The Old Home Place
A visit back.21 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This cinquain, The Old Home Place, has the proper formatting and speaks to the memory ghosts which are conjured when visiting an old haunt. ............................
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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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This cinquain, The Old Home Place, has the proper formatting and speaks to the memory ghosts which are conjured when visiting an old haunt. ............................
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Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thank you Bill, I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I like this, but I think the word "hover" would be a better choice than "approach." But, of course, that is just one woman's (unsolicited) opinion, and it brings with it the potential for being worth exactly what you paid for it!! hahaha. Cool artwork to spotlight this haunting and intriguing poem! xoxo
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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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I like this, but I think the word "hover" would be a better choice than "approach." But, of course, that is just one woman's (unsolicited) opinion, and it brings with it the potential for being worth exactly what you paid for it!! hahaha. Cool artwork to spotlight this haunting and intriguing poem! xoxo
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Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thank you Rachelle, You are right. I think hover sounds better, I'll sure your idea. I appreciate the suggestion and review.
Beth
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Of course! I appreciate the fact that you accept it in the spirit of writer-to-writer camaraderie in which it's offered. It never ceases to amaze me how many members on here become indignant if you tell them anything except that they're fabulous. (They're the ones who never improve, I've noticed. The only place they stand out is in their own minds.) xoxox
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I appreciate any suggestion that makes it sound better to me. I don't always make changes people suggest. I may not have the best idea but if like mine better I keep it. Your idea was an improvement.
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I agree, but some people get insulted/indignant if a reviewer ever even suggests something...that kind of "how dare you" attitude.