Better To Not Go Out and Play
Refugees struggle to find a home. The children suffer.34 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Well written. The children born into war know nothing else but hunger and thirst and watch rockets destroy their homes, now rubble. They have no normal childhood, fear and famine are their lot. K xx
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Well written. The children born into war know nothing else but hunger and thirst and watch rockets destroy their homes, now rubble. They have no normal childhood, fear and famine are their lot. K xx
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thanks so much for the six-star review. A tragic topic but one that should be talked about. Hopefully, there is some respite in 2025.
Take care.
Barry Penfold
Comment from Shanbreen
Thanks for writing something close to my heart. I always feel terrible whe I hear about the plight of the children. The only correction, I'd like to make is that we need to make this an everyday issue-- not just during Christmas.
Hopefully, thinking of their plight during Christmas will carry on during the coming year.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thanks for writing something close to my heart. I always feel terrible whe I hear about the plight of the children. The only correction, I'd like to make is that we need to make this an everyday issue-- not just during Christmas.
Hopefully, thinking of their plight during Christmas will carry on during the coming year.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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You are completely correct about making this an everyday issue. The refugees are simply people who have been displaced and are looking for a new home. Let's hope 2025 brings some respite to many of them.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
Comment from artisart4u
Sometimes people do stay locked in after something tragically happens. I guess it is better to withdraw than to hear what the outside world has to say.
Hour by hour, and day by day can lead to a way to deal with problems.
Your picture and poem are very nice and good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Sometimes people do stay locked in after something tragically happens. I guess it is better to withdraw than to hear what the outside world has to say.
Hour by hour, and day by day can lead to a way to deal with problems.
Your picture and poem are very nice and good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Wow,
Thanks for the six-star review. I am glad you appreciated the read. Thanks for the best wishes.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Tim Margetts
This is a incredly moving piece of poetry that captures the suffering of so many in the ongoing wars and humanitarian crisis.
When will we ever learn that the only winners are those making and selling the bullets and bombs.
Tim
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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This is a incredly moving piece of poetry that captures the suffering of so many in the ongoing wars and humanitarian crisis.
When will we ever learn that the only winners are those making and selling the bullets and bombs.
Tim
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Tim, thanks for your review. A good question you pose. I am not sure if we will ever learn. Take care and I hope you have a wonderful festive season.
Cheers
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nice repetition of the phrase better to not go out and play as the central refrain of the sad poem about the plight of children among refugees the story of his brother setting off a bomb is chilling.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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nice repetition of the phrase better to not go out and play as the central refrain of the sad poem about the plight of children among refugees the story of his brother setting off a bomb is chilling.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Jake,
Thanks for your review. It is a tragic topic but one I feel needs more attention. Thanks again and haver a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is an admirable message for those who are safe and free from worry during the holiday season. Refugees cannot go out and play at least during the day. They hide in ramshackle homes with bullet holes filling the gaps in the mortar and they suffer needlessly from worry since they are not from here originally. I admire your bravery in writing a controversial subject such as immigration. We need more writers who stand up for the underprivileged and poor, weak, and infirm.
Jesse
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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This is an admirable message for those who are safe and free from worry during the holiday season. Refugees cannot go out and play at least during the day. They hide in ramshackle homes with bullet holes filling the gaps in the mortar and they suffer needlessly from worry since they are not from here originally. I admire your bravery in writing a controversial subject such as immigration. We need more writers who stand up for the underprivileged and poor, weak, and infirm.
Jesse
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Jesse. Thanks so much for the six-star rating. It is a tragic topic but sometimes I get so angry about the situation. I find a release in writing about it. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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You're welcome, Barry.
I'm glad you find writing out how you feel about the tragic situation cathartic.
Take care, and best wishes.
Jesse
Comment from EeanBlack
I will also spare a thought and prayer for the 250000 registered homeless right here in America. If we used all the wasted military surplus as scrap and bought houses for our own, we would be better equipped to handle mass migration to the US. We are strained and we all know it.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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I will also spare a thought and prayer for the 250000 registered homeless right here in America. If we used all the wasted military surplus as scrap and bought houses for our own, we would be better equipped to handle mass migration to the US. We are strained and we all know it.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Yes, local homeless figures are up in Australia as well. Pretty well everywhere you look is under strain. Thanks for the kind review. Take care and have a merry Christmas.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
To begin with, I thought this was about you. But how much more immediate it feels when you put yourself in their position. To not ever have the freedom, as a child, to go out to play, something we always took for granted. And the repetition of that line makes it all the more tragic. Instead of secure permanence, crumbling walls, vermin and guns used in play as well as violence. This is an excellent and memorable poem which conveys its message of suffering well. Good luck, Barry! Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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To begin with, I thought this was about you. But how much more immediate it feels when you put yourself in their position. To not ever have the freedom, as a child, to go out to play, something we always took for granted. And the repetition of that line makes it all the more tragic. Instead of secure permanence, crumbling walls, vermin and guns used in play as well as violence. This is an excellent and memorable poem which conveys its message of suffering well. Good luck, Barry! Debbie
Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Debbie,
Thanks for the kind review. I just get so angry sometimes about the state of the world. It is not good. Anyway, you have a most lovely Christmas and New Year.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Trina Layne
I'm not sure what inspired this, but thanks for the reminder. Christmas is a very wonderful time of the year. However, life is still difficult and more difficult for some than others. Congratulations on your writing!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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I'm not sure what inspired this, but thanks for the reminder. Christmas is a very wonderful time of the year. However, life is still difficult and more difficult for some than others. Congratulations on your writing!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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Trina,
Thanks so much for your kind review. Glad you enjoyed the read despite it being a tragic topic. Anger as to the situation faced by refugees everywhere inspired the write.
Have a Merry Christmas and Joyous New Year. It is still great to smile.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from royowen
What a lovely poem, written and clothed in compassion and thought for those children who've been robbed of a childhood that many others enjoy, my children told me as adults that they enjoyed their respective childhoods, and that made them we adjusted adults, music to the ears of a mum and dad, it means their children will inherit that inheritance. Beautifully written Barry, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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What a lovely poem, written and clothed in compassion and thought for those children who've been robbed of a childhood that many others enjoy, my children told me as adults that they enjoyed their respective childhoods, and that made them we adjusted adults, music to the ears of a mum and dad, it means their children will inherit that inheritance. Beautifully written Barry, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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Roy,
Thanks for the kind review. Sorry about the tragic subject but my anger at this whole situation needs to be released every now and then. I am sure there is no doubt you have some well-adjusted children. Have a great festive season and a safe one.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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Yes, praise God, thank you