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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a great story about someone who wanted to give up and the person who wouldn't give in to their demands and a donor was found. great advertisement for organ donation, which i have signed up for since turning eighteen. good luck in the contest
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this is a great story about someone who wanted to give up and the person who wouldn't give in to their demands and a donor was found. great advertisement for organ donation, which i have signed up for since turning eighteen. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Belinda
Did she or did she not give the pills? I hope not. Oops, look how engrossed I am with this 100 word dash. Interestingly told, Author.
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Did she or did she not give the pills? I hope not. Oops, look how engrossed I am with this 100 word dash. Interestingly told, Author.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Spiritual Echo
You did an incredible job and I'm not even sure you needed to use up the budget with your words.
Carefully, well chosen words, succinct and highly effective.
Great entry.
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You did an incredible job and I'm not even sure you needed to use up the budget with your words.
Carefully, well chosen words, succinct and highly effective.
Great entry.
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Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from ddv
Considering the objective of the contest, well done. The last sentence hits it home although I don't think 100 words was enough to really capture the depth and intensity of the love of a couple who are about to be separated by death. But you did it nicely here considering the word limit. The last line fills in all the blanks, so very clever well done! No spelling or grammatical errors
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Considering the objective of the contest, well done. The last sentence hits it home although I don't think 100 words was enough to really capture the depth and intensity of the love of a couple who are about to be separated by death. But you did it nicely here considering the word limit. The last line fills in all the blanks, so very clever well done! No spelling or grammatical errors
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from daymanrayne
I missed a couple of steps in this. I think this was the wrong contest for you because this story could have been bigger
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I missed a couple of steps in this. I think this was the wrong contest for you because this story could have been bigger
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from bowls
Well done! You've created suspense,pathos and relief in very few words. The dialogue is realistic-sounding and the narration is excellent. Check the sentence "I can't this"; obviously you've left out a word. Good luck in the contest.
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Well done! You've created suspense,pathos and relief in very few words. The dialogue is realistic-sounding and the narration is excellent. Check the sentence "I can't this"; obviously you've left out a word. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from jmdg1954
Nicely done... good writing skills to write a complete story in 100 words or less. You got the required, charector, conflict and resolution as needed, with a good twist at the end. One question in the line--> "Please don't. You're my life. I can't this"--- is there a word missing or am I reading it wrong. Take a peek before the contest closes. Hate to see you get penalized... good luck, John
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Nicely done... good writing skills to write a complete story in 100 words or less. You got the required, charector, conflict and resolution as needed, with a good twist at the end. One question in the line--> "Please don't. You're my life. I can't this"--- is there a word missing or am I reading it wrong. Take a peek before the contest closes. Hate to see you get penalized... good luck, John
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Joan E.
Ah, a happy ending after setting us up for great despair--good twist. (There appears to be a word missing in the sixth paragraph.) Best wishes in the contest.
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Ah, a happy ending after setting us up for great despair--good twist. (There appears to be a word missing in the sixth paragraph.) Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
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Thank you for your good wishes. We are now exploring Rio de Janeiro, Brazil. Prospero ano nuevo- Joan
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Thank you for your good wishes. We are now exploring Rio de Janeiro, Brazil. Prospero ano nuevo- Joan
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Thank you for your good wishes. We are now exploring Rio de Janeiro, Brazil. Prospero ano nuevo- Joan
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
An excellent short, short story about the agony of deciding whether to help a loved one end the pain and suffering. And I love the happy ending! [Possible typo alert: In this sentence, "'Please don't. You're my life. I can't this,' she whimpered." did you mean to say "I can't DO this."?] Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
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An excellent short, short story about the agony of deciding whether to help a loved one end the pain and suffering. And I love the happy ending! [Possible typo alert: In this sentence, "'Please don't. You're my life. I can't this,' she whimpered." did you mean to say "I can't DO this."?] Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from keimosobie
Wow 100 on the nose. i thought 100 words would be
a bit longer somehow. well I didn't see any errors.
It was well written. Very good story. Good luck in
the contest. I hope she didn't take the pills.
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Wow 100 on the nose. i thought 100 words would be
a bit longer somehow. well I didn't see any errors.
It was well written. Very good story. Good luck in
the contest. I hope she didn't take the pills.
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
