Comment from
anna99
Excellent! The topic is great. There is a room for improving the explanation but still its well off. You need to add something more, I don't know exactly what. But its not whole in writing sense.
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Comment Written 29-May-2011
reply by the author on 29-May-2011
Thanks for the review - yes, you need to read the original first to see how this fits in.