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Comment from dmjones
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And another good one. You're really good at the very short stories. They are interesting to read and tell a story as they should. No errors. Have a wonderful day! Donna

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Donna,


    Sorry for being so far behind...had to steal a few minutes this morning to thank everyone. I truly appreciate your encouragement and constant support. Smiles, Carol
Comment from adewpearl
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I like that his "mermaid" vision from his suicide attempt is echoed in the trauma unit nurse who greets him when he regains consciousness - interesting interpretation of the beautiful maiden theme for this microfiction. For such word restrictions, you convey his intense emotions well. Brooke

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Brooke,


    Sorry for being so far behind...had to steal a few minutes this morning to thank everyone. I truly appreciate your encouragement and constant support. Smiles, Carol
reply by adewpearl on 31-Jul-2010
    I hope everything is OK - I haven't seen a post from you in awhile, my friend :-)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Brooke,

    Thanks for asking...I am swimming up stream and struggling...but then who isn't of late. As long as I can keep my head above water once in a hile, I'll make it. I just miss being able to do wht I enjoy...soon I hope. Smiles, Carol
Comment from fionageorge
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Hope, in the form of red hair and green eyes.
Another one of your wonderful FF's Carol.
Wonderful, I actually visualised the apparition with him.
The ending not what I expected, a wonderful twist.
Thanks again for entertaining me, you FF writer extraordinaire!
Warmest regards
Marijke

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Marijke,


    Sorry for being so far behind...had to steal a few minutes this morning to thank everyone. I truly appreciate your encouragement and constant support. Smiles, Carol
Comment from mtngalofnc
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Hi Carol,

Your first two paragraphs grab the attention immediately and the story is interesting and has a good flow. I was relieved to find that he had had an accident and wasn't commiting suicide. You are a very good story teller. Thank you for sharing.
Becky

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Becky,

    I apologize for my tardiness in sending thanks...but my appreciation is no less. Your support is so appreciated by me.

    Smiles, Carol
Comment from misscookie
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Wow did you pick the right artwork or not?
It is perfect to your poem
This is a very touching work you did my lady it really touched my heart.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Cookie,

    Haven't been on the site much but appreciate your continued support. Smiles, CArol
Comment from hotstuff
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This is such a clever micro fiction. I thought that Jake was going to commit suicide and his mind was playing tricks on him. You have a talent for writing interesting stories but to write to such a short word length and manage to give the reader a sense of suspense and surprise is indeed demonstrating excellent writing skills.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    hotstuff,

    Glad you enjoyed the short story. I apologize for my long delay in answering...I truly appreciate your support. Smiles, CArol
Comment from Trybuck
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One moment to eternity
Life passes so quickly
From a flicker to a light
Fresh hope now in sight
Images finally clear
There is no more fear

Well done, Buck

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Buck,

    Thanks for your poem of wisdom and hope..a flickering candle in my life at the moment. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Belinda
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Your story reminds me of an Indonesian tale about a sea-goddess, only, your goddess here is much kinder. I like to read about this near-death experience, and (I hope I don't repeat myself too often) I admire your creativity which springs out any time you see a contest/prompt. Cheers to you Carol...

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Belinda,

    As always, my late reply is filled with much appreciation. Thank you...Carol
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good storyline, i enjoyed reading this very much, a man brought back to life by his nurse. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    As always, my late reply is filled with much appreciation. Thank you...Carol
Comment from menachem
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Is she the source of his joy, or the source of his pain, his sense of loss, it's kind of hard to tell? But, then again, that may have been the point?
It's nice.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    menachem,

    There you go...made your mind ponder on the many avenues this story could hold. Thanks...Carol
reply by menachem on 01-Aug-2010
    :)
    You're welcome!