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Comment from Belinda
Hi, Carol, I think it is a good idea to write it down. At least you will have a written account, and at least writing is not hard work for you, far, far easier than the work you've described here in this story. I do hope by the next part everything will be better. You've written your experiences clearly and without being dramatic, which is good for you in this situation.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Hi, Carol, I think it is a good idea to write it down. At least you will have a written account, and at least writing is not hard work for you, far, far easier than the work you've described here in this story. I do hope by the next part everything will be better. You've written your experiences clearly and without being dramatic, which is good for you in this situation.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Belinda,
Drama...that seemed like the key word of late, but the stage crew keeps changing so fast I can't find time to kick and scream at anyone...Thanks for the kind thoughts. Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Wow! You poor thing. No wonder you haven't been on FanStory. And I was feeling sorry for myself because I had a four month house guest who lay on my sofa and watched TV all day but when I wanted to get on the computer, she wanted to talk non-stop. I'm glad you decided to write about your nightmare. I don't dare write about mine. Great post. Now I'll go check out the second part.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Wow! You poor thing. No wonder you haven't been on FanStory. And I was feeling sorry for myself because I had a four month house guest who lay on my sofa and watched TV all day but when I wanted to get on the computer, she wanted to talk non-stop. I'm glad you decided to write about your nightmare. I don't dare write about mine. Great post. Now I'll go check out the second part.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Beth,
Thanks so mjuch for the kind thoughts...I truly appreciate them...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Carol ...
Oh dear - you have all my sympathy and I could just about be there with you, sharing your feeling of hopelessness as you found what a mess had been made in your lovely big home.
There are just two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - I wasn't happening! I think you mean -
It wasn't happening!
* You have - Having been raised to believe that one (singular) can achieve anything they (plural) set their minds on ... I suggest - to believe that we can achieve anything we set our minds to ....
I look forward to Part 2, wondering what could be even worse than what you had already discovered.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Hullo Carol ...
Oh dear - you have all my sympathy and I could just about be there with you, sharing your feeling of hopelessness as you found what a mess had been made in your lovely big home.
There are just two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - I wasn't happening! I think you mean -
It wasn't happening!
* You have - Having been raised to believe that one (singular) can achieve anything they (plural) set their minds on ... I suggest - to believe that we can achieve anything we set our minds to ....
I look forward to Part 2, wondering what could be even worse than what you had already discovered.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Nanette,
Thanks as usual for all your help and support...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Carol,
All I have to say you have the will power to keep going with all the problems you have in your life
Perfect writing and I didn't see one thing to pick apart.
Thank you for sharing you story.
Gert
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Hello Carol,
All I have to say you have the will power to keep going with all the problems you have in your life
Perfect writing and I didn't see one thing to pick apart.
Thank you for sharing you story.
Gert
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Gert,
Thanks for taking the time to share my misery and laugh too! If we couldn't laugh,life would be too much. Smiles, CArol
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
lol- Well, I did this backward- reading part 2 first! But I got the whole, wonderful (horrible) story and applaud you for writing this woeful tale of revamping a home that relatives have destroyed. Know what you mean about it being 'different' when you find yourself older- remembering when it used to be a fun thing! Thanks so much for sharing. Betty
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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lol- Well, I did this backward- reading part 2 first! But I got the whole, wonderful (horrible) story and applaud you for writing this woeful tale of revamping a home that relatives have destroyed. Know what you mean about it being 'different' when you find yourself older- remembering when it used to be a fun thing! Thanks so much for sharing. Betty
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Betty,
Thanks so much for understanding and for the kind thoughts. Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I fully understand. I have discovered no matter how bad things are, they can always get worse and not only can they get worse, they will.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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I fully understand. I have discovered no matter how bad things are, they can always get worse and not only can they get worse, they will.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Barbara,
Amen to that...Just when I think we are on the road to recovery...oops! something else happens. Smiles, CArol
Comment from c_lucas
Relatives aka renters are sometime the worst. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Relatives aka renters are sometime the worst. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Charlie,
As always, I appreciate the review and your kind words. Your stars added a bit of sunshine to my dark cloud...Thanks! Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from bowls
I feel your pain! And you say things get worse than this? I just can't imagine. You write this in a very frank manner which puts your readers on your side immediately. Your ideas are well organized and written in clear English (nothing to puzzle over). I'm looking forward to reading your next part. I do hope things have since turned around for you.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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I feel your pain! And you say things get worse than this? I just can't imagine. You write this in a very frank manner which puts your readers on your side immediately. Your ideas are well organized and written in clear English (nothing to puzzle over). I'm looking forward to reading your next part. I do hope things have since turned around for you.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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bowls,
Thanks for reading and for the good wishes..I need all I can get. Smiles, Carol
Comment from missy98writer
Carol,
your non-fiction story is very well written. You and Lola both are my favorite short story or continuous story authors who don't generally do books. I loved the narrative in this installment. Here are the paragraphs that stood out for me:
Have you ever had a bad day and wondered what else can go wrong? Well, dear friends and readers, in the past few weeks I have discovered the answer to that question. Beyond a shadow of a doubt, the only word suited is - Plenty!
