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Comment from Belinda
This time you tricked me again. No, Wendy did. Ha-ha, clever child. Even ice cream won't make her eat those beans. Humorous surprise ending. I laugh with both men.
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This time you tricked me again. No, Wendy did. Ha-ha, clever child. Even ice cream won't make her eat those beans. Humorous surprise ending. I laugh with both men.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Belinda,
She still doesn't eat green beans...Thanks for the review...Carol
Comment from Realist101
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!! CAROL! You will not believe me. BUT TO THIS DAY MY 21 YEAR OLD SON, SAM, STILL DOES THIS VERY THING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I STILL SAY, "Where are those beets?" or, "Where are those grapes I put on your plate?" AND I FIND THEM LATER, under the sofa, down in the garbage disposal, beneath flower pots. AND HE IS TWENTY ONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SO, this wonderful little tale hits close to home for me, and I am going to make Sam read this too!!!!! PLUS you have written it with your wonderful style and humor!!! VERY good Carol! susan
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!! CAROL! You will not believe me. BUT TO THIS DAY MY 21 YEAR OLD SON, SAM, STILL DOES THIS VERY THING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I STILL SAY, "Where are those beets?" or, "Where are those grapes I put on your plate?" AND I FIND THEM LATER, under the sofa, down in the garbage disposal, beneath flower pots. AND HE IS TWENTY ONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SO, this wonderful little tale hits close to home for me, and I am going to make Sam read this too!!!!! PLUS you have written it with your wonderful style and humor!!! VERY good Carol! susan
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
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Susan
Awesome.....
My sweet little daughter will earn her master's degree this summer and she still doesn't eat green beans...I had to keep a straight face while the teacher scolded us on her choice of hiding the beans...but I think I laughed all the way home. Smiles, Carol
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What a great story. SHe is a doll, tell her about Sam sometime...these are the moments of our lives!!!! Hugs, :) Susan
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You can bet I'll be telling her tonight...Smiles
Comment from missy98writer
Carol,
Excellent children's story about green beans. I always like green beans but I eat them the Southern way with bacon and onions. As a kid and an adult the one vegetable I hate is Brussel sprouts. Nasty. I can understand why Wendy hid her green beans. Too bad you didn't enter the contest this story would have been a contender. The dialogue and descriptive scheme are spot on. Thanks for sharing your cute story. The moral is don't tell kids they can't do something they'll find a way to use tricks. The sad puppy eyes work if all else doesn't
Melissa.
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Carol,
Excellent children's story about green beans. I always like green beans but I eat them the Southern way with bacon and onions. As a kid and an adult the one vegetable I hate is Brussel sprouts. Nasty. I can understand why Wendy hid her green beans. Too bad you didn't enter the contest this story would have been a contender. The dialogue and descriptive scheme are spot on. Thanks for sharing your cute story. The moral is don't tell kids they can't do something they'll find a way to use tricks. The sad puppy eyes work if all else doesn't
Melissa.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
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Melissa
It was difficult to stand in front of the strict teacher and not laugh...though I think I remember laughing all the way home. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from patmedium
This is really lovely, Carol. Many happy memories you have brought me. A good story which flows easily from start to stop. Congratulations and many thanks. Pat.
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This is really lovely, Carol. Many happy memories you have brought me. A good story which flows easily from start to stop. Congratulations and many thanks. Pat.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
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Pat
Thank you..it was based on my daughter when she was in nursery school. She still doesn't eat green beans.
smiles, Carol
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I had mine growing her own brussels... she loves them now! pat.
Comment from Shirley B
I loved this. This sounds like something I would do as a kis, Who am I kidding. I would still do it now if I thought I would get away with it. Great story. You always tell your stories so well. Good luck in the contest, Shirley
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I loved this. This sounds like something I would do as a kis, Who am I kidding. I would still do it now if I thought I would get away with it. Great story. You always tell your stories so well. Good luck in the contest, Shirley
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
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Shirley
It's based on my daughter when she was in nursery school. she still doesn't eat green beans...Smiles, Carol
Comment from mbroyles2
This was great.
Those little sneaks.
Now I'll eat green beans for Ice Cream, but if you toss carrots my way---they might end up between the folds as well.
Great job!
Michael
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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This was great.
Those little sneaks.
Now I'll eat green beans for Ice Cream, but if you toss carrots my way---they might end up between the folds as well.
Great job!
Michael
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Michael,
As a mother of 5 and grandmother of 12, I have a wealth of little stories to draw from. Thanks for the kind comments. Carol
Comment from jadapenn
This was well done. I just love the twist. Pity you didn't make the contest. You devloped your little characters well.Hope you are keeping well.
Luv jada
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This was well done. I just love the twist. Pity you didn't make the contest. You devloped your little characters well.Hope you are keeping well.
Luv jada
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
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Jada,
Yes, she is developed well. should get her master's by June this year...Quite a child! smiles...Carol
Comment from L.lora
LOL, I won't tell if you
won't. What a perfect
story. Charming is a mild
description of this tale.
Your narratives and dialogues
were spot on and the smiles
you've created are priceless.
no nits or spags. Lora
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LOL, I won't tell if you
won't. What a perfect
story. Charming is a mild
description of this tale.
Your narratives and dialogues
were spot on and the smiles
you've created are priceless.
no nits or spags. Lora
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
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Lora
I couldn't believe when the pre-school teacher informed me what my darling daughter had done...though I did laugh once I left the school....Thanks for the kind comments. Carol
Comment from another jim
Ha! Nice little story with a funny surprise ending, Carol. What's not to like about that? Perfect title, terrific artwork. Nicely done!
Two suggestions you might want to consider:
1. "Ice cream will be served Friday if everyone --"
"... if everyone eats their vegetables this week."
Would use the same punctuation to end one sentence and begin the other. Two sets of ellipses, perhaps?
2. "What about Wendy? She never eats green beans," several whined.
Unlikely that more than one child made this statement. Would change tag to "someone whined" or even "someone said".
Small stuff, to be sure. Didn't affect my enjoyment of your story, in any event! Thanks for sharing...Jim.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2010
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Ha! Nice little story with a funny surprise ending, Carol. What's not to like about that? Perfect title, terrific artwork. Nicely done!
Two suggestions you might want to consider:
1. "Ice cream will be served Friday if everyone --"
"... if everyone eats their vegetables this week."
Would use the same punctuation to end one sentence and begin the other. Two sets of ellipses, perhaps?
2. "What about Wendy? She never eats green beans," several whined.
Unlikely that more than one child made this statement. Would change tag to "someone whined" or even "someone said".
Small stuff, to be sure. Didn't affect my enjoyment of your story, in any event! Thanks for sharing...Jim.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
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Jim
Thanks for the suggestions and I has instituted them immediately...Glad my darling daughter (who is about to claim her masters) made you laugh...Smiles, Carol
Comment from ladybird
Where do you get your good ideas from! This is very unusual, but a lot of fun to read. Children are so inventive. I enjoyed this one, it gave me a chuckle.
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Where do you get your good ideas from! This is very unusual, but a lot of fun to read. Children are so inventive. I enjoyed this one, it gave me a chuckle.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2010
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ladybird
I have 5 children and 12 grandchildren...They provide a wealth of material. Thanks for the kind review. Carol
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Twelve gradchildren! Expensive Christmas's