Missing Him
Moonlight brings memories of sweeter nights.27 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I'm sure you miss Evan everyday. You had such a strong marriage and knew how to support one another. You met the five-line poetic structure well and invoked that feeling of yearning for your beloved.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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I'm sure you miss Evan everyday. You had such a strong marriage and knew how to support one another. You met the five-line poetic structure well and invoked that feeling of yearning for your beloved.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank you Helen, You can't help but miss someone who was a part of you for so many years. I'm not in grief but every now and again I really wish he could still be with me.
Beth
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Comment from Shanbreen
The imagery is so appropriate. Your poem is sad but lovely in the sense that I want to find your love and put him on the bed in the picture. Well done. Best for the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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The imagery is so appropriate. Your poem is sad but lovely in the sense that I want to find your love and put him on the bed in the picture. Well done. Best for the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thank of reviewing my little poem. I appreciate you comments.
Beth
Comment from royowen
What beautiful piece of artwork, and a fitting illustration, to this sad, but reflective five line poem, so many have lost their partners in life, and I think you're missing yours Beth, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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What beautiful piece of artwork, and a fitting illustration, to this sad, but reflective five line poem, so many have lost their partners in life, and I think you're missing yours Beth, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you Roy, Couples seldom leave this earth at the same time so at least one of every couple are likely to experience loss.
Beth
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That?s true
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Your contest entry did a great job with imagery and emotion. I could feel the loneliness and heartache of missing a loved one. This is an excellent contest entry. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Your contest entry did a great job with imagery and emotion. I could feel the loneliness and heartache of missing a loved one. This is an excellent contest entry. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank Barbara, I appreciate those comments. I'm glad the poem had emotional impact.
Beth
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Beth. I hope you are well
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
I was trying to double check that you have five lines. There is not a break between lines so you don't know where the first line ends and the next one begins. So I could not tell that it was five lines. Suggestion, put a space between lines.
Your poem is emotional. It has a lot of peaceful imagery
It is not rhymed and has no set meter. So, it's free verse.
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Hi, Beth. I hope you are well
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
I was trying to double check that you have five lines. There is not a break between lines so you don't know where the first line ends and the next one begins. So I could not tell that it was five lines. Suggestion, put a space between lines.
Your poem is emotional. It has a lot of peaceful imagery
It is not rhymed and has no set meter. So, it's free verse.
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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I tried my best to put space between those lines but it was way too much space so I finally gave up. Another font might work better but I like this one. Thanks for a great review.
Beth
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written five line poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest may you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Thank you for sharing this nice work. Patricia
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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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This is a very well written five line poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest may you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Thank you for sharing this nice work. Patricia
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Patricia. I know you still miss your husband too.
Beth
Comment from Begin Again
Wish I had a six for you, Beth. Your words are so true. Nightitme always seems to be the worst, especially when I can't sleep. I lay there and stare at everything that was us. Loved your poem.
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Wish I had a six for you, Beth. Your words are so true. Nightitme always seems to be the worst, especially when I can't sleep. I lay there and stare at everything that was us. Loved your poem.
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Carol. That is sweet of you. I know you know well how much it hurt to miss the love of your life.
Beth