Rejoice: Christmas Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "A is for the Angel"Christmas poems in various formats.
103 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Nice post, Brooke.Not one of your best,m but that is because of the ABC-list-like form. Yet your masterful muse can make even this form sing beautifully in well timed and finely rhymed line that flow together well and are strung together on a coherent and consistent theme.
Very nice.
Favorite individual lines:
D is for the dark dispelled by God of all creation
I is for the great "I am," Divinity on Earth
L is for His lowly start, no cause to feel ashamed
Favorite section:
W is for the wonder caused by one small child
X is for how exquisite the warmth when Mary smiled
Y is for the "Yes" we say when asked to give Him praise
Z is for the zest with which our Hallelujahs raise.
no nits.
Happy Christmas to you dear friend.
Blessings and Love, rd
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Nice post, Brooke.Not one of your best,m but that is because of the ABC-list-like form. Yet your masterful muse can make even this form sing beautifully in well timed and finely rhymed line that flow together well and are strung together on a coherent and consistent theme.
Very nice.
Favorite individual lines:
D is for the dark dispelled by God of all creation
I is for the great "I am," Divinity on Earth
L is for His lowly start, no cause to feel ashamed
Favorite section:
W is for the wonder caused by one small child
X is for how exquisite the warmth when Mary smiled
Y is for the "Yes" we say when asked to give Him praise
Z is for the zest with which our Hallelujahs raise.
no nits.
Happy Christmas to you dear friend.
Blessings and Love, rd
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thank you, rama devi - I have loved alphabet books for a long time - I once went to a lecture on their part in literary history. The form seems to delight some people and put others off - I'm just one who is delighted by it. I appreciate your positive comments. Brooke :-)
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Comment from skye
What a glorious celebration of the season, and exquisitely crafted.
Perfect, perfectly wonderful.
You are a true poet, capturing the beauty of all this Christmas season holds.
Very very well done.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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What a glorious celebration of the season, and exquisitely crafted.
Perfect, perfectly wonderful.
You are a true poet, capturing the beauty of all this Christmas season holds.
Very very well done.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thanks so much, Skye - I truly appreciate this - one person gave me a four because she didn't see what the alphabet had to do with Christmas, so it is great to hear from people who really enjoyed my alphabet poem. :-) You are most generous. Happy two days till Christmas, my friend!!! Brooke :-)
Comment from misscookie
This is amazining what time and thought it must have taken you to go through A to Z
I love the flow of the poem
I love the meaning you put for every letter good job.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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This is amazining what time and thought it must have taken you to go through A to Z
I love the flow of the poem
I love the meaning you put for every letter good job.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Misscookie. I appreciate your lovely review :-) Brooke
Comment from Lady & Louis
Lovely alphabet, Brooke! It has the exact meter for a child's mnemonic, and a sweetness of tone throughout. This heathen thoroughly enjoyed it, lol.
One question: "S is for the shepherd's faith as bright as any star" or "S is for the shepherds' faith as bright as any star" - I'd read it as meaning all of them, and the T line as referring to them.
Merry Christmas!
Louise xxxx
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Lovely alphabet, Brooke! It has the exact meter for a child's mnemonic, and a sweetness of tone throughout. This heathen thoroughly enjoyed it, lol.
One question: "S is for the shepherd's faith as bright as any star" or "S is for the shepherds' faith as bright as any star" - I'd read it as meaning all of them, and the T line as referring to them.
Merry Christmas!
Louise xxxx
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Louise, you make a good point about the plural possessive. I might edit it later. And if I can bring a bit of Christmas joy to the heathens, well, good for me! LOLOLOL My little heathen daughter is the world's biggest Christmas celebrator. Thanks so much, dear friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Belinda
Wow... I feel my eyes hungrily 'scrolling down' to see the alphabets being used in this poem, Brooke. Once I was asked to make a little 'fashion dictionary' and found myself stumbling in X and Y, but you had them all, complete, fitting, and amazing for the Christmas season.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Wow... I feel my eyes hungrily 'scrolling down' to see the alphabets being used in this poem, Brooke. Once I was asked to make a little 'fashion dictionary' and found myself stumbling in X and Y, but you had them all, complete, fitting, and amazing for the Christmas season.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thanks, Belinda - I'm so glad you enjoyed the letters all the way to the difficult end :-) Brooke
Comment from Colin Douglas
Well done. I imagine you had fun doing this. It's a good exercise to do this kind of poem once in a while. For me, reading it, it comes across as an arduous task and a bit strained, particularly using the entire alphabet rather than a word.
However, you did keep a good rhyme scheme and meter. A couple of lines I had to read over to get the rhythm right, but it worked without sounding too unnatural.
This line in particular shows that you know what you're doing:
"W is for the wonder caused by one small child" "W" is unique in that it is three syllables, but you still incorporate it into the line correctly without losing the beat.
Thank you for posting.
Colin
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Well done. I imagine you had fun doing this. It's a good exercise to do this kind of poem once in a while. For me, reading it, it comes across as an arduous task and a bit strained, particularly using the entire alphabet rather than a word.
However, you did keep a good rhyme scheme and meter. A couple of lines I had to read over to get the rhythm right, but it worked without sounding too unnatural.
This line in particular shows that you know what you're doing:
"W is for the wonder caused by one small child" "W" is unique in that it is three syllables, but you still incorporate it into the line correctly without losing the beat.
Thank you for posting.
Colin
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Colin - sorry it came across as strained to you. I had great fun writing it and certainly never intended any such effect. Brooke
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Don't apologize, Silly. I still enjoyed it.
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
Wonderful paeon of praise. It is not often (in fact never before known) that I offer metrical advice to you; it is never needed. However, on this occasion I think that Line 3 would read a smidgeon better as:
"C is for the carols THAT we sing in celebration".
Best regards
Reg
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Dear Brooke,
Wonderful paeon of praise. It is not often (in fact never before known) that I offer metrical advice to you; it is never needed. However, on this occasion I think that Line 3 would read a smidgeon better as:
"C is for the carols THAT we sing in celebration".
Best regards
Reg
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Reg - I will reread that line :-) Brooke
Comment from dayan1980
With your rating I would not expect anything less. I really enjoyed this piece and I found myself wondering what you would come up with for each line. Even though it was a bit random, i quite enjoyed it.
Look forward to reading more.
:)
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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With your rating I would not expect anything less. I really enjoyed this piece and I found myself wondering what you would come up with for each line. Even though it was a bit random, i quite enjoyed it.
Look forward to reading more.
:)
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Dayan - I appreciate your positive review. If I could ask, what was random about it? Brooke
Comment from honeytree
Wonderful art work and how beautifully written for Christmas time this year.
This Alphabet is so special and each letter said something special to us.
The love, the teaching, the suffering, was to help save us all from hell when we die one day.
Great Writing
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2009
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Wonderful art work and how beautifully written for Christmas time this year.
This Alphabet is so special and each letter said something special to us.
The love, the teaching, the suffering, was to help save us all from hell when we die one day.
Great Writing
Honeytree.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Annie. I'm so glad you found meaning in this :-) Brooke
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Great to read Brooke. Our Angels are very special for us all. Have a great Christmas and New Year Brooke.
Annie
Comment from amada
This is an incredible labor of love. Much talent in here writing this lovely acrostyc for us. The Nativity Scene is great as well. Merry Christmas.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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This is an incredible labor of love. Much talent in here writing this lovely acrostyc for us. The Nativity Scene is great as well. Merry Christmas.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thanks so much, amada :-) Brooke