CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 105 "Morning Glory"A collection of poetry
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Comment from allborn66
This is a very nice poem. It creates a strong mental image. Of course, we recently had a big, and uncommon snow. It was sorta fun at first, but quickly became annoying. I love the flow, and the rhythm.
Barbara
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This is a very nice poem. It creates a strong mental image. Of course, we recently had a big, and uncommon snow. It was sorta fun at first, but quickly became annoying. I love the flow, and the rhythm.
Barbara
Comment Written 12-Jan-2009
Comment from FredCollingwood
Hey kid,
Ahhhh, yes, the winter can be wonderful. Yesterday I went to the beach and tommorrow I'm playing golf. Yep, winter--gotta love it.
I love the poem.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2009
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Hey kid,
Ahhhh, yes, the winter can be wonderful. Yesterday I went to the beach and tommorrow I'm playing golf. Yep, winter--gotta love it.
I love the poem.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2009
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Damnit! Don't tease me! Even though this poem speaks of beauty and all that, it's crap! LOL!! I want sun and sand every day of my life!! LOL!! jealousy yours, Sue (ha!)
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We do have four seasons in san Diego. We have: early summer, summer, late summer and next summer.
Comment from teafor2
Sixteezkid--The Trilonnet is an interesting and
challenging form and scribe's entry is an excel-
lent example of a fortuitous seasonal offering.
All of the rhymes are smoothly integrated into
the structured scheme as well as vivid allitera-
tions. My favorite lines, the couplet, easily
serves as an apt coda for both, the title and the
artwork. Good luck in the contest. teafor2
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Sixteezkid--The Trilonnet is an interesting and
challenging form and scribe's entry is an excel-
lent example of a fortuitous seasonal offering.
All of the rhymes are smoothly integrated into
the structured scheme as well as vivid allitera-
tions. My favorite lines, the couplet, easily
serves as an apt coda for both, the title and the
artwork. Good luck in the contest. teafor2
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, this is one of my favorite of yours. I don't know if it's the poetic form, the message or the alliteration that draw me to this poem. I just know I like the tone of the poem.
Great job with a challenging form.
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Wow, this is one of my favorite of yours. I don't know if it's the poetic form, the message or the alliteration that draw me to this poem. I just know I like the tone of the poem.
Great job with a challenging form.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009
Comment from Nicnac
Sue,
This is lovely.
I enjoyed every line.
The rhythm and ryhme flows superbly.
Awaking to a scene, so white
A blanket quilted, flake by flake
And all was hushed ~ a peaceful morn --Mmm Such a tranquil feeling.
Excellent writing. I enjoyed this peaceful winter walk. :)
Blessings,
~Nic
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Sue,
This is lovely.
I enjoyed every line.
The rhythm and ryhme flows superbly.
Awaking to a scene, so white
A blanket quilted, flake by flake
And all was hushed ~ a peaceful morn --Mmm Such a tranquil feeling.
Excellent writing. I enjoyed this peaceful winter walk. :)
Blessings,
~Nic
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009
Comment from womanwriter
Picturesque, well crafted, Perfect word choices.
You can keep the blizzard, and the snow, I'll take it in poem form any day of the year!
Hope you're keeping warm.
Sincerely,
Womanwriter
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Picturesque, well crafted, Perfect word choices.
You can keep the blizzard, and the snow, I'll take it in poem form any day of the year!
Hope you're keeping warm.
Sincerely,
Womanwriter
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009
Comment from cmclellan
I liked the lines 'flake by flake', 'an artist's take
On marble; sanded, smooth and worn', 'All decorated like a cake / With icing swirled and made adorn'.
The poem communicated a strong image, feelings of cold, and even some sound, too.
I gave a 4 and not a 5 b/c I thought some of the lines could have been more specific & unique.
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I liked the lines 'flake by flake', 'an artist's take
On marble; sanded, smooth and worn', 'All decorated like a cake / With icing swirled and made adorn'.
The poem communicated a strong image, feelings of cold, and even some sound, too.
I gave a 4 and not a 5 b/c I thought some of the lines could have been more specific & unique.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009
Comment from debskatz
Hey Sixteezkid,
Well, I'm cold! And I think reading your poem did it to me!! lol You seem to have followed all the rules for a Trilonnet. I'd never heard of this kind of poem so I'm also grateful for the education. Good job!
Thanks for sharing it with us!
smiles,
deb
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Hey Sixteezkid,
Well, I'm cold! And I think reading your poem did it to me!! lol You seem to have followed all the rules for a Trilonnet. I'd never heard of this kind of poem so I'm also grateful for the education. Good job!
Thanks for sharing it with us!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009
Comment from mslyla216
This is a lovely trilonnet. It seemed to flow wonderfully with nothing seemingly forced at all. The picture chosen to go with it is perfect for the imagery your poem displays. Good job. mslyla
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This is a lovely trilonnet. It seemed to flow wonderfully with nothing seemingly forced at all. The picture chosen to go with it is perfect for the imagery your poem displays. Good job. mslyla
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009
Comment from sara-beth
Nature's glory in fine form! I love this, and I really loved "a blanket quilted flake by flake",...that is original, giving more depth to the whole blanket of snow concept. Awesome!
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Nature's glory in fine form! I love this, and I really loved "a blanket quilted flake by flake",...that is original, giving more depth to the whole blanket of snow concept. Awesome!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009