There Is A God
A true story of dumb cattle rustlers.46 total reviews
Comment from Mintybee
Wow, what a traumatic event. "Be sure your sins will find you out," right? I'm glad the thieves were dumb and were caught quickly. The pacing in this story was really good, which I find is especially important in short stories.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Wow, what a traumatic event. "Be sure your sins will find you out," right? I'm glad the thieves were dumb and were caught quickly. The pacing in this story was really good, which I find is especially important in short stories.
Mintybee
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you. I try to get right to the point in short stories. I have started reading some stories and found myself bored waiting to see where the story is going.
Comment from Thesis
That was a story that was unsettling. To think someone would trespass on someone's property, kill innocent animals, steal the meat and hides, and think they could get away with it is amazing. I'm so sorry for your loss. Your husband showed his good chracter donating the meat to the Sheriff.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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That was a story that was unsettling. To think someone would trespass on someone's property, kill innocent animals, steal the meat and hides, and think they could get away with it is amazing. I'm so sorry for your loss. Your husband showed his good chracter donating the meat to the Sheriff.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you. We were spread out and couldn't always watch everything, and thieves took advantage of us more than once.
Comment from wilkswrites
This is such a sad story. Thank you for sharing. Those poor animals. I hope the bandits did some time for that massacre. How awful.
You did a good job of leading your reader through the story. Adding dialogue and showing us instead of telling everything was a plus. For example, when Des came in, you had him do the talking instead of you telling us what happened.
Nice job. Good reading.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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This is such a sad story. Thank you for sharing. Those poor animals. I hope the bandits did some time for that massacre. How awful.
You did a good job of leading your reader through the story. Adding dialogue and showing us instead of telling everything was a plus. For example, when Des came in, you had him do the talking instead of you telling us what happened.
Nice job. Good reading.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you for reading and the six stars. It turned out to be two teenage boys. They had no means to repay us so Des had them work for us hauling hay. I think the boys would rather have done jail time than pick up hay in the hot summer. Lol
Comment from Earl Corp
This is so strange it could be fiction. It's very cool how you were able to catch the bastards who did this. Not many stories like this have a happy ending. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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This is so strange it could be fiction. It's very cool how you were able to catch the bastards who did this. Not many stories like this have a happy ending. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you for reading and the six stars. I guarantee you that every word is true. It was hard to believe thieves could be so careless. It turned out to be two teenage boys, and I imagine they were getting nervous because they must have been there for some time.
Comment from Wendy G
I am glad those criminals were apprehended, They were extremely cruel as well as stupid. I hate to think of the suffering of the poor animals and the trauma they endured. Thanks for sharing your story, and best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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I am glad those criminals were apprehended, They were extremely cruel as well as stupid. I hate to think of the suffering of the poor animals and the trauma they endured. Thanks for sharing your story, and best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you. Even the sheriff was appalled by the cruelty of the thieves. It took the cattle some time to trust anyone.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
This is an amazing story, my friend! You did a wonderful job of telling it. It was flawless and engaging. I certainly didn't expect the ending. It almost read like flash fiction. Your surprise ending was great!!
I'm just really glad they were caught. The fact they left their jacket behind was hilarious!!
Thanks for sharing, and best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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This is an amazing story, my friend! You did a wonderful job of telling it. It was flawless and engaging. I certainly didn't expect the ending. It almost read like flash fiction. Your surprise ending was great!!
I'm just really glad they were caught. The fact they left their jacket behind was hilarious!!
Thanks for sharing, and best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you. I guarantee that every word was true. Two teenage boys were the culprits. They must have gotten scared and forgot the jacket.
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That's hilarious, or would be if it hadn't been so destructive. Be sure your sins will find you out, right?
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, prettybluebirds
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
It's hard to believe that 1996 was almost 30 years ago. Time flies so fast.
Those sounded like pretty stupid rustlers. I'm glad that they were caught. I just wish they could've restored your barn to what it was. Did you have a lock on it? If you didn't, did you get one after this incident?
God does have a sense of humor. And He showed it there.
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Hi, prettybluebirds
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
It's hard to believe that 1996 was almost 30 years ago. Time flies so fast.
Those sounded like pretty stupid rustlers. I'm glad that they were caught. I just wish they could've restored your barn to what it was. Did you have a lock on it? If you didn't, did you get one after this incident?
God does have a sense of humor. And He showed it there.
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you. It was a pair of teenage boys, and I think they must have gotten scared and forgot the jacket. Yes, there was a lock on the barn, but they used bolt cutters to remove it.
Comment from pome lover
What a neat story!And though I am sorry for the loss of your husband,
what a joy it is to read a story with a happy ending, and a cute one, at that. I was surprised, however, that the culprits gave up so easily. What awful men!
I bet you really have your hands full without your husband. I hope you still have Reo. Anyway, I enjoyed your story, and it was well told! Deserves a 6.
Katharine
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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What a neat story!And though I am sorry for the loss of your husband,
what a joy it is to read a story with a happy ending, and a cute one, at that. I was surprised, however, that the culprits gave up so easily. What awful men!
I bet you really have your hands full without your husband. I hope you still have Reo. Anyway, I enjoyed your story, and it was well told! Deserves a 6.
Katharine
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you for reading and the six stars. The culprits were two teenage boys, and I'm sure they got into more of a mess than they intended. We had quit farming before my husband passed away, and I don't think Reo is still living.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
What a very sad story about these poor animals and their suffering. How cruel some people are and selfish too. I am glad they were caught and I hope they paid the price. A fascinating story and thank you for sharing this with us, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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What a very sad story about these poor animals and their suffering. How cruel some people are and selfish too. I am glad they were caught and I hope they paid the price. A fascinating story and thank you for sharing this with us, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you. The culprits turned out to be two teenage boys. They had no means to pay us, so Des made them work it off hauling hay in the hot summer sun. I think they would rather have done jail time.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I thoroughly enjoyed the story. I always knew God has a sense of humor.You've seen a platypus haven't you? If they were starving take one, but butchering them in front of their family? Inhumane. Dolts are everywhere. Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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I thoroughly enjoyed the story. I always knew God has a sense of humor.You've seen a platypus haven't you? If they were starving take one, but butchering them in front of their family? Inhumane. Dolts are everywhere. Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you for reading and the six stars. It was a sad situation with a good ending. That didn't happen very often. Our farm was large, and we often had trouble with thieves.
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You wrote well. Karen