Patch and Ruby
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Patch and Ruby Plan a BD Party"Patch is Helen's cat and Ruby is Kenzie's cat
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Comment from bob cullen
What a sweet and delightful verse. Two Debbi's in a row. And both so talented. Your cats sound almost as mischevious as my Jeanette's. And from the sound of them just as annoying. Your writing really is among the best on Fanstory. So much envy here. Another fine example of how poetry should be written.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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What a sweet and delightful verse. Two Debbi's in a row. And both so talented. Your cats sound almost as mischevious as my Jeanette's. And from the sound of them just as annoying. Your writing really is among the best on Fanstory. So much envy here. Another fine example of how poetry should be written.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Hi Bob, I'm so glad that you had fun with me and my silly cats poem. They are so much fun to write and I am hoping some day to do a real book with them. However, I suppose I should take the alcohol out then. LOL.
Your sweet comments about both Debbi's made my day.
Thanks for all your kind comments for this one. Love, Debi
Comment from ESOSTINE
Your poem flow very well and makes an interesting read. Your creativity and sense of imagination is very much on display here. Thanks so much for sharing your work. Remain blessed, dear Debi.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Your poem flow very well and makes an interesting read. Your creativity and sense of imagination is very much on display here. Thanks so much for sharing your work. Remain blessed, dear Debi.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Esostine, thanks so much for such a sweet review and comments for my fourth poem of these two silly cats. I appreciate you having some fun with me.
Love, Debi
Comment from Gayla putnam
I love the picture, the rhymes, and the silly spellings. I have two cats, and I could visualize them drinking meoworites. It was great. Thanks for the laughs. gayla
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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I love the picture, the rhymes, and the silly spellings. I have two cats, and I could visualize them drinking meoworites. It was great. Thanks for the laughs. gayla
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Gayla, thanks so much for such a sweet review and comments for my fourth poem of these two silly cats. I appreciate you having some fun with me.
Love, Debi
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is such a cute poem/chapter! You definitely have a vivid imagination. I like that the cats danced at the party, and those who fought were bounced. 'Intoxicats are not allowed!' -- great line! Cute picture also. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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This is such a cute poem/chapter! You definitely have a vivid imagination. I like that the cats danced at the party, and those who fought were bounced. 'Intoxicats are not allowed!' -- great line! Cute picture also. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Dearest Carol, you are absolutely a gem. Thank you so much for the most fun review and fun comments. Also thank you for the generous six stars for my silly cat poem. I put it in a book now so maybe I can keep adding to them. Thank you again, my awesome friend. Much love, and hugs, Debi
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Your 'silly cat poem' gave me a smile. I could just picture the cats dancing together. Best wishes with the book.
Comment from patcelaw
This was a very delightful read and I enjoyed very much reading and listening to it. It flows very well when it is read aloud and it tells a very nice story of a nice party. Patricia.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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This was a very delightful read and I enjoyed very much reading and listening to it. It flows very well when it is read aloud and it tells a very nice story of a nice party. Patricia.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Hi Patricia, thanks so much for such a sweet review and comments for my fourth poem of these two silly cats. I appreciate you having some fun with me.
Love, Debi
Comment from GWHARGIS
Your imagination was working overtime with this poem. The cat that got plowed and wanted to fight. There is always one who becomes a fighter when boozed up. This was hilarious, Debi. I caught myself laughing out loud. Great poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Your imagination was working overtime with this poem. The cat that got plowed and wanted to fight. There is always one who becomes a fighter when boozed up. This was hilarious, Debi. I caught myself laughing out loud. Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Hi Gretchen, you are absolutely a gem. Thank you so much for the most fun review and fun comments. Also thank you for the generous six stars for my silly cat poem. I put it in a book now so maybe I can keep adding to them. Thank you again, my awesome friend. Much love, and hugs, Debi
Comment from Jacob1395
This is a really fun piece, Debi. I can just imagine the mischief Patch and Ruby get up to and it sounds like they get on together really well and provide a lot of entertainment. I really enjoyed reading your piece.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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This is a really fun piece, Debi. I can just imagine the mischief Patch and Ruby get up to and it sounds like they get on together really well and provide a lot of entertainment. I really enjoyed reading your piece.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Hi Jacob, thanks so much for such a kind review and comments for my fourth poem of these two silly cats. I appreciate you having some fun with me.
Love, Debi
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
This is such a delightful poem, Debi. Playfully unfolding in a rambling romp to a happy ever after ending. Beautifully rhymed, full of fun and a joy to read. Thank you x
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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This is such a delightful poem, Debi. Playfully unfolding in a rambling romp to a happy ever after ending. Beautifully rhymed, full of fun and a joy to read. Thank you x
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Hi Shirley, thanks so much for such a sweet review and comments for my fourth poem of these two silly cats. I appreciate you having some fun with me.
Love, Debi
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is so funny, adorable, and really cute. I couldn't help but smile. I could see my boys there. Expecially AJ, he's just a CAD. LOL Thank you for sharing this with us.
nd Ruby said "I'll come see you"
"A party is what we should do" (If this is part of what Ruby said, you don't need all the quotation marks, just at the beginning and end of the dialogue not each line. The same is true in a few more lines.)
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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This is so funny, adorable, and really cute. I couldn't help but smile. I could see my boys there. Expecially AJ, he's just a CAD. LOL Thank you for sharing this with us.
nd Ruby said "I'll come see you"
"A party is what we should do" (If this is part of what Ruby said, you don't need all the quotation marks, just at the beginning and end of the dialogue not each line. The same is true in a few more lines.)
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much, sweetheart and a big, "DUH!" I can't believe I did that and so I thank you so very much Barb for your catching those quotations mistakes. I am not used to using them in my poetry but I know better than that. You are a saint and once again, thank you!!! Love, Debi
Comment from DonandVicki
A clever piece of work that could be developed into a children's poetry book IF you changed the line: "Some meowgaritas were alright" . Other than that it would be ok for kids.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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A clever piece of work that could be developed into a children's poetry book IF you changed the line: "Some meowgaritas were alright" . Other than that it would be ok for kids.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for your review and kind comments. This is the fourth Patch and Ruby poem so far, and the original script I wrote did not include alcohol. But then someone mentioned the meowgarita and I did think it was cute, how ever not appropriate for kids. I agree. I actually may go back to my original poem. Thanks for your suggestions and kind words. Love, Debi