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Comment from adewpearl
Mom's good looks and Dad's charm - add the capitals as you are using Mom and Dad as their names in this context
Carol, Well, it would appear this guy was even more evil than his detractors ever suspected - one sure wants his "loving" sister to get away with her act of vengeance. An engaging story with a great twist ending!! Brooke
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Mom's good looks and Dad's charm - add the capitals as you are using Mom and Dad as their names in this context
Carol, Well, it would appear this guy was even more evil than his detractors ever suspected - one sure wants his "loving" sister to get away with her act of vengeance. An engaging story with a great twist ending!! Brooke
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
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Brooke
Thanks for catching that mistake for me. I fixed it asap. Glad you enjoyed my story. Thanks again. Carol
Comment from Mountainstar2
Good luck on the writing prompt!
This is a very well written story. It's very sad yet detailed and has an interesting story plot. It leaves with the reader a strong message of what life can really be to some who are cruel, and some who finally grow tired to being the one to take creulty to it's final blow...
The wording content is very good and believeable and shows deep regret mixed with feelings of love and hate, for a sibling who was very mean to his dear loved one in life.....
I enjoyed the imagagination of this Author and cried in my heart knowing, this happens all the time in life.
Blessings....MOuntainstar2..
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Good luck on the writing prompt!
This is a very well written story. It's very sad yet detailed and has an interesting story plot. It leaves with the reader a strong message of what life can really be to some who are cruel, and some who finally grow tired to being the one to take creulty to it's final blow...
The wording content is very good and believeable and shows deep regret mixed with feelings of love and hate, for a sibling who was very mean to his dear loved one in life.....
I enjoyed the imagagination of this Author and cried in my heart knowing, this happens all the time in life.
Blessings....MOuntainstar2..
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
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Mountainstar
Thank you for the kind comments. I am pleased that you enjoyed my story and connected to the characters. I appreciate it very much. Thanks again Carol
Comment from Amicus
Your story is well done, Carol. I read with interest from beginning to ending, became easily engaged with the characters and their credible interaction and dialogue, and had a hint of something amiss between Jennie and Taylor before the revealing ending episode but nothing definite just a nice foreshadowing--not sure how you did that but it was a good thing to have done.
Good luck in the competition with this good story.
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Your story is well done, Carol. I read with interest from beginning to ending, became easily engaged with the characters and their credible interaction and dialogue, and had a hint of something amiss between Jennie and Taylor before the revealing ending episode but nothing definite just a nice foreshadowing--not sure how you did that but it was a good thing to have done.
Good luck in the competition with this good story.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
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Amicus
I am so pleased that you enjoyed my story. It was a fun write but it's always better when others enjoy it too. Thanks again. Carol
Comment from jadapenn
Very nice. I simply loved this intrigue. Only more than half-way did I suspect what was going on and smiled at the end when PI jada was correct. The story was well told, full of emotion and good descriptives. It was a good read and is a worthy contest entry.
Best wishes. luv jada
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Very nice. I simply loved this intrigue. Only more than half-way did I suspect what was going on and smiled at the end when PI jada was correct. The story was well told, full of emotion and good descriptives. It was a good read and is a worthy contest entry.
Best wishes. luv jada
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
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jada
Well at least I had the PI guessing for more than half way. Thanks for the excellent review. Glad you enjoyed it. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from hilda_ann
Great story and dialogue that keeps you reading on to the end. The plot was very similar to the "Murder She Wrote" style. Over all the story was entertaining and had a good flow to it. Well done. hilda ann
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Great story and dialogue that keeps you reading on to the end. The plot was very similar to the "Murder She Wrote" style. Over all the story was entertaining and had a good flow to it. Well done. hilda ann
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Hilda ann
So glad you enjoyed my story. Appreciate the kind comments. Carol
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Wow, what a story, my friend. The twist at the end, great! I really enjoyed this. The characters are well rounded and the dialogue--so believable. Great job here. Good luck.
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Wow, what a story, my friend. The twist at the end, great! I really enjoyed this. The characters are well rounded and the dialogue--so believable. Great job here. Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
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ElGato
I am so glad that you enjoyed the story. It was fun to write. Thanks for the kind review. CArol
Comment from kingskid
I really loved this story. The ending was excellent, though you also did a very good jog of hinting here and there. I did suspect it was her, perhaps because I also love crime and perhaps think like a criminal at times! You held my attention with the dialogue, snappy and believable. You did all that was required and gave us all something to think about.
Jenny is portrayed very well.
blessings,
kingskid
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I really loved this story. The ending was excellent, though you also did a very good jog of hinting here and there. I did suspect it was her, perhaps because I also love crime and perhaps think like a criminal at times! You held my attention with the dialogue, snappy and believable. You did all that was required and gave us all something to think about.
Jenny is portrayed very well.
blessings,
kingskid
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
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kingskid
I am pleased that you enjoyed the story. It was fun to write and more so when someone else enjoys it too. Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from BJean
This story had a very surprise ending to it.
You write very well. Followed story easily. Portrayed
the emotions of those betrayed by abuse.
Certainly can't agree with the way she handled it, but can understand. very well told. Jean
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This story had a very surprise ending to it.
You write very well. Followed story easily. Portrayed
the emotions of those betrayed by abuse.
Certainly can't agree with the way she handled it, but can understand. very well told. Jean
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
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Jean
It wouldn't be my choice of resolution either, but that's what is nice about writing. You can put ideas to paper and no one really gets in harms way.
Thanks for the review.
Carol
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I knew it wouldn't be your choice!! Good job with story. Jean
Comment from fionageorge
What a fantastic and well worded story, moving at a terrific pace. And a surprise ending. I did not see it coming; which is a good thing. The dialogue is impeccable, and the characters very believable. Good luck in the contest.
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What a fantastic and well worded story, moving at a terrific pace. And a surprise ending. I did not see it coming; which is a good thing. The dialogue is impeccable, and the characters very believable. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
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fiona
Thank you so much for your kind review. I am very glad that you enjoyed the story. Carol
Comment from koyoga
Okay, now I'm hooked. I will have to go back and read additional chapters. Love your writing style, it appeals to me very much. Thank you for sharing your work!
Lesa (koyoga)
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Okay, now I'm hooked. I will have to go back and read additional chapters. Love your writing style, it appeals to me very much. Thank you for sharing your work!
Lesa (koyoga)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
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Lesa
This was just a quick short story, but you are right, it could be developed into a great book. Thanks for the review. Carol