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Comment from FredCollingwood
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Cure story. I love the beginning. I could picture them clearly. One comment:

Okay, but if we get caught -" > It may be the site's formatting, but the em dash should be two dashes--no spaces.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Sorry for such a late thank you, but I do appreciate your support..Smiles, Carol
Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi Carol,

Another delightful poem. I love the notion of two carrot-topped twin boys. I was as excited as Frankie for Harry to open their treasure. Poor Sammy, I bet he got blamed for a plethora of things! Well done. Blessings, chey

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Sorry for such a late thank you, but I do appreciate your support..Smiles, Carol
Comment from Matt9537
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I didn't realise it was a micro fiction until I had finished. It had the description, detail and flow of a much longer story. So very very well done on those fronts!

Very enjoyable to read. Fantasic story thanks for sharing! :)

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Sorry for such a late thank you, but I do appreciate your support..Smiles, Carol
Comment from grassroots08
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This is interesting. Thanks for sharing it. Looks like the poor dog is gonna take this rap and this may not be the first time or the last. Cheers, Don

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Sorry for such a late thank you, but I do appreciate your support..Smiles, Carol
Comment from sgalletti
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Hi Carol! What a great piece of flash fiction! You provided a wonderful example of what this writing is really all about...Love the setting, characters and ending for sure! Nicely done...Sue

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
Comment from adewpearl
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we're telling Mom we saw Sammy take it - capitalize Mom since it is used like her name here
Why is the secret stash of chocolate kept in a stifling attic in a dusty trunk? I should think there would be a great chance of its melting there, if nothing else.
A cute story from the point of view of children - my daughter blamed the mess she made in her room on her gerbils once when she was very little :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Brooke,

    Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Writeaway...
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Great short story Begin Again, as usual you captured my mind, I found no spags whatsoeveer, it was a great tale to read, excellent job, keep writing!!

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
Comment from ladybird
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This one gave me a smile. I could just picture those two scamps eating the stolen chocolate. My little dog loves chocolate, he just gets a little taster, it's poision if they have too much. Loved this one.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
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This is cute little story. I imagine carot topped twin boys would be getting into trouble pretty regularly. Maybe its not importart to the story, but a hot attic is bad place to store chocolate and it probably wouldn't be so tasty if stored in a dusty trunk. LOL

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
Comment from dmjones
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The dog will surely get sick if it really ate the chocolate. Mom may figure out who really ate it. This is cute and sounds like typical boys. Well done as usual.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010

reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol