Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from sengwriter
Hi Jewell,
Love & Peace
What a wonderful piece
it tells about the bliss
henceforth that you'll never miss.
Key to peace of mind
there remains love to find
as I read this, your words did really bind
me with threads of love and peace so kind,
shown a path of peace to us who are blind.
I really loved this peace like anything and everything.
Thank you for sharing.
Gautam :)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Hi Jewell,
Love & Peace
What a wonderful piece
it tells about the bliss
henceforth that you'll never miss.
Key to peace of mind
there remains love to find
as I read this, your words did really bind
me with threads of love and peace so kind,
shown a path of peace to us who are blind.
I really loved this peace like anything and everything.
Thank you for sharing.
Gautam :)
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Heya Gautam! Thank you so very much!
Comment from Judian James
Fabulous Jewell. It's a captivating piece that just says so much about the root of true love. It has to come from a person who feels whole and from within to be shared with others. Beautifully written, rhymed and versed. Well done
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Fabulous Jewell. It's a captivating piece that just says so much about the root of true love. It has to come from a person who feels whole and from within to be shared with others. Beautifully written, rhymed and versed. Well done
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Heya Jude! Thanks so very much for the insightful review.
Comment from KING SLATON
You have a way with words that always offers promise to anyone regardless of the appearance of any given situation.
Yet another well written piece of work.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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You have a way with words that always offers promise to anyone regardless of the appearance of any given situation.
Yet another well written piece of work.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Thanks KING oh KING! I appreciate your constant support.
Comment from becky7777
you are right it is something to think about and remind us to love ourselves. The key can open or lock a door, its all up to you.
Great writting.
Becky
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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you are right it is something to think about and remind us to love ourselves. The key can open or lock a door, its all up to you.
Great writting.
Becky
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Becky, sister of sevens! Thanks for the fab review!
Comment from SFEDER2A
I feel that the self reflection of your poetry is so important. We can not love others until we love ourselves. And only through the God of our understanding can we know we are loved unconditionally and therefore we find that peace in ourselves which prepares us to love someone else. But beware loving another takes allot of compromising and is not always great. But for those few precious moments in love with another I could live a lifetime. Thank you so much for reminding me that I am a child of God and what that truly means to me deep in my soul. Excellent work my friend!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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I feel that the self reflection of your poetry is so important. We can not love others until we love ourselves. And only through the God of our understanding can we know we are loved unconditionally and therefore we find that peace in ourselves which prepares us to love someone else. But beware loving another takes allot of compromising and is not always great. But for those few precious moments in love with another I could live a lifetime. Thank you so much for reminding me that I am a child of God and what that truly means to me deep in my soul. Excellent work my friend!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Wow, I surely am honored that you would leave me such a wonderful review. The six stars do not outshine the fact that it caused some self reflection and this is what matters most to me. God bless! Jj
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I couldn't have said it better my friend. Keep up the great work and self reflection. Your friend, Sandy :)
Comment from experimentalpoet
"It's not from man you'll find release,
Love will come when you find peace."
This is absolutely beautiful...perfection - in rhyme, meter, flow, message and meaning...full of insight and passion. We must all love ourselves for if we don't - we don't know love...no truer words than these...you've penned an awesome piece...and I appreciate your thoughts so vividly expressed in these words...great job...take care..brenda
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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"It's not from man you'll find release,
Love will come when you find peace."
This is absolutely beautiful...perfection - in rhyme, meter, flow, message and meaning...full of insight and passion. We must all love ourselves for if we don't - we don't know love...no truer words than these...you've penned an awesome piece...and I appreciate your thoughts so vividly expressed in these words...great job...take care..brenda
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Really? I felt one stanza was off, but I surely appreciate this fab review!
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I didn't feel it if it was.....though I do read for content and passion in the write a lot more than rhyme and meter....:)
Comment from PUPA
Jewell, this poem is so well written, with excellent rhyme and rhythm. Very wise words and message and the artwork is perfect.
All this together made this poem a true delight to read.
Loved it.
Love
Pupa
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Jewell, this poem is so well written, with excellent rhyme and rhythm. Very wise words and message and the artwork is perfect.
All this together made this poem a true delight to read.
Loved it.
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Thank you dear Pupa. I appreciate you.
Comment from AK
Hello Beautiful,
Another beauty from your pen. What a stunning picture to set off your wonderful verse. I especially like the story format!
Before my eyes I saw a door
Opened wide above the shore.
It glistened in reflections bright
And from it poured revealing light.
A gilded key was in my hand,
As if I'd opened heavens grand,
Lovely. Have a great evening, Sweet Jewell.
Ami
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Hello Beautiful,
Another beauty from your pen. What a stunning picture to set off your wonderful verse. I especially like the story format!
Before my eyes I saw a door
Opened wide above the shore.
It glistened in reflections bright
And from it poured revealing light.
A gilded key was in my hand,
As if I'd opened heavens grand,
Lovely. Have a great evening, Sweet Jewell.
Ami
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Sweet friend, is there any meter that needs fixing? I rarely do meter you know. I appreciate your very sweet review and kind words, along with your constant support.
Hello dear friend, I found the read very smooth and beautifully rhymed. Did someone mention a problem with the meter?
The only line I found that read slightly rocky was the last one in this couplet:
I first must love myself discreetly,
To love human kind completely.
You may want to play with it a bit or just leave it alone...
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo VisionaryPoet777 ....
It was a pleasure to read this because you have good
rhyming throughout as well as a pleasant rhythm due to
your regular metre in all your lines.
There are two small changes to suggest ...
* You have - My burdens lifted at his throne .... as you
are referring to Almighty God, this should be -
at His throne.
* You have - I first must love myself discretely ....
this should be - discreetly ....
Thank you for sharing these thoughts with us.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Hullo VisionaryPoet777 ....
It was a pleasure to read this because you have good
rhyming throughout as well as a pleasant rhythm due to
your regular metre in all your lines.
There are two small changes to suggest ...
* You have - My burdens lifted at his throne .... as you
are referring to Almighty God, this should be -
at His throne.
* You have - I first must love myself discretely ....
this should be - discreetly ....
Thank you for sharing these thoughts with us.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Thank you Nannette! I appreciate your help.
Comment from rivki1111
Hello, this is a very nice poem that has been carefully written, no ugly conjunctions starting sentences, great flow and you elude and don't state...what's not to like??
I have no suggestions for making this better, and would recommend it to other readers for review, cheers, rebekah
p.s. Excellent choice of picture!!
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Hello, this is a very nice poem that has been carefully written, no ugly conjunctions starting sentences, great flow and you elude and don't state...what's not to like??
I have no suggestions for making this better, and would recommend it to other readers for review, cheers, rebekah
p.s. Excellent choice of picture!!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Thank you rivki!
