Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

Beautiful picture, great for reminding us of a star-lit sea. The suggestion of swimming among the stars while at the beach is an especially delightful image to bring to mind.

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi there Carol, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Excellent

This is a lyrical poem with a Japanese form I enjoyed reading about.
I like the "s" alliteration with sparkles, swim, and stars in the last two lines.
What an striking presentation you posted.

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Crystie, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The author's words are romantic, descriptive and creative. I really liked
the last line which adds so much to the theme of this poem. The
poem flows and connects well. The artwork is just beautiful and goes
well with these words. Hi Debi, have a good week! Hugs, Maria

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Maria, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

OMG! This entire presentation is so beautiful. You're using blue, my favorite color. The words of your dodoitsu carry such romantic imagery, and your artwork puts me in a dream-like state. Beautiful.

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Sweetie, most like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Barry Penfold

Excellent

Indeed, lets swim in the stars. Another form of Japanese poetry that I had not heard about until today. Image perfect and wording good. Thanks for sharing Debi. Take care and have a great day. Keep smiling.
Regards
Barry Penfold.

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Barry, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Oh, yes, Debi, you've taken me there! No flight or tedious journey, your 4 line dodoitsu has transported me all by itself to this idyllic, romantic venue. You clever girl! The last line is superb! Love Debbie

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Debbie, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Angel Debbie

Excellent

Bringing back my younger days with this lovely write, so beautiful and peaceful is it with a picture of memories to boot. Oh to be young again. Lovely thoughts. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Debbie, so many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

A beautiful zen poem that captures the essence of love between two people and their spiritual connection to the universe. Swimming among the stars us a great image! I enjoyed the read.

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi June, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

So very romantic and smooth. I floated along as I read about the setting and the feeling of floating in the surf and through the stars is so magical. Well done Debi.

Melissa

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Melissa, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Jacob1395

Excellent

This was a really beautiful image you painted with your words, Debi. I could really picture the scene and of the couple swimming beneath the stars. A really well written piece. I enjoyed reading it.

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Jacob, many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi