His Wife
A conflicted man and his sick wife35 total reviews
Comment from Samantha Wymer
This man will have to live with the decision he made it turn away from his sick wife when she needed him the most. That's a man for you, care about themselves first above all else. Great writing. I enjoying reading it.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This man will have to live with the decision he made it turn away from his sick wife when she needed him the most. That's a man for you, care about themselves first above all else. Great writing. I enjoying reading it.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Yes. He just could not face the reality of losing his wife. Sometimes when people are faced with losing a loved one they pull away because they think that when the loved one dies, there will be less pain if they've pulled away already. It never works that way.
Thank you for your lovely comments
Comment from Shanbreen
Yes, Pam, he's indeed a frightened selfish man. I knew a guy like that who alwyas talked about his lust being in his mind. He actually bragged that he was not acting on his thoughts.
I wonder if the guy you write about ever loved his wife. Was it only lust that made him envy the single guy. He says he loved his wife, but after only brief bereavement period he goes back to the club. Could this be a case of an overactive libido, perhaps a medical condition? Oversexed, perhaps? BTW, did she lose weight because she desired or was it to please her husband? Medical condition, perhaps? Just curious.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Yes, Pam, he's indeed a frightened selfish man. I knew a guy like that who alwyas talked about his lust being in his mind. He actually bragged that he was not acting on his thoughts.
I wonder if the guy you write about ever loved his wife. Was it only lust that made him envy the single guy. He says he loved his wife, but after only brief bereavement period he goes back to the club. Could this be a case of an overactive libido, perhaps a medical condition? Oversexed, perhaps? BTW, did she lose weight because she desired or was it to please her husband? Medical condition, perhaps? Just curious.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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My friend. I have a question for you. What was it that I wrote that made you think he went back to the club after the wake?
Where in my poem did I indicate that?
is it the last couplet
you're thinking about?
That last couplet just meant that he was back to reality, but it was too late
Thank you for your usual wonderful comments
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Pam, first of all, I am so glad you are coming back (being your old self). It seems so much a part of you that I think it best that you are reinvolved, however slowly.
Regarding the guy going back, I didn't see him going back to the place his father-in-law didn't accept him. Perhaps I am off track, but after his wife died, and his father-in-law blamed him (not welcome at the wake), what was his purpose of going back? I thought he went back to the club to drown his sorrow in the only way he knew how.
However, when I reread it it, you specify that it was much too late, but he's back today. I should have realized that "much too late" would not be a concern at the club. It had to be back to the house. Sorry! Wishing you a speedy recovery.
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I love the way you get involved in my poetry. I'm
Probably going to make seven more posts here then leave for at least a year. Any money I have left over I'll buy cent pumps for others including you. Thank you, my friend
It hurts to sit up and do these reviews. And it isn't fair to others that I post my stuff, but can't review theirs.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
A powerful and moving poem about a cheating husband, and his long suffering wife who finally had enough of his lying ways. I like the narrative story and the image chosen
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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A powerful and moving poem about a cheating husband, and his long suffering wife who finally had enough of his lying ways. I like the narrative story and the image chosen
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments
She did not commit suicide rather she was very ill from something like cancer, which was causing her to lose all the weight and to cry
Maybe I should've squeezed the word cancer in there somewhere so everybody would know that she was sick. I thought I had made it clear in the note she had written about being sick
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
You certainly can tell a story in your poetry. A very sad poem about a flawed man who is unhappy with the life he chose and blames it on the person he chose to share it with. Unfortunately too common of a story. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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You certainly can tell a story in your poetry. A very sad poem about a flawed man who is unhappy with the life he chose and blames it on the person he chose to share it with. Unfortunately too common of a story. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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I wouldn't say he actually blamed his wife. I would say he just couldn't handle her illness. so he stayed away and then it got to be too late to have any kind of relationship with her. After the wake he finally got back to reality, but it was too late.
Thank you for your wonderful review
Comment from patcelaw
This is a well written poem and expresses a very frightening premise with the young girl dancing, and the man in the scene. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This is a well written poem and expresses a very frightening premise with the young girl dancing, and the man in the scene. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your lovely comments and a great review
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Pam,
What a sad story of a man who should never have married if he never could stay faithful. He really did ignore her if he didn't she was sick when she was always tired and losing weight. It is a wonder they stayed together for so long if she knew he was cheating. I can understand why her family didn't want him at the wake and the funeral. It always seems this type of man only realizes the good he had when it is gone
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good day.
Joan
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Hi Pam,
What a sad story of a man who should never have married if he never could stay faithful. He really did ignore her if he didn't she was sick when she was always tired and losing weight. It is a wonder they stayed together for so long if she knew he was cheating. I can understand why her family didn't want him at the wake and the funeral. It always seems this type of man only realizes the good he had when it is gone
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good day.
Joan
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments. They are much appreciated.
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You're most welcome, Pam.
Joan
Comment from Jacob1395
You brought his feelings out well in your piece, Pam. I was shaking my head as he was thinking of ditching his ring, especially when he was feeling jealous of the single men. An engaging piece. I thought it was really well written and I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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You brought his feelings out well in your piece, Pam. I was shaking my head as he was thinking of ditching his ring, especially when he was feeling jealous of the single men. An engaging piece. I thought it was really well written and I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your thoughtful and lovely comments and excellent rating
Comment from Begin Again
Commuication is becoming a lost art and it's so sad. Thirty years of love tossed away because they couldn't talk about what they were feeling. Your poem is exceptional in telling the story. Great job!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Commuication is becoming a lost art and it's so sad. Thirty years of love tossed away because they couldn't talk about what they were feeling. Your poem is exceptional in telling the story. Great job!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Smiles
Thank you for your lovely comments and a great review
Comment from Wendy G
I wish I had a six for you for this very well written poem about a failed marriage, his temptations, her death, his remorse. Smooth rhyme and perfect metre, and unfortunately a topic that is as relevant today as it ever. Very well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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I wish I had a six for you for this very well written poem about a failed marriage, his temptations, her death, his remorse. Smooth rhyme and perfect metre, and unfortunately a topic that is as relevant today as it ever. Very well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your lovely comments and a wonderful review
Comment from royowen
I don't quite understand that anyone can be a little underwhelmed in a long term relationship, also if there are children involved we owe them to set an example, beautifully written as always Pam, it's so good to se you back, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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I don't quite understand that anyone can be a little underwhelmed in a long term relationship, also if there are children involved we owe them to set an example, beautifully written as always Pam, it's so good to se you back, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and encouragement
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Most welcome