Lament
Free verse.32 total reviews
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Pili, what a beautiful combination of words and picture. The picture just reminded me I forgot to go out and look at the partial eclipse of the moon tonight. Oh, well! Such is life. Maybe I'll see it in my dreams. Good job.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
  |
Pili, what a beautiful combination of words and picture. The picture just reminded me I forgot to go out and look at the partial eclipse of the moon tonight. Oh, well! Such is life. Maybe I'll see it in my dreams. Good job.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
-
I am so grateful for your very meaningful review !
Comment from FredCollingwood
Wrapped
in songs
from ancient
souls,
conveying
their lament
to the night.
Wow. This is what good wording in poetry is about. I really like this one.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
|
Wrapped
in songs
from ancient
souls,
conveying
their lament
to the night.
Wow. This is what good wording in poetry is about. I really like this one.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
-
Thank you so much my friend for a great comment !
Comment from Dave M
Phil,
This is a good poem without any problems that I could find. It gives an excellent series of images. A few more words...
Dave M
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
|
Phil,
This is a good poem without any problems that I could find. It gives an excellent series of images. A few more words...
Dave M
Comment Written 20-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
-
Thank you so much Dave, I truly apreciate your good review !
Comment from Bryana
As always, you've written a gem my friend.
The rhythm and flow are excellent as are the metaphors and words you used.
It was a pleasure to read.
Thank you for sharing.
Un abrazo,
Ana
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
|
As always, you've written a gem my friend.
The rhythm and flow are excellent as are the metaphors and words you used.
It was a pleasure to read.
Thank you for sharing.
Un abrazo,
Ana
Comment Written 20-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
-
Un millon the gracias mi amiga. Abrazos !
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hello my friend,
A beautiful, breath taking piece of art you have penned. The imagery dances off the page and allows the readers imagination to take over... Wonderful write and thanks for sharing... Dancing in Dreams
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
|
Hello my friend,
A beautiful, breath taking piece of art you have penned. The imagery dances off the page and allows the readers imagination to take over... Wonderful write and thanks for sharing... Dancing in Dreams
Comment Written 20-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
-
I thank you for your very encouraging and humbling comment !
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a lovely poem, Pili Pubul. I loved "a star sheds its petals." You used beautiful imagery here. I see nothing to change.
Sally
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
|
This is a lovely poem, Pili Pubul. I loved "a star sheds its petals." You used beautiful imagery here. I see nothing to change.
Sally
Comment Written 20-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
-
Thank you so much my friend !
Comment from jeana
I loved the night time imagery your words have conveyed throughout the flowing passages. It is so peaceful and tranquil to envision. The mysticism is wonderfully presented throughout this read. jeana
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
|
I loved the night time imagery your words have conveyed throughout the flowing passages. It is so peaceful and tranquil to envision. The mysticism is wonderfully presented throughout this read. jeana
Comment Written 20-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
-
Thank you so much for your very encouraging comment !
Comment from Norzah
The poem shines through like a petal from the star over the ocean 'piercing the tremulous colossus waves,/outreaching for the golden sand.' I've seen such a star before while looking at the sea but never saw it in the light as painted by you. 'Wrapped in songs from ancient souls/conveying their lament to the night' brings to me the songs of the waves travelling from you know not where, and playing full tune on your lonely heart. Love the poem.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
|
The poem shines through like a petal from the star over the ocean 'piercing the tremulous colossus waves,/outreaching for the golden sand.' I've seen such a star before while looking at the sea but never saw it in the light as painted by you. 'Wrapped in songs from ancient souls/conveying their lament to the night' brings to me the songs of the waves travelling from you know not where, and playing full tune on your lonely heart. Love the poem.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
-
What a terrific comment, thank you so much my friend !
Comment from Moira's Amethyst
"Wrapped
in songs
from ancient
souls,
conveying
their lament
to the night."
Impressive! It's not too often I find that I like a piece like this. You have a lot of beautiful imagery here and I loved the presentation. Five stars!
Poetry's Protege
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
|
"Wrapped
in songs
from ancient
souls,
conveying
their lament
to the night."
Impressive! It's not too often I find that I like a piece like this. You have a lot of beautiful imagery here and I loved the presentation. Five stars!
Poetry's Protege
Comment Written 20-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
-
I am so grateful for your terrific comment !
Comment from rhymer1
Have no idea where you are going with this one, but can report its subliminal influence on me: an integrated cosmic consciousness that includes animate and inanimate. Have no idea why, but that is what came over me as I read. Slainte, rhymer1
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
|
Have no idea where you are going with this one, but can report its subliminal influence on me: an integrated cosmic consciousness that includes animate and inanimate. Have no idea why, but that is what came over me as I read. Slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 20-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
-
Thank you for a truly excellent comment, you made my day !