Grammy's Memoirs 2018
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "I was born into a loving family"Bits and pieces of my life for my grandchildren
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Comment from marcellawachtel
This was quite painful to read, the constant contrast between what really was and what this child wanted and needed. Writing out 'what might have been' might have made reality it more manageable
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This was quite painful to read, the constant contrast between what really was and what this child wanted and needed. Writing out 'what might have been' might have made reality it more manageable
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I'm glad you saw how the contrasting helped to tell the story. ~patty~
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi mustangpatty1029
It is sad to think how many children suffer some degree of this in our 'modern' world, but it is also the 'making' of many of us I think.
Well written, lot's of luck with it.
Patrick
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Hi mustangpatty1029
It is sad to think how many children suffer some degree of this in our 'modern' world, but it is also the 'making' of many of us I think.
Well written, lot's of luck with it.
Patrick
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I'm glad you saw how the contrasting helped to tell the story. (and yes, I agree - it is the 'making' of many of us.) ~patty~
Comment from MizKat
Mustangpatty - Your story is wonderful, touching, sad, and beautiful all at once. It almost sounds like a true story, but I hope it isn't. This is great stuff!!! Kat
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Mustangpatty - Your story is wonderful, touching, sad, and beautiful all at once. It almost sounds like a true story, but I hope it isn't. This is great stuff!!! Kat
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I'm glad you saw how the contrasting helped to tell the story. ~patty~
Comment from markk
A beautiful and very moving piece of someone who should have been loved but never was. A sad story and one that brings me to reflect on how uncared for some children are. well done.
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A beautiful and very moving piece of someone who should have been loved but never was. A sad story and one that brings me to reflect on how uncared for some children are. well done.
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I'm glad you saw how the contrasting helped to tell the story. ~patty~
Comment from adewpearl
Patty, you do a masterful job of alternating paragraphs between the childhood this woman wishes she had experienced and the hand life really dealt her. This works so effectively to show the impact her family's neglect and lack of affection had on her. What an interesting assignment for her therapist to have suggested - it really works. Brooke
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Patty, you do a masterful job of alternating paragraphs between the childhood this woman wishes she had experienced and the hand life really dealt her. This works so effectively to show the impact her family's neglect and lack of affection had on her. What an interesting assignment for her therapist to have suggested - it really works. Brooke
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I'm glad you saw how the contrasting helped to tell the story. ~patty~
Comment from RKagan
I too cried for the little girl who could have been. This is a touching piece. The reader is swept into the emotions. If I had a six left I would give it to you.
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I too cried for the little girl who could have been. This is a touching piece. The reader is swept into the emotions. If I had a six left I would give it to you.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading and the generous review - I appreciate your 'almost six.' (Why do we have so few?) Thank you for your continuing support of my work. ~patty~
Comment from quashdog
Sad story of what could have been. A hug and An "I love you" can go a long way to nurture a child into a healthy stable adult. You paint a good but sad picture of comparison/contrast of what was versus what could have been
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Sad story of what could have been. A hug and An "I love you" can go a long way to nurture a child into a healthy stable adult. You paint a good but sad picture of comparison/contrast of what was versus what could have been
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I appreciate your comments and kind words. ~patty~
Comment from Espresso momma
Interesting story. Jenny is shown here to be a strong character reguardless of the pitfalls around her. The story kept me interested through to the end except one area you said;He loved taking his baby sister out in the yard to talk- next paragraph--says;Her brother was almost ten years older and she couldn't remember a single time they spent time alone. A bit confussing. Thanks and good luck on the contest.
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Interesting story. Jenny is shown here to be a strong character reguardless of the pitfalls around her. The story kept me interested through to the end except one area you said;He loved taking his baby sister out in the yard to talk- next paragraph--says;Her brother was almost ten years older and she couldn't remember a single time they spent time alone. A bit confussing. Thanks and good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much for reading and the generous review. I appreciate your comments. ~patty~
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Patty:)
What a powerful story you tell through fictional journal entries interspersed with desired reality.
Reparenting is a valid way of rewriting negative childhood memories. When applied with hypnosis, it is possible to reinterpret painful childhood memories. This is most effective when a small child may feel abused because of failings of a parent, teacher or friend. perhaps when examined with the knowldge of an adult mind, a person recognizes that there was a failuure only because of circumstances and they can move on in life with enlightened feelings.
This seems to be the exercise of your story, but as often happens, there is no one to share your new feelings with and despair continues as in your story.
Very well done with a touch of grim realism. As Thomas Wolfe wrote, "You Can't Go Home Again."
Roger
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Hi Patty:)
What a powerful story you tell through fictional journal entries interspersed with desired reality.
Reparenting is a valid way of rewriting negative childhood memories. When applied with hypnosis, it is possible to reinterpret painful childhood memories. This is most effective when a small child may feel abused because of failings of a parent, teacher or friend. perhaps when examined with the knowldge of an adult mind, a person recognizes that there was a failuure only because of circumstances and they can move on in life with enlightened feelings.
This seems to be the exercise of your story, but as often happens, there is no one to share your new feelings with and despair continues as in your story.
Very well done with a touch of grim realism. As Thomas Wolfe wrote, "You Can't Go Home Again."
Roger
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you SO much for reading and the generous review. I appreciate your comments, and your insights on this therapeutic tool. ~patty~
Comment from sweetsilversong
Patty, a very heart breaking story, penned with such a lot of thought and feeling.
Had me filling up reading it, such was the emotion you instilled in your words.
Thank you for sharing.
Best wishes.
SSS
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Patty, a very heart breaking story, penned with such a lot of thought and feeling.
Had me filling up reading it, such was the emotion you instilled in your words.
Thank you for sharing.
Best wishes.
SSS
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. Thank you for seeing the pain of the little girl - she's better now. ~patty~