Autumn Joys
A beautiful season44 total reviews
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Barbara,
I don't understand poems either, though I've written a few of them since I've been on here. I like the picture and the descriptions. Its nice to go to bed at night and snuggle under the covers when there is a crisp chill to the air. I like the fall, it just doesn't last long enough here. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Hello Barbara,
I don't understand poems either, though I've written a few of them since I've been on here. I like the picture and the descriptions. Its nice to go to bed at night and snuggle under the covers when there is a crisp chill to the air. I like the fall, it just doesn't last long enough here. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Wow. What a beautiful Haiku about the color of Autumn. I especially like the second line, so descriptive. I counted the syllables and they were correct. It would be nice if the last line is more like a Satori.
Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Wow. What a beautiful Haiku about the color of Autumn. I especially like the second line, so descriptive. I counted the syllables and they were correct. It would be nice if the last line is more like a Satori.
Well done.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I have no clue what a Satori is.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I would say that you cut yourself short by saying that don't do poetry. You did a very nice job on this Haiku. You should do more Haiku for awhile and then add in another style of poem and try that. You might surprise yourself and will most likely end up loving it. Thanks for sharing and good luck.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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I would say that you cut yourself short by saying that don't do poetry. You did a very nice job on this Haiku. You should do more Haiku for awhile and then add in another style of poem and try that. You might surprise yourself and will most likely end up loving it. Thanks for sharing and good luck.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
I am not a practitioner of Japanese style poetry, so I am not a judge of style except for the syllable count. You met the standard and the story is complete. Very well done for the first attempt.
Z
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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I am not a practitioner of Japanese style poetry, so I am not a judge of style except for the syllable count. You met the standard and the story is complete. Very well done for the first attempt.
Z
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome
Comment from GWHARGIS
I'm no poet so I can't advise, but I can tell you freestyle or free form is the way to go. Lol. Less rules involved. This was very cool. I liked the imagery of the autumn colors and the hint at the cooler weather. Gretchen
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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I'm no poet so I can't advise, but I can tell you freestyle or free form is the way to go. Lol. Less rules involved. This was very cool. I liked the imagery of the autumn colors and the hint at the cooler weather. Gretchen
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. But with those poems don't you need some sort of cadence. I never understood the vowel stresses.
Comment from Janet Foor
A lovely seasonal haiku Barbara. The imagery is delightful. The syllable count is perfect. Very nicely done for your first haiku.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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A lovely seasonal haiku Barbara. The imagery is delightful. The syllable count is perfect. Very nicely done for your first haiku.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Barbara,
This is an excellent haiku poem!
The syllable count is correct, it is about nature, and your description is very colorful.
It's a little difficult to read because it is dark blue.
Nice poem, Barbara!
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Barbara,
This is an excellent haiku poem!
The syllable count is correct, it is about nature, and your description is very colorful.
It's a little difficult to read because it is dark blue.
Nice poem, Barbara!
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Don't play yourself down, Barbara:)) This is a great Autumnal haiku! Brilliant colours in the visual complemented with your 5-7-5 verse, vibrant with its evocative description...and not one word wasted. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Don't play yourself down, Barbara:)) This is a great Autumnal haiku! Brilliant colours in the visual complemented with your 5-7-5 verse, vibrant with its evocative description...and not one word wasted. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
I am totally ignorant of Haikus and many other poem types. I just write poems that rhyme and hope for the best. This seems like a fine attempt to me, but please do not blame me if I am not correct. I do not know any better.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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I am totally ignorant of Haikus and many other poem types. I just write poems that rhyme and hope for the best. This seems like a fine attempt to me, but please do not blame me if I am not correct. I do not know any better.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. You're a good poet.
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Thank you. I think a simple poet may be more accurate. I like to stay in my comfort zone. I am far too old to try venturing too far away from where I am at what I feel is my best spot.
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I honestly believe is just as age and not a reflection of who we are. That being said, my body often laughs at me.
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Not only are you cute and talented, but you make me laugh as well.
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Thank you. I believe we need to laugh numerous times every day. I'm honored I was able to cause you to laugh.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Barb,
You should write more poetry, my dear. This is certainly a nice Haiku for my favorite season of the year, Autumn. There are lots of red maple leaves already. They highlight October. The forests never looked prettier.
I count 17 syllables. Just when the color is at its peak, in October, we always get a heavy rainstorm (sometimes the tail end of a hurricane that has followed the eastern coast of the United States right up to Atlantic Canada). So many leaves are stripped from the branches and blown helter-skelter. Limbs are naked. Bare branches slap together, capital claps that echo along a hardwood ridge.
Nicely penned, Barb! Let's have some more.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Hi Barb,
You should write more poetry, my dear. This is certainly a nice Haiku for my favorite season of the year, Autumn. There are lots of red maple leaves already. They highlight October. The forests never looked prettier.
I count 17 syllables. Just when the color is at its peak, in October, we always get a heavy rainstorm (sometimes the tail end of a hurricane that has followed the eastern coast of the United States right up to Atlantic Canada). So many leaves are stripped from the branches and blown helter-skelter. Limbs are naked. Bare branches slap together, capital claps that echo along a hardwood ridge.
Nicely penned, Barb! Let's have some more.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. HUGS!!!
