Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Bill, This is a very well written and heart-breaking betrayal poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very good emotions in your words. Picture goes well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

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 Comment Written 26-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024

Thanks, Teri

reply by Teri7 on 26-Sep-2024

You are so welcome! Blessings, Teri

Comment from Spitfire

Exceptional

A winner in my book. Betrayal is evident in the action of the speaker's wife. She did their son wrong too. Enough going on in the lines of this poem to write a novel.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024

Thank you, Shari, for the great review and the big six. Bill

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

An excellent poem for the betrayal contest - very sad, as a child was also betrayed, left unwanted. Now the betrayal feels even deeper, with even the child's family gone, and the man left alone. As for the woman? She's long gone and forgotten.Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy

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 Comment Written 26-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024

Thanks, Wendy