Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Coming Home Again"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
52 total reviews
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is an excellent contest entry, by far the best. You have used the words seamlessly to create a complete and meaningful story with good imagery and description.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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This is an excellent contest entry, by far the best. You have used the words seamlessly to create a complete and meaningful story with good imagery and description.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Goldwell
Thank you for your kind comments. I greatly appreciate lyour review. Carol
Comment from fictionwriter
An interesting little work. I enjoyed it, and I can sort of relate, as I couldn't wait to get out of the house either.
She shivers, remembering(whoops, you changed verb tenses here. Should be she shivered)
Other than that, well done.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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An interesting little work. I enjoyed it, and I can sort of relate, as I couldn't wait to get out of the house either.
She shivers, remembering(whoops, you changed verb tenses here. Should be she shivered)
Other than that, well done.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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fictionwriter
I appreciated the note on shivers . I had shivered had some one else told me I had the wrong tense....can't please'em all. I'm glad you agreed with me. Thanks again. CArol
Comment from Foster
Very nice contest entry a good story you used the boundaries given you very well. If I had six stares to give I would have given them here.
Richard
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Very nice contest entry a good story you used the boundaries given you very well. If I had six stares to give I would have given them here.
Richard
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Richard Your comments and your virtual stars will make me happy thank you. Appreciate it very much. CArol
Comment from Amfunny
I loved your story. It was such a lovely story. Very nicely written and you did a great job of using the required words. Those were some difficult words to use in one story. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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I loved your story. It was such a lovely story. Very nicely written and you did a great job of using the required words. Those were some difficult words to use in one story. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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amfunny...That is for sure! Thanks for the review and the kind comments. I greatly appreciate them. CArol
Comment from Phil Kitom
Well done with this story, these types of
contest always brings out the creative side
of authors and it is so interesting to see
how they differ and if they appear forced.
I like this well done...
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Well done with this story, these types of
contest always brings out the creative side
of authors and it is so interesting to see
how they differ and if they appear forced.
I like this well done...
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Phil Thanks for the generous review. I certainly appreciate your opinion. Take care CArol
Comment from KennyRogers
Hi there, BeginAgain, and thank you so much for this flash fiction posting, an excellent piece of work that does not seem at all contrived in order to incorporate all the words. Best wishes, Kenny
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Hi there, BeginAgain, and thank you so much for this flash fiction posting, an excellent piece of work that does not seem at all contrived in order to incorporate all the words. Best wishes, Kenny
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Kenny Thank you for your generous review. I greatly appreciate it Carol
Comment from bc1yax
excellent - so few words but just the ones to tell this story - it was very smooth and no lumps or bumps to slow it down - most enjoyable short - short story -
-- bc1yax
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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excellent - so few words but just the ones to tell this story - it was very smooth and no lumps or bumps to slow it down - most enjoyable short - short story -
-- bc1yax
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review. I appreciate it very much. Carol
Comment from rama devi
Superb entry for the contest. Paints an emotional life-landscape and depicts the scene vividly, incoproarating all the words in a seamless and believable fashion.
Loved this line-
There is no justice in the ghetto.
Did not notice any nits or spags.
Best of luck. This should prove a strong contender in the contest~
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Superb entry for the contest. Paints an emotional life-landscape and depicts the scene vividly, incoproarating all the words in a seamless and believable fashion.
Loved this line-
There is no justice in the ghetto.
Did not notice any nits or spags.
Best of luck. This should prove a strong contender in the contest~
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Rami devi
A smile crossed my face when I read who the review was from. I just left you a message too. The strange thing is that this story also just jumped into my mind, demanding to be written. Maybe are stars crossed somewhere.
Thanks for the review and for the kind words. I am glad that you enjoyed it.
Carol
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How wonderful we were mutually reviewing each other at the same time.
Yes, kinship is shared in cyber space.
:)
Warmly, rd
Comment from dmjones
Hi Carol, a nice story with the prompt words needed. Makes sense and I like the ending giving some hope when the beginning started bleak. Best Donna
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Hi Carol, a nice story with the prompt words needed. Makes sense and I like the ending giving some hope when the beginning started bleak. Best Donna
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
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Donna
Thanks for the review. I greatly appreciate it. Carol
Comment from Suzie B
Stunning entry my friend.
The story is as always told with warmth and deep feeling.
You have done a superb job with 2 words to spare. I wouldn't even attempt to pack in a story as complete as this , and using such a difficult selection of words.
I am so impressed, depressed, supressed....ooops, sorry doh! Seriously, this is great.
love and hugs
Suzie
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Stunning entry my friend.
The story is as always told with warmth and deep feeling.
You have done a superb job with 2 words to spare. I wouldn't even attempt to pack in a story as complete as this , and using such a difficult selection of words.
I am so impressed, depressed, supressed....ooops, sorry doh! Seriously, this is great.
love and hugs
Suzie
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Suzie
For some reason, this story just came to me. I wasn't even going to enter and then I was typing. When I finished I was only a handful of words over...clip, snap, and cut..it was done. Probably never happen that way in another million years. Thanks for the review. As always, I greatly appreciate your comments. CArol