My "honey" was providing us a comfortable living, our savings account had a few dollars, and I would soon eligible for social security. Considering all the facts, we made a joint decision - with a few minor adjustments, our life style wouldn't change much. Hindsight proved that to be a huge fallacy.
fter the house was empty of delinquent renters, I stood alone on the front walkway, staring at the old homestead. So many memories, good times, happy times, flooded my mind, followed by a torrent of tears. The once beautiful flower gardens were filled with two-foot high weeds, only a few blades of grass dotted the sun-baked dirt, and a forest of spindly saplings sprouted everywhere.
Having been raised to believe that one can achieve anything they set their minds on, I pushed all troubling thoughts aside and made the decision to renovate. I knew our budget was nil, but I convinced myself hard work and determination would champion the difficulties. I must have been high on wishful thinking!
I'm off to read the rest of what's been happening to you. They say bad news comes in threes. I feel for you. I'm off to read part two. I'm awarding your five stars of excellence. Keep happy thoughts or go outside and look at the flowers. . .Melissa.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Carol,
your non-fiction story is very well written. You and Lola both are my favorite short story or continuous story authors who don't generally do books. I loved the narrative in this installment. Here are the paragraphs that stood out for me:
Have you ever had a bad day and wondered what else can go wrong? Well, dear friends and readers, in the past few weeks I have discovered the answer to that question. Beyond a shadow of a doubt, the only word suited is - Plenty!
My "honey" was providing us a comfortable living, our savings account had a few dollars, and I would soon eligible for social security. Considering all the facts, we made a joint decision - with a few minor adjustments, our life style wouldn't change much. Hindsight proved that to be a huge fallacy.
fter the house was empty of delinquent renters, I stood alone on the front walkway, staring at the old homestead. So many memories, good times, happy times, flooded my mind, followed by a torrent of tears. The once beautiful flower gardens were filled with two-foot high weeds, only a few blades of grass dotted the sun-baked dirt, and a forest of spindly saplings sprouted everywhere.
Having been raised to believe that one can achieve anything they set their minds on, I pushed all troubling thoughts aside and made the decision to renovate. I knew our budget was nil, but I convinced myself hard work and determination would champion the difficulties. I must have been high on wishful thinking!
I'm off to read the rest of what's been happening to you. They say bad news comes in threes. I feel for you. I'm off to read part two. I'm awarding your five stars of excellence. Keep happy thoughts or go outside and look at the flowers. . .Melissa.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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MIssy,
Speaking of flowers..I can't just look because I must move 500 patio blocks and garden after garden of flowers from my present home to the house...Thanks for reminding me! LOL Just kidding...thanks for the great thoughts and kindness. Smiles, Carol
Comment from RebelRose
I would soon [be] eligible
Hadn't I [did] ...[done]
They say that truth is stranger than fiction. I learned a long time ago not to say, "what next" when I think the worst has happened. There is always a "next". I am looking forward to moving on to part II of this.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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I would soon [be] eligible
Hadn't I [did] ...[done]
They say that truth is stranger than fiction. I learned a long time ago not to say, "what next" when I think the worst has happened. There is always a "next". I am looking forward to moving on to part II of this.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Patti,
Yes...there is always a next..some better than others but one never knows. Thanks...Carol