The Battle
The battle between the gladiators29 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written storyboard and I enjoyed listening to it. You have described what it's like in a battle very well with your very descriptive words. Thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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This is a very well written storyboard and I enjoyed listening to it. You have described what it's like in a battle very well with your very descriptive words. Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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You're welcome, Patricia. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Wendy G
A well-told story about the gladiators, probably if first century Roman arenas where such blood sports were common. Your last line was interesting. Referring to Christians martyred for their faithin an attempt to destroy Christianity? Interesting rhyme scheme, in the second and fifth lines only. Very best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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A well-told story about the gladiators, probably if first century Roman arenas where such blood sports were common. Your last line was interesting. Referring to Christians martyred for their faithin an attempt to destroy Christianity? Interesting rhyme scheme, in the second and fifth lines only. Very best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. Yes, that's correct - in answer to your question.
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting coverage of the violent combat of the gladiators. What a scary sport but I guess we have bloody and violent shows and movies these days. I wondered what was meant by "the devil's enemy had to die." So was the devil the one who was the victor?
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Interesting coverage of the violent combat of the gladiators. What a scary sport but I guess we have bloody and violent shows and movies these days. I wondered what was meant by "the devil's enemy had to die." So was the devil the one who was the victor?
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your review. The 'devil's enemy' were the Christians who were killed for their religious beliefs.
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Ah. Thanks for explaining.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This poem in five-line stanzas where lines 2 and 5 have an end rhyme tells the story of a battle to the death between gladiators. My favorite lines was this one: pending death with the plunge of the sword
I just like the way it reads, with the 'p' alliteration. Good luck in that contest; it ought to do well.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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This poem in five-line stanzas where lines 2 and 5 have an end rhyme tells the story of a battle to the death between gladiators. My favorite lines was this one: pending death with the plunge of the sword
I just like the way it reads, with the 'p' alliteration. Good luck in that contest; it ought to do well.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for your feedback, Crystie. I'm quite fond of that line, too.
Comment from bob cullen
Sorry, out of sixes. This took me back to the gladiators. Superbly written, The tension rose in accord with the scene. I almost tasted the blood as I watched in the Arena. Graphic account of a Sunday afternoon spectacle. And I backed another loser, I thought the bad guy would win. Really superbly written, the tension built wonderfully. Much enjoyed.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Sorry, out of sixes. This took me back to the gladiators. Superbly written, The tension rose in accord with the scene. I almost tasted the blood as I watched in the Arena. Graphic account of a Sunday afternoon spectacle. And I backed another loser, I thought the bad guy would win. Really superbly written, the tension built wonderfully. Much enjoyed.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Will do. Thank you so much for your wonderful review.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an effective story in a poem. The words are descriptive and imagery vivid. It is presented well too. Excellent writing. Best wishes! Alexandra
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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This is an effective story in a poem. The words are descriptive and imagery vivid. It is presented well too. Excellent writing. Best wishes! Alexandra
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your lovely review, Alexandra.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You describe an almighty clash of swords as these fighters battle it out in the arena here and I enjoyed your rhymes and metre, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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You describe an almighty clash of swords as these fighters battle it out in the arena here and I enjoyed your rhymes and metre, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. I'm learning from the best!
Comment from lancellot
Just like Gladiator, except in a mini-poetic form. Very well crafted, I like the different rhyme scheme than what we normally see on the site. A thrilling story too, with a climatic ending. Great entry.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Just like Gladiator, except in a mini-poetic form. Very well crafted, I like the different rhyme scheme than what we normally see on the site. A thrilling story too, with a climatic ending. Great entry.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your feedback. I always appreciate advice and comments from those who know best.
Comment from royowen
Ah, the whole story's tide up in that last line, the devil's enemy has been slain, I wonder if people will pick that up, there thousands of Christians slain in the arena, beautifully written my friend a great post, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Ah, the whole story's tide up in that last line, the devil's enemy has been slain, I wonder if people will pick that up, there thousands of Christians slain in the arena, beautifully written my friend a great post, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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To my friend, thank you for your observant review.
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