The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Home is Not Where the Heart is"A family learns their father is a serial killer
30 total reviews
Comment from marcellawachtel
Very good chapter. The picture-smashing scene is very strong, and gives a profound significance to this visit back to their house.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Very good chapter. The picture-smashing scene is very strong, and gives a profound significance to this visit back to their house.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Thank you. I always appreciate your comments.
Comment from Tellis
It's hard to believe some people would treat their friends like they were the killers and not just the husband, but some people like to kick people when they're down. I think that they are almost as bad as the murderer. Great chapter and I saw no spags.
tellis
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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It's hard to believe some people would treat their friends like they were the killers and not just the husband, but some people like to kick people when they're down. I think that they are almost as bad as the murderer. Great chapter and I saw no spags.
tellis
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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People always seem to need someone to blame . Glad you liked this one.
Comment from fictionwriter
Great emotion in every chapter of this story. I can't imagine being in their shoes, but it is a compelling story to read. GReat job.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Great emotion in every chapter of this story. I can't imagine being in their shoes, but it is a compelling story to read. GReat job.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much. I sincerely appreciate your comments.
Comment from RebelRose
This is a great chapter. You describe everything in such a way that the reader can actually see the scene. Very good dialogue and the story flows along smoothly.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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This is a great chapter. You describe everything in such a way that the reader can actually see the scene. Very good dialogue and the story flows along smoothly.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Thank youso mu;ch. I am thrilledy ou continue to follow this book.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I've really enjoyed this high-powered chapter. You show incredible insight into the emotions behind the characters. It was like being in the room. Well done â?? can't wait for more!
Giddy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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I've really enjoyed this high-powered chapter. You show incredible insight into the emotions behind the characters. It was like being in the room. Well done â?? can't wait for more!
Giddy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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I am trilled you found his interesting enough want to start to the beginning.
Comment from LadyNyx
A very emotionally filled chapter near the end and a great release for the whole family. It's a shame but the messages you included are what I would expect would be received by the family of the man responsible for the murder of 12 girls. You did a great job showing the anger, how it can sneak up on you. I also like how you showed James' anger being a catalyst for Mom's anger release as well. Very nicely done!
One thing, check your quotation marks. You have an errant one haunting this chapter (naughty quotation marks, popping up in the most annoying places sometimes).
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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A very emotionally filled chapter near the end and a great release for the whole family. It's a shame but the messages you included are what I would expect would be received by the family of the man responsible for the murder of 12 girls. You did a great job showing the anger, how it can sneak up on you. I also like how you showed James' anger being a catalyst for Mom's anger release as well. Very nicely done!
One thing, check your quotation marks. You have an errant one haunting this chapter (naughty quotation marks, popping up in the most annoying places sometimes).
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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I will go look for that nasty quotation mark right now. Thank you so very much for your marvelous 6 stars. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from adewpearl
Valerie, What a moving and awful scene as they shatter the family photos - and how horrific as they listen to the message machine. To be at such a vulnerable time in their lives and to feel attacked from without as well as betrayed from within... you do such a compelling job of describing this impossible situation and what it must be doing to each and every one of them. Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Valerie, What a moving and awful scene as they shatter the family photos - and how horrific as they listen to the message machine. To be at such a vulnerable time in their lives and to feel attacked from without as well as betrayed from within... you do such a compelling job of describing this impossible situation and what it must be doing to each and every one of them. Brooke
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Yes, it is beyond most of our reality to even comprehend what something like this must be like for the families. It is an impossible situation, but one they have no choice but to deal with as best they can.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Sasha. This is an amazing chapter (wish I could give you a six). Here are the things I admire most: Mom's development from a robot to a human; the episode of crashing the photo frames; Mac's human side when he tells James to let Charlie comfort Mom.
Sorry Sasha, these are my reviewer's notes:
told at me --> looked at me; told me (?)
" after James' monologue
Susan needs someone in her live --> life
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Hi, Sasha. This is an amazing chapter (wish I could give you a six). Here are the things I admire most: Mom's development from a robot to a human; the episode of crashing the photo frames; Mac's human side when he tells James to let Charlie comfort Mom.
Sorry Sasha, these are my reviewer's notes:
told at me --> looked at me; told me (?)
" after James' monologue
Susan needs someone in her live --> life
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Go0od heavens, never apologize for pointing out errors or spags!!! That's is why I came to this site...to get help with my lousy grammar and even worse spelling. Thanks for the great review and keeping me on the straight and narrow.
Comment from words
Another great chapter in the ongoing saga of this family.
I guess, I came into the story half way through the first time.
I am so pleased to be able to read it from the beginning.
Jame's sense of self is impressive in a boy so young. For all of his trauma, he knows who he is.
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Another great chapter in the ongoing saga of this family.
I guess, I came into the story half way through the first time.
I am so pleased to be able to read it from the beginning.
Jame's sense of self is impressive in a boy so young. For all of his trauma, he knows who he is.
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Being so smart and spending most of his time by himself has given him a stronger sense of who he is than most kids his age. I am patterning his character after two geniuses I know, both are hysterically funny, obviously brilliant, and neither has a clue how to interact with society. They just blurt out whatever they are thinking. I love them dearly. I spend most of my time laughing while they try to explain complicated, unintelligible, stuff about physics and quantum whatever you call it. Glad you like this story and are continuing to follow it.
Comment from lola29
Sasha, you know how to evoke emotion. I would like to strangle those idiots who are blaming the family for a serioal killer's actions. Some people were born with a stupid gene. I understand why people feel it necessary to move away from their homes; the pressure would be too much. I still say this book would make for a great movie.
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Sasha, you know how to evoke emotion. I would like to strangle those idiots who are blaming the family for a serioal killer's actions. Some people were born with a stupid gene. I understand why people feel it necessary to move away from their homes; the pressure would be too much. I still say this book would make for a great movie.
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011
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Most do move away, many change their names, some families' loyalties are divided and some actually commit suicide. I have read a few books written by children of serial killers but really didn't find much honest, open expression of what they experienced. Some were written for the money, others to help lift the burden they were carrying. Glad you continue to follow this. Lots more to come.
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Are you kidding, I'm hooked!