Willing Hearts
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Comment from royowen
It seems to be approaching the story's conclusion with the difficulties of getting to understand each other, and working out the wrinkles, and discovering their feelings are much stronger than their apprehensions, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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It seems to be approaching the story's conclusion with the difficulties of getting to understand each other, and working out the wrinkles, and discovering their feelings are much stronger than their apprehensions, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome
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Most welcome
Comment from lancellot
An emotional chapter with your male protagonist making wrong judgements and actions, that need to be fixed. Also, questions about family planning and who be working. I'm sure this will really appeal to your target audience.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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An emotional chapter with your male protagonist making wrong judgements and actions, that need to be fixed. Also, questions about family planning and who be working. I'm sure this will really appeal to your target audience.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
Interesting chapter. It sound like Noah was quick to assume she was pregnant. I guess having a pregnancy test did make it look suspicious. People are quick to jump to conclusions. They seem to really care about each other. I would think he has some baggage that might make him hard to live with but he has soft side.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Interesting chapter. It sound like Noah was quick to assume she was pregnant. I guess having a pregnancy test did make it look suspicious. People are quick to jump to conclusions. They seem to really care about each other. I would think he has some baggage that might make him hard to live with but he has soft side.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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I think Noah was quick to jump to conclusions because he's starting to love her and was protecting himself. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
It's difficult to find errors when you're reading something that seems to flow well...This chapter is no exception. kay
I pray it does > I pray it is
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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It's difficult to find errors when you're reading something that seems to flow well...This chapter is no exception. kay
I pray it does > I pray it is
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the catch. I made the correction. I always appreciate help. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jacob1395
I'm really intrigued to find out what will happen to Sarah after this chapter. I love how you're increasing the tension surrounding her pregnancy news. An excellent piece, Barbara. I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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I'm really intrigued to find out what will happen to Sarah after this chapter. I love how you're increasing the tension surrounding her pregnancy news. An excellent piece, Barbara. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Barbara,
This was an excellent chapter about a growing relationship between Sami and Noah, and about Noah finding out about Sarah, even before Bob. Sarah is very supportive about Noah, but I'm afraid her revealing that she thinks wedding bells are in the future and that Noah will have to change for that to happen may end up being problematic.
You, also, revealed that Noah had another reason for wanting to help the girls who were held captive. It was a sad revelation.
Great job.
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Hi Barbara,
This was an excellent chapter about a growing relationship between Sami and Noah, and about Noah finding out about Sarah, even before Bob. Sarah is very supportive about Noah, but I'm afraid her revealing that she thinks wedding bells are in the future and that Noah will have to change for that to happen may end up being problematic.
You, also, revealed that Noah had another reason for wanting to help the girls who were held captive. It was a sad revelation.
Great job.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I think Noah will have to decide how much he loves Sami and if the relationship is worth the effort.
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Yeah, I think they are teetering on a brink!
Comment from jim vecchio
No errors spotted! A great addition to your book. Wish I could have the motivation for another chapter in mine. It was wise to relate the incident in Sami's past. Adds much to her character, and I see how you are foreshadowing the relationship of Sami and Noah.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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No errors spotted! A great addition to your book. Wish I could have the motivation for another chapter in mine. It was wise to relate the incident in Sami's past. Adds much to her character, and I see how you are foreshadowing the relationship of Sami and Noah.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
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I love your novel and the characters.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Barbara
I know. I also use fan story as the vehicle to polish my poetry. And I am also amazed at what people don't catch.
I read things pretty closely and check for errors
You say you're halfway through. I thought you were near the end so there's some more exciting happenings later down the road.
I guess they still have to catch Chem and rescue the girls
And we have to find out if Sarah's pregnant or not. My favorite character is Jasper.
Here. Should this be low rider?
"lower rider pulled up and forced her inside. I ran over but was too "
Here. It should be back to normal.
"you arrest Chen and our lives go back normal, you won't forget me."
Here. Do you want to say seemed to be suspended
"her. Holding her, his kiss seemed suspended in time. He set her "
I enjoyed reading your book chapter
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Hi, Barbara
I know. I also use fan story as the vehicle to polish my poetry. And I am also amazed at what people don't catch.
I read things pretty closely and check for errors
You say you're halfway through. I thought you were near the end so there's some more exciting happenings later down the road.
I guess they still have to catch Chem and rescue the girls
And we have to find out if Sarah's pregnant or not. My favorite character is Jasper.
Here. Should this be low rider?
"lower rider pulled up and forced her inside. I ran over but was too "
Here. It should be back to normal.
"you arrest Chen and our lives go back normal, you won't forget me."
Here. Do you want to say seemed to be suspended
"her. Holding her, his kiss seemed suspended in time. He set her "
I enjoyed reading your book chapter
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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You're right it should be low rider. I can't believe I missed that. Thank you for the catches. I have made the corrections and appreciate the help.
Comment from Begin Again
Another rewarding chapter, Barbara. Enjoyed the relationship as it grows between Sami and Noah and how he is learning to trust her with his feelings and she is giving in return. Very well done!
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Another rewarding chapter, Barbara. Enjoyed the relationship as it grows between Sami and Noah and how he is learning to trust her with his feelings and she is giving in return. Very well done!
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the encouraging review.