Thanks again!
Steve
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, kiwi, i enjoyed reading this little ditty with french words that please the tongue to read, even if i do pronounce most of them wrong. i know a lot of the meanings.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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this is very well written, kiwi, i enjoyed reading this little ditty with french words that please the tongue to read, even if i do pronounce most of them wrong. i know a lot of the meanings.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thank you - of course so many French words take on a character of their own once they enter our wonderfui language and only snobs insist on 'authentic' pronunciation.
Meci beaucoup!
Steve
Comment from stanishmichelle
You have made me laugh with your magnifique poetry. Oh, oui! It is hilarious and cleverly written. The story in the poem is amusing, and the accent bien! The poem is witty throughout and I enjoyed it very much. "I've seen those breasts before." an amusing line. This is a delightful poem to read.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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You have made me laugh with your magnifique poetry. Oh, oui! It is hilarious and cleverly written. The story in the poem is amusing, and the accent bien! The poem is witty throughout and I enjoyed it very much. "I've seen those breasts before." an amusing line. This is a delightful poem to read.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Merci beaucoup pour ta revue!
Comment from barkingdog
I was thinking, I had missed the FS announcement about a French epidemic. Yesterday, Pix. Today,Kiwisteveh. I thought what top poet will succum to it next? Evil thoughts took over my mind. "If 'they' are all brought down--I will rise to the top." I began making plans.
Then I read your notes.
Your poem was great. I liked it a lot. It sounded real good. Oh, boy. Oh, boy. It rhymes. It is funny. Good job. (Shit, all my plans down the crapper. Damn French.)
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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I was thinking, I had missed the FS announcement about a French epidemic. Yesterday, Pix. Today,Kiwisteveh. I thought what top poet will succum to it next? Evil thoughts took over my mind. "If 'they' are all brought down--I will rise to the top." I began making plans.
Then I read your notes.
Your poem was great. I liked it a lot. It sounded real good. Oh, boy. Oh, boy. It rhymes. It is funny. Good job. (Shit, all my plans down the crapper. Damn French.)
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Yes, I wrote to Pix that we could have made it one of those new 'challenges' if we'd known. Turns out we were both writing our poems at the same time!
Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
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Funny how that happened.
You're always welcome.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
I love it!
Great humor!
Love the words you chose and how you played with them.
Great rhymes.
Flows well.
Made me laugh.
Flows well.
I like your title too.
I like the 4th and 7th stanzas best.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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I love it!
Great humor!
Love the words you chose and how you played with them.
Great rhymes.
Flows well.
Made me laugh.
Flows well.
I like your title too.
I like the 4th and 7th stanzas best.
Kathryn
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thanks, Kathryn - this was fun to write and it's good to know it raised a chuckle.
Steve
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Steve,
You're welcome.
Kathryn
Comment from words
I got a giggle out of your French mangle.
It is a good bit of fun.
I especially liked:Money speaks - a cliche, but
It proved the coup de grace,
For as we smooched en route to home
She offered no impasse.
And now denouement to my tale,
At my place (or Chez Moi)
Where my fiance waited
For risque menage a trois!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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I got a giggle out of your French mangle.
It is a good bit of fun.
I especially liked:Money speaks - a cliche, but
It proved the coup de grace,
For as we smooched en route to home
She offered no impasse.
And now denouement to my tale,
At my place (or Chez Moi)
Where my fiance waited
For risque menage a trois!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thank you - sometimes the silliness takes over. Glad you liked the ending - I was almost out of Franglais words by then!
Steve
Comment from LadyCosgrove
Oh! I laughed so hard at this wonderfully ludicrous French(as only the French can be)fancy. Sitting here in my run down French manoir, having had lunch today in a French cafe, this fabulous scene just tickled the humour spot on.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Oh! I laughed so hard at this wonderfully ludicrous French(as only the French can be)fancy. Sitting here in my run down French manoir, having had lunch today in a French cafe, this fabulous scene just tickled the humour spot on.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Being there may give you a delightfully different perspective on my bit of silliness - I know many of these terms take on a life and meaning (and pronunciation) of their own once they migrate to English. I know the reverse is true as well - amusez-vous bien le weekend!
Steve
Comment from acajudy
I really loved all the "tortured" phrases and words. I think it is a great story poem. It old a story and amused at the same time. As you can see I really liked it. Thanks for sharing and making me smile.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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I really loved all the "tortured" phrases and words. I think it is a great story poem. It old a story and amused at the same time. As you can see I really liked it. Thanks for sharing and making me smile.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thanks for the review and the precious Six Stars. Much appreciated.
Ridiculosity my speciality. Check out my portfolio for more silliness.
Steve
Comment from Fishcake
Loved this! It amused me and I found it very clever. Very creative. I am wishing I could have thought of something like this. Imaginative, new, different. I loved the double entendres (!), humour and play on words in English and in Francais! I know some of the words might have been a bit tricky, but I think it worked wonderfully!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Loved this! It amused me and I found it very clever. Very creative. I am wishing I could have thought of something like this. Imaginative, new, different. I loved the double entendres (!), humour and play on words in English and in Francais! I know some of the words might have been a bit tricky, but I think it worked wonderfully!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the warm review.
This was a lot of fun to write so I'm glad you liked it too.
Steve
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Excellent, mon ami. Bien fait. I think poetry can take all forms, and I really enjoyed this. It is a very clever bi-lingual composition.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Excellent, mon ami. Bien fait. I think poetry can take all forms, and I really enjoyed this. It is a very clever bi-lingual composition.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Merci beaucoup!