Poems from a Pensive Poet
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Final Page"Verses from my heart
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Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi BethShelby,
A lovely sonnet saying something we all must face as we age. Our race is run, our story told I guess sums up our lives to a greater or lesser extent.
Well done
Patrick
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
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Hi BethShelby,
A lovely sonnet saying something we all must face as we age. Our race is run, our story told I guess sums up our lives to a greater or lesser extent.
Well done
Patrick
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
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Patrick, I appreciate the review and the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from words
This is so perfectly done that it deserves a six and I don't have any.
Simple, elegant, not a word out of place.
Loved your ending:together we'd go forth to greet the day,
but now, the page is turned. The tale's complete.
The time has come to put the book away.
Although it hurts to read the final part,
the lines are etched in gold inside my heart.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
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This is so perfectly done that it deserves a six and I don't have any.
Simple, elegant, not a word out of place.
Loved your ending:together we'd go forth to greet the day,
but now, the page is turned. The tale's complete.
The time has come to put the book away.
Although it hurts to read the final part,
the lines are etched in gold inside my heart.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
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Thank you words for you review and you really nice comments. I'm so glad you liked this.
Beth
Comment from Winslow
Dear Beth,
Ah, bitter-sweet is the parting, the chapter now complete. But you have your memories which are etched in gold upon your heart. A well written metaphoric poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
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Dear Beth,
Ah, bitter-sweet is the parting, the chapter now complete. But you have your memories which are etched in gold upon your heart. A well written metaphoric poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
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Thank you Winslow, I appreciate your review and your kind comments.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Very good and very emotional. I enjoyed reading this poem, although it had a depressing theme. It flowed nicely and was very easy to read. It painted a good picture with words.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
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Very good and very emotional. I enjoyed reading this poem, although it had a depressing theme. It flowed nicely and was very easy to read. It painted a good picture with words.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
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Thank you Barbara, I appreciate your review and nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
A beautiful sonnet lamenting the loss of a friend.
You seem to have the captured the feeling of loss very well, and the title you have chosen is most apt - The Final Page.
Juliette
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
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A beautiful sonnet lamenting the loss of a friend.
You seem to have the captured the feeling of loss very well, and the title you have chosen is most apt - The Final Page.
Juliette
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
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Juliette, Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comments.
Beth
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
This is a beautiful poem.
I'm sorry that you lost someone, I know how hard that is, because I've lost a lot of people.
I love the image and visual presentation that you chose for your poem.
I love the sonnet form.
And I like your title.
Good job.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
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This is a beautiful poem.
I'm sorry that you lost someone, I know how hard that is, because I've lost a lot of people.
I love the image and visual presentation that you chose for your poem.
I love the sonnet form.
And I like your title.
Good job.
Kathryn
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
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Kathryn, Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments. I haven't done many sonnets so I'm glad this one worked for you.
Beth
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You're welcome Beth,
Kathryn
Comment from Mastery
Very nice, Beth. I like it a lot. It has a touch of meloncholy and loneliness coupled with a strong love of the past. Bravo! Good writing. Bob
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
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Very nice, Beth. I like it a lot. It has a touch of meloncholy and loneliness coupled with a strong love of the past. Bravo! Good writing. Bob
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
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Mastery, Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments.
I so glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from Jnetgame
This is a beautiful sonnet. I have never written one of these, but you have provided an excellent example for me to learn from. Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
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This is a beautiful sonnet. I have never written one of these, but you have provided an excellent example for me to learn from. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
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Thank you for the review and the lovely comments.
Cheers,
Beth
Comment from Begin Again
Beth
Hopefully this is not true to you personally because a loss like this would be extremely difficult. You have written the poem so well describing the emotions and the closing of the final chapter between two dear friends. I really enjoyed this poem and if I had a 6 it would be yours.
Carol
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
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Beth
Hopefully this is not true to you personally because a loss like this would be extremely difficult. You have written the poem so well describing the emotions and the closing of the final chapter between two dear friends. I really enjoyed this poem and if I had a 6 it would be yours.
Carol
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I didn't write this for a specific friend. I've lost family memeber but no close friends.
Beth
Comment from authorx
this was a very good poem. I noticed in your Bio that you are new to Fanstory. I welcome you, and hope you have better luck than I have gaining fans and friends. Your writing flowed very well, thus I saw nothing that needed to be edited. Though I could be wrong, I'm still a little sketchy with my grammar and punctuation.
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
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this was a very good poem. I noticed in your Bio that you are new to Fanstory. I welcome you, and hope you have better luck than I have gaining fans and friends. Your writing flowed very well, thus I saw nothing that needed to be edited. Though I could be wrong, I'm still a little sketchy with my grammar and punctuation.
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
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Thank you for the review and nice comments. I joined this past February and I've really enjoyed my time here. I feel I've made a some friend and I have 23 on my fan list but some don't check my work regularly. I will check out your work. Thanks for dropping by.
Beth
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Always willing to help a fellow writer. You say you already have 23 friends? How is that possible being you just joined in February? I cannot get anyone to be my friend.