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The Creator

A voice in the night

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Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Very interesting. The Triune, sort of.
I didn't see any errors in grammar or punctuation. But then, maybe I got caught up in the narrative.
Best wishes.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
    Wayne, thank you. Terry.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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Wow, Terry, this is the best post you have ever written! The voice in the night spoke to you and made you the messenger from the Creator. I didn't see any spags or typos and the message is crystal clear we need to hear and take heart to help the environment of the Earth before it is too late. The Creator said no more wars, and I agree. Wars ruin the people and their places on Earth where they live. I love the ending where you write, I am waiting...this is how it should be on Earth for all of us to see that we need to love one another and live in peace and harmony.
Thanks for putting us on notice to do what is necessary to help our planet and save ourselves from war.
Jesse

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
    Jesse, thank you, Terry.
reply by Jesse James Doty on 18-Dec-2024
    You're welcome, Terry.
    Have a lovely day.
    Jesse
Comment from Mrs. KT
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Hello, Mr. B!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your post.
Creative and contemplative.
Has an "Abou Ben Adhem" feel to it.
Hope you follow through to what the Creator has admonished you to do.
However, in sharing said admonition, you may want to take a gander at the following:
"Change, you're in charge and headed for disaster."
("Change. You're in charge and headed for disaster.")

"That's the message: change we are in charge, and headed for disaster?"
(That's the message: "'Change? We are in charge and headed for disaster?'")

Thank you for sharing!

Onward!
fondly,
Big Dog

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
    Big Dog, thanks very much, Terry.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Thank you for sharing this very imaginative story, Terry, which is a clear message to all of us of our need to wake up, stop fighting wars and get on with the business of saving our planet and ourselves from this woeful self- destruction. This is particularly effective via your invention of a dialogue between The Creator and yourself. Well done, Terry. Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
    Debbie, thank you. Terry.
Comment from lyenochka
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This is cute! I was just about to email you and check on you but you wrote this and I like the idea that you are being commissioned to be a messenger for the Creator (sorry, He's God but we can disagree). Anyway, keep listening and sharing the message. I think we heard it before and millennia afterwards, we are still messing up!

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
    Helen, thank you. Terry.
Comment from Slo_6
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Fun philosophical exercise you've got going here. I especially like the idea of everyone hearing a message without it getting talked over by politicians, leaders, etc.

I feel like The Creator's voice was a little off when he said, " I got a mission for you," instead of "I have a mission for you."

Also, there were a few times when I wasn't completely sure who was talking. "I don't want that for Earth. It's such a lovely little planet." was probably still The Creator, but possibly could have been a response from the narrator. You may also want to back and add end quotes where appropriate.

Thanks for sharing. I'm really going to think about the power of shutting out additional voices such that everyone can consider an idea on their own terms.

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 Comment Written 08-Dec-2024

Comment from royowen
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There's a sort of understanding here Terry, Christ is the logos, the actual word of God, that spoke the world into existence, or the universe, He doesn't actually believe in evolution, that's adult thinking and reasoning, that's why He said unless you become as a child you will not SEE kingdom of God, but this is a great imaginative, He said to this to Job, "Where were you when I laid the foundations of the world?" Great "job" Terry, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 08-Dec-2024

Comment from Begin Again
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Bravo! Terry, I would give you all of my sixes if I thought this little story could possibly come true and so much more if I could. It's wonderful and truly pushes all the right buttons, but as your last line says....You're waiting. I'm waiting! Everyone is waiting....for someone else to fix the problem so they can go on as usual. How can so many intelligent human beings be so blind?
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
    Carol, thank you. Terry.