Comment from Esther Brown

Excellent

Carol that was beyond sweet. How many years has it been? Mike will linger I suspect as long as you need him. Funny how some stick around and others move on. My Dad comes to mind a lot. My mom is a busy one off to do other things in heaven. I dedicated my Grandpa are you awake story to Mom. Dad was in Hawaii for his tropical residency and they always called it their "honeymoon". She could hula dance. Morgan died on my mom's birthday.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024

My heart always go out to you too, Esther. Mike passed away Aug. 9, 2019. I think of my Mom, Mikey, Wendy and my cousin Penny a lot. Sometimes DJ creeps in especially around my birthday. the others my brother, my dad, etc weren't exactly very nice so they aren't hanging around me that's for sure. Thanks so much for the review.
Smiles, Carol

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is so beautiful, Carol, such poetic prose! Your magical memories stir the senses and convey a depth of love between you that is destined to be everlasting. Your birthday tribute actually makes me feel very guilty because I've just had a massive row with my husband tonight and I realise, reading this love story, that time is very short and hurtful words are not ever ones that I would want stored away. Thanks for sharing, Carol. Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024

Thanks Debbie...We never know when our time is coming and it's difficult to not have arguments...after all we are human... but always make up before the night ends...because you never know if you will get the chance. Thank you so much for the kind review.
Smiles, Carol

Comment from Amelie Johns

Exceptional

This is a lovely dedication to your late husband. Beautifully written. I love the fine details. And the metaphors. Particularly the 'jack in the box....' and 'those last moments we shared galloped....' Thank you for sharing.
Amelie

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024

Thank you for your kindness and the thoughtful comments. I so appreciate it. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I hate doing reviews on my phone,I just wrote half a full sheet and lost it.

I loved this poem ... Happy Birthday Mike! He is still with you in all the incredible memories you have shared with us. How can he not be there in your heart always until you are together again ready to make fresh memories in Heaven. You wrote this poem from your heart. That is something you do, whatever you write, that is why you must never stop. Mike would not want you to. Love you lots dear friend.

I have been in hospital since the early hours of Monday morning. I had a bad reaction to a pill that I have been taking for years and it brought on a mega asthma attack. The doctors and nurses were incredibly kind and I am on the mend. I can breathe again on my own. I seem to be getting them more now. Getting old is not a nice time of life! lol. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024

Sorry it has taken me two days to get back to you.... and you better be getting better by now. Between you and Karen, I am losing my sanity and my support. Listen to me...going on about myself and both of you need special care and lots of support. Asthma isn't fun...Mike had it bad too. Please be careful. I miss you and want you to be healthy. Love you lots - Carol

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

Happy birthday to Mike. Celebrate however you wish. I think we can go inside our memories and replay the bits we like. And, us creative types can enhance and add to things for better veiwing. Love to you friend. Karen

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024

Thanks so much, Karen... He taught me to laugh at the little stuff and love with every fiber I have... Two lessons that I try never to forget. I appreciate the review and comments.
Smiles, Carol

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 24-Sep-2024

:-)

Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

Thank God for memories and the way they can take us back in time with people we've lost, if only for a moment. He is undoubtedly so proud of the way you've not only kept your promise to keep writing but excelled at it. Happy birthday to Mike.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024

Thank you, Marilyn. Your review and comments mean so much to me. I almost quit yeterday and then during the night it seemed as if he was on my mind, telling me I better not dare to it...and I got up and wrote the story.... The mystery of life.
Smiles, Carol

reply by Marilyn Hamilton on 24-Sep-2024

Carol, if you quit, me and the hound of hell will be at your doorstep and you will be asking, WHO LET THE DAMN DOGS OUT?! lol

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024

LOL Thanks!

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

'I will Always Love You' by Whitney Houston I think is my very favorite song ever. I think that song encompasses romance. I know today has to be a difficult day for you. I will be praying for you all day.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024

Thanks, Barbara... My thoughts have been on Mike and Mikey a lot lately....as it shows in my posts. maybe they just want to remind me how special they both were... but believe me...I could never forget.
Smiles, Carol

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Happy Birthday, Mike! I didn't know Mike, but I feel like I should have, just from everything you've shared about him. I would have happily stopped off for a few drinks, and laughs are the best medicine for everything.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024

I know beyond a shadow of a doubt, you and Mike would have been best friends. I don't think he even felt he'd reached any form of adulthood until he was approaching 50.... He worked hard, but he also played hard. We were so opposite, yet we fit together like a puzzle. And laughter... we did a lot of that. I think that's why I think you are so special..Your smile, your humor and the little things you say that make me feel special.
Smiles and hugs, Carol

reply by Ric Myworld on 24-Sep-2024

I wish I'd gotten the chance to know him. We can never have too many friends. And Mike seemed to be my kind of person. On Christmas Eve, when I was 57 my mother made the remark, you're still a 15-year-old, unpredictable and always into something, when I took a plastic banana from a fruit bowl, filled it with water, and ran through the house spurting everyone as I screamed "Ooh, tallywacker." Yes, I'm a bad boy in many ways. But like I say, "I'll never grow up, never grow up, never grow up!" Smiles and hugs back at you! Ric

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024

Wonderful! I can imagine him grabbing one and doing the exact same thing by your side... No wonder the kids did such horrible stuff. LOL Yes, you would have been two of a kind....Smiles and hugs, Carol

reply by Ric Myworld on 24-Sep-2024

I'd would have loved him. Life's too short to worry about the little things most stay so consumed with. I refuse. :-)

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024

That's why I think you are so special!!!

Comment from SimianSavant

Excellent

Thanks for sharing this tribute to what I assume is a very important loved one you have lost. It has the feel of a literal recounting of events and feelings in the moment rather than a fictional story for a novel, and as such, I don't suggest making any changes apart from this minor technical thing:

When using quotes inside of a passage that is already a quotation, use single quotes to differentiate it. For example:

"I don't want for us to argue over who's the 'bad guy' in this situation," Bob said to his wife. (This applies to 'alligator' in your story).

Kind regards to you in your remembrance and commemorating of past times,

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024

Thanks for the advice and for the kind review. I certainly appreciate both. The tribute is to my late husband è the love of my life.
Smiles, Carol

Comment from Brenda Strauser

Excellent

This is so beautiful. I could feel.your love for your husband through the beautiful memories you put in this poem. Very descriptive and heartfelt
I enjoyed reading it. Well written.

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024

Thank you, Brenda.... He always made me laugh and I often wondered if he'd actually made it to adulthood. Of course, he had because when it came to work - construction or truck driving and even helping to run my catering business...he gave it his all and then some.
Smiles, Carol